Jayfeather, here. I got nothing interesting to say apart from thanks for all the support. I'm not as goos a writer as Typholius since I can't see the keys, but I don't give half a mouse-tail as long as somebody is reading this.
But enough chat, let's get on with the story.
Chapter 1
Um, that's not me. What happened to sticking with a character everybody already knew? And who is this Alderkit? This series is starting off with a completely new character that nobody knows anything about... At least in Omen of the Stars we knew about Dovekit and Ivykit from the last book of Power of Three, but this time it's POOF new cat!
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At least, unlike my kithood, you don't have to read about how foolish Alderkit was, chasing after foxes and the such. Oh wow, this takes place way after Bramblestar's Storm if Sorrelkit, Hollykit, and Fernkit are getting their warrior names.
Nvm, Alderkit is just as foolish, he thinks you have to pass an assessment to be made an apprentice. Has nobody ever told him how this works, or is Erin Hunter just trying to add words to the chapter because she ran out of original ideas?
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I already don't like this new character, he reminds me too much of the good dinosaur with all of his young misplaced fears. I hope the perspective switches up throughout the book like it has in the last three series.
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Sparkkit looks fine, I wouldn't mind following her around... not like that! I mean from her point of view, not literally follow her around, you creep!
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Dandelionkit and Juniperkit? I'm almost glad they died, those are terrible names. So terrible, I wouldn't be surprised if it turned out they were fan-given.
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Lionblaze is a bit scary, though. Alderkit suppressed a shiver at the sight of the muscles rippling beneath the the golden warrior's pelt.
Jeeez, that's my brother you're writing about, Erin. Why you have to get so disturbingly creepy about it. Pshh, just be glad you're not my apprentice, Alderkit. If you are so afraid of rippling muscles, then you better stay away from me. *Flex* Oh yeah, so strong!
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Well, it's practically tradition now, so Alderkit is mistakenly called Alderpaw before he gets his apprentice's name on the second paragraph from the bottom of page 10. Just pointing that out. Let's continue.
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Somebody give this cat some herbal tea, he is really freaking out about this apprenticeship. I know I wasn't this terrified for my apprenticeship. Good dinosaur all over the place...
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"Today, you're going to make the elders more comfortable by getting rid of their ticks."
Really? I hate this so much! This exactly what happened on my first day as an apprentice. Are the first few chapters just going to be full of boring rubbish that doesn't help the story progress at all? I mean this is how you bore cats into becoming medicine cats!
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The Great Storm is what they are calling the events of Bramblestar's Storm now? It says here that Dustpelt died during the Great Storm, but I thought he died fighting badgers.
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De-ticking Graystripe and Sandstorm feels wrong. Even though they are now elders, it just feels awkward.
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Oh hey, it's me again. I'm talking with Leafpool about something... Oh dear, now me and Leafpool are staring at Alderpaw for some reason. This is completely out of the blue and I honestly have no idea why they, erm, we are interested in this little cat.
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Well, that's the end of this chapter. It was surprisingly short, and I don't really have too many comments about it. It's a solid story so far- Erin isn't swaying at all from the standard Warriors formula. I just wish I were the main character... *grumblegrumble*
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