ok... so i changed this story... completely.... it was too short... i wanted more... and the readers wanted more... so i fixed it... or attempted to... i'll let you decide if i did a good job or not...

disclaimer... i do not own maximum ride. If i did, max and fang would be together and since they're not... i'm not JP...


Chaper 1

3rd person POV

Dominique is a quiet person. She always has been. And it goes right along with her look. She has naturally black hair, dark obsidian eyes, and she always wears black clothes. Most people think that she's either emo or a cutter, and sometimes both. But they couldn't have been more wrong. Dominique is actually a very happy person.

She has great parents who love her, she has a wonderful house, and she doesn't feel the need to change who she is to fit in.

But that was before her 15th birthday. At exactly 12:28 everyday, A sharp pain shoots through her back. After the third time it happened, tiny black wings slowly grow, inch by inch, through the torn skin in between her shoulder blades.

Dominique POV

Everything has changed. The wings on my back made everything difficult. Buying clothes especially. I now have to buy baggy shirts and make sure that you can't see my wings. I always constantly having to make sure that they are hidden.

Right now, it's not that big of a problem because my wings are still only about a foot long, but they get bigger everyday.

I looked down at my watch. 12:22. Crap! I should have already been in the nurse's office. She is the only other person who knows about my wings. I got excused from class and walked quickly up to the nurse. She closed the door behind me and as soon as it clicked the pain began.

Normally the pain only lasts about a minute to a minute and a half.

I waited for it to stop. It never did, it only got worse. Why isn't it stopping? I thought as I writhed in pain.

Then it got so bad that I thought my back would erupt into flames. The world around me went black.

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When I woke up, I was laying on the couch in the corner of the nurse's office. I was laying on my stomach, and I had on one of the nurse's scrub shirts. I slowly stood up and stretched my aching muscles and my arm brushed up against something feathery. I looked behind me and saw my wings.

Only, they weren't there one foot length. They looked fully grown. I don't know exactly how wide they are, maybe thirteen feet. The door opened behind me, the nurse walking in with a bottle of water and a black shirt with the school mascot on it.

"Hey. Thank goodness you're awake. I got a new shirt for you to wear and a bottle of water. How do you feel?" She handed me the bottle of water and I gulped in down in just a few seconds.

"I feel like a pair of huge wings just sprouted out of my back. Why did this happed so suddenly? I don't get it." I sat back on the couch, the new shirt in hand.

"I don't know why it happened, Dominique, but you need to get back to class before you get into trouble. Put that shirt on and go." I pulled the scrub shirt off and replaced it with the black shirt. I thanked the nurse for the shirt and the water and slowly walked out of her office.

I walked with my head down, causing me to run into someone. "Sorry," I mumbled, looking up at the person I hit. It was a boy about my age with strawberry blond hair, pale skin, and milky blue eyes.

"It's fine. Don't worry about it. Hey, we're new here and don't know where to go to get to our classes. Do you think you could help us?" he asked me, motioning to the three people standing with him.

This should be fun. Note the sarcasm.


ok... so this is it.... and yes it is somewhat short but it's longer than the first version..... and a little more detailed.... and, i hope, better.... maybe... anyway.... it might take me a while to update the next one... i still have to write it and i have a LOT of stuff to do.... i have english papers to write every week... i have a ton of tests... i have honors classes.... and then i have my responsibilities at home.... and im working on my own story so.... yeah.... i will try to work as much as possible.....

please please review!!!