Mika poofed in while Sukira teleported. "Yola people of insanity!" Mika yelled.
"Hey freaks of all universes!" Sukira shouted. Once again, using the word freak earned her a hit on the head.
Mika sighed at her friend's behavior. "We have a new contestant, Infinity-Rainz who already submitted her story. Another new contestant is Tomoyo Kinomoto! Welcome! Now time for reviews!" (Sukira is bold, Mika normal)
Forgotten Memories
A really good start Twinnie, really original idea for how Kish went alien. The only problem I had was maybe Kish was a little TOO polite and it seemed a bit mary-sueish. Other than that it was pretty good, just fix grammer mistakes.
WHOA! What did you do to Kish? Where is he from? England, 1700? (this earned Sukira a LARGE whack) Other than a few grammer mistakes, I couldn't see anything wrong EXCEPT FOR WHAT YOU DID TO (Mika has now gagged Sukira till the next review)
Mika sighed. "I'm sorry for Sukira's personality. She can go a bit over board."
"Mmm, hmm, mmm," Sukira murmured through her gags.
Stolen
I loved the start. Really mysterious and interesting. Keep up the good work! Just maybe not do middle formatting.
(is out of her gags) Nice job! This one kept me at the edge of my seat. I can't wait to see what you do with this!
Forget and Never Forgive
This was a really good start. Your OC kinda reminds me of myself at times and that time I took out the highschool's linebacker in a game of football (TRUE STORY)
Love your OC girl. She can take care of herself nicely. Can't wait to see how you make her friends with Kish.
"Well that's pretty much it," Mika stated.
"Pretty much," Sukira agreed.
"Oh, one thing, a quick shout out to my friend Toma-san! I CAN'T BELIEVE I GOT SECOND PLACE ON YOUR CONTEST!!" Mika squealed. Her squealing was so loud and long that she fainted.
Sukira groaned. "Oh great." She dragged Mika out of the studio.