As you already know, I've recently posted chapter six to the novel "Mysteries", though it might've been too soon.
My apologies but before I could keep writing, I started to talk to my editor who thinks that this ending was too strong and out of character for Kagome to say, so I need your opinion, as the reader, to decide which ending to the chapter would be better.
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This Sesshoumaru can't stand these encounters any longer…
"I wouldn't do that if I were you," She said in a whisper, still looking down.
His thoughts were interrupted.
How…-
"My powers could repel your claws in an instant," She informed him.
He was taken aback by the information he was given, though he hadn't shown it much on his face.
Impossible, He presumed. No human can possibly bring a demon to its knees.
It was too late for a surprise attack. Sesshoumaru pursued the priestess.
She gasped as his claw had nearly stricken her face. Though she hadn't moved very far from his clutches, it seemed as if there was a moment of hesitation on both of their behalves. Sesshoumaru looked down at his claws, then drew his gaze back towards Kagome.
"I won't miss this time, Miko." She was told.
He had once again thrown his claws rapidly at Kagome, which hit directly into her left shoulder. There was a moment of pause when time seemed to slow. Sesshoumaru's satisfied grin turned into confusion when he was forced backwards off his feet. Sesshoumaru stayed there for an extended amount of time. The forest went dead silent.
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"I'm not in the mood, Sesshoumaru!" Kagome shouted
Sesshoumaru hadn't expected such a forceful threat coming from such a gentle looking creature.
He advanced at her like the night before; accept he hadn't stopped steps in front of her. He'd angrily torn his claw out from behind him, grabbing hold of Kagome's throat. With his thumb on the opposite side of her neck, he started moving it across, a stream of blood pouring as he did so. When about to push his fingers in for the final blow, he unexpectedly relaxed his hand and rested it along side of his body. He turned his back on Kagome, letting his silver hair brush across her face.
"It would be a waste of courage." He barely whispered enough for her to hear.
Of course I will most likely add to the second ending, though that was the rough idea of the ending and my editor seemed to like it.
Please post what you think would be better and I'll get back to writing the rest of the novel as soon as possible.