Disclaimer: I don't own Twilight, the material and character(other them the one's you don't recognize) all belong to Stephanie Meyer.
Summary: Alexander is from the Volturi. He feeds on his "prey", humans, constantly, staying away from other vampires and hunting alone. He could have been a real problem to the human race, until Lolita showed up.
Couple(s): EdwardxBella, JasperxAlice, EmmetxRosalie, OCxOC
OC(s): Lolita and Alexander
Last time:
"Anything really important you have to tell me now Mr. Edward?" I asked. And then I heard a reply I really would like to NOT have heard.
Reviews:
blossom2day-
O.O... very um... good. I WANT MORE!! Please update- I like where you're going with this- but a couple of things- 1.DONT rush the story, It makes it more suspenseful if you let it flow -. 2. Edward and Aro have met before, and Edward would NEVER dare call him old man! lol. 3. Try to make a point to examine where you want this story to go- if you just scribble some things on a piece of paper, usually it doesn't come out too good- NOT SAYING YOU DID THAT BUT- the plot just needs to be a little more... clear I suppose. You don't HAVE to tell us where Alexander went (for example) but you can sort of make it more clear that he left by being more descriptive like- Edward's eyes went wide as he looked back to Alexander who surprisingly wasn't there anymore... Making a character notice the fact that Alexander's gone, just may help us remember it- I know it does for me. It also adds detail because you're describing how the character REACTS to it, which is always good (remember, Edward worries too lol) BUT with all that in mind- I LOVED it and you MUST UPDATE!! Remember that! - Bye!
It Will Be As If I Never Existed-
I'm loving the plot line and I can not wait to read more.
My advise to you is to build up the characters, don't rush this, take your time on it. As a reader, I think we need more information on the main characters, Alexander and Lolita. Oh yeah, i was just wondering, hasn't Aro and Edward met before, New Moon?
Other than this, great start to your fan fiction.
M.
I'd like the thank them They are so helpful, thank you x3 I luv you guys (as friends .-.) I replied on ff to everyone, so I really don't need to write them here do I? Oh I realize that Edward met Aro before, but I decided to change it a bit.
Begin(Lolita's P.O.V)
"I adopted her." Edward said. "I was drunk and I adopted her." I starred at him for a second. Blinking, still completely confused.
"What?" I looked at Renesseme. It really bother me that she was starring at me like I was food. I nodded, accepting the fact that teenage boys get drunk and got up.
"Well, I'll see ya, bye." I walked off into the woods. Renesseme and Edward were arguing as I left.
There was a howl from a distant wolf. I turned to the noise and as soon as I figured it was about ten miles away and turned back to the direction I was heading.
I was face-to-face with a blond boy, about my age, with topaz eyes. I nearly had a heart attack. My heart was pumping really fast, blood rushing in and out of it, I gulped.
A shorter girl behind him started laughing. She had pitch-black hair, with the same colored eyes as the blond boy.
"Alice! That's not funny!" Yet another girl, brown hair and brown eyes, screeched. Two girls, was this guy a pimp or something?! There was a laugh behind me.
"No, fortunately Jasper is NOT a pimp." What? Oh it was Edward and Renesseme. They had come out of the bushed without a sound.
"Did I say that out loud?" I asked. They all nodded. I laughed sheepishly. Alice looked at me.
"Hi. I'm Alice, that's Jasper-"she pointed to the boy"-and that's Bella." I nodded. Alice smiled a toothy grin.
"And what's YOUR name?" She asked, as if implying something.
"Um...I'm Lolita. Nice..to meet you?" I asked. She laughed.
"I'm gonna give you a makeover!" Oh great, I've only known the girl five minutes and I'm already her new project.
"But first, let's get out of the woods." I nodded, personally I would never come to these woods again!
"So Renesseme, where did Edward adopt you?" Alice, Jasper, and Bella's heads turned, they starred at him like he had grown two heads.(Which wasn't impossible I saw it in a freak show once.) Edward starred back at them.
There was an awkward silence.
"In the United States, we came here on vacation with his siblings and new wife." She replied. I smiled.
"Oh, cool, you just got married? To Bella right?" Now everyone starred at me.
"How did you know?" I laughed.
"It's a better chance Jasper and Alice are your siblings because you all have the same color eyes." The sighed in relief.
"Okay?"
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We where out of the woods soon enough. Back to good ol' Italy. I smiled at them. Renesseme looked up at me.
"Well, I guess I'll see you guys later." We nodded and went our separate ways. I ran home.
"Dad! I'm home!" My father was a broken-hearted man, ever since my mom died when I was twelve. I've been working my butt of since I was old enough.
"Honey...I..I think it's my time." My eyes widened in surprise. Tears were streaming down my cheeks when I saw him. He was pale, lying in bed, and he could barely keep his eyes open.
"D..Dad...y..you can't go!" He smiled gently at me, as if to say 'Don't worry about it'. I starred at him, my vision blurring.
"Honey..I love you...remember that...no matter were your mother and I are, we love you, so...do your best, and watch yourself...not everyone is as safe as they seem." His eyes remained open, but his chest stopped moving up and down, at a slow rate, but it stopped. I shut his eyes.
"I...I love you too dad!" I cried my eyes out until three in the morning. My dad was my last remaining family member. He was probably the nicest person I knew, taught me everything I know.
"Why'd you have to go dad? Why?" I starred at his cold, dead body. Still crying I got up and threw up everything I ate.(No, I'm not a bulimic) My appetite had just gone away.
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The next day I took a shower and got ready for school, great another wonderful day at school. I had already planned to take some money out of my collage fund to pay for my father's funeral.
When I stepped out of my house I spotted Alice and Bella shopping. Alice saw me and smiled. She waved.
"Hi!" The two of them said. I nodded.
"Hey." I could hear the dread in my voice. They starred at me, a worried look on their faces.
"What's wrong?" Bella asked. I sighed. Trying to fight back tears I replied, stammering.
"M..My f...father died...yesterday." I replied. They looked sorry, as if it were their fault.
"Look, I don't need pity, people die-" I got choked up, the tears streamed my face yet again. Bella smiled sadly. Alice hugged me. The two of them comforted me as much as they could.
I began to breathe hard. "O..Okay I..I think I'll be fine." I smiled, a weak no-hearted smile. The stepped away from me.
"I hope you are, but if you need help, here's our numbers and the address." My eyes lit up. They were so nice.
"Thank you."
