Hey, I got some feedback!
Rediamond: Thanks for taking the time to review my story and provide some advice, it really is appreciated! I can't change the past chapters, but I'll see what I can do about it in the next chapters.
Another thing to note is that time is different between the human and Pokemon world. For example, an hour in the human world could be a day in the Pokemon one. But that's just an example, and I don't think I'll get too technical about it.
Chapter 4: Through the Hidden Land
*Dylan's POV*
I still couldn't grasp the idea that I was a Pokemon. Not only that, it was hard to remember things from the human world.
And what had just happened was... Dramatic. Had I really just thrown myself into some other peoples' business? Apparently so.
I could feel a bead of sweat trickling down my back. Why was I here?
Memories were fading from my mind, and I wasn't sure why.
Thoughts were running around in my head, and did the whole way to the Hidden Land.
I was a bit tired when we got there.
It looked overall like a calm and serene place. There were trees and flowers growing, the grass was lush, and it just seemed like a place that you would visit if you felt the need to escape the world for a while, to have some alone time.
But it also gave off a feeling of mystery, the unknown; it sent a chill down my spine.
Pikachu gave everyone a friendly smile, and was the first to hop off of Lapras. Grovyle followed, then Lachlan, and then I did.
"You guys ready yet?" Grovyle said, but before anyone had any time to answer, he said, "I know you guys are. Maybe not you?" He looked at me,
This was the first time that he had spoken to me. "Uh... Yeah, I guess," I nodded, though I really wasn't ready.
Grovyle didn't look satisfied, but knew that there was no other choice, so he answered by saying, "There's no going back now anyway, you're here and you're coming with us."
Lapras called out to us for the second time, a strong urgency in her voice. "No more dawdling! You're going to be too late if you stay here any longer."
"Just stick with us, and you'll be okay. Don't wander off and do not attempt to start up a battle with another Pokemon." Grovyle motioned to Lachlan, and Lachlan began to walk towards the entrance to the Hidden Land's main area. Pikachu confidently followed behind.
"I'll take the rear. You go first," Grovyle said firmly. I walked behind Pikachu without question. Grovyle seemed to have quite a strict attitude. Whether he was normally like this, I did not know. I heard his light footsteps as he followed me to the back of the line. Lachlan looked back at us and saw that we were all prepared to go. So he walked right into the entrance to the Hidden Land. We followed behind.
-Dylan's room, 9AM-
*Casey's POV*
"No, no no no..." Panicking, panic, panic, it's all my brain could register. "Where? Where could he be... Don't tell me he disappeared too. Does that mean that I'll be next?!" I felt like I would have a breakdown. I ran out of Dylan's house screaming his name. "DYLAN?! DYLAN?!" Most people who were outside at the time started staring at me, and I felt a sudden wave of embarrassment. "S-sorry." I sat down on the footpath and ruffled my hair. My brain thought up a reason for why he could be gone, but it didn't help. "Maybe Lachlan and Kaitlin failed, and then Dylan was sent there!" I thought aloud. From that, I also decided that the world that they were in was very dangerous. "Duh," I thought. "Of course it is."
Back to the problem. "What if he doesn't return?!"
There were still some people who were staring at me, and I thought that I should just return home. So I got up and did so.
When I got home, I remembered the little story that my three friends and I had written last year. "It'll pass time," I thought, so I decided to read it. It was buried beneath a few of my previous year's schoolbooks, so it took a little while to search for it through my mess of books which lay in one of my cupboards.
-The Friendship of Four-
This is the story of four great friends. Let's go to the beginning.
It all began at school, in Year Reception, with two pairs of children. These pairs consisted of a boy and a girl. The first pair of children were made up of Dylan and Casey, and the second pair were made up of Lachlan and Kaitlin.
The former two had met mid-way through the year, when they were placed in adjacent seats. They worked together well, and soon formed a bond. They spent a lot of time together, and by the end of the year knew a lot about each other and were very good friends.
The latter two had met during a Maths lesson, where they were paired up to work together to match shapes. During the lesson, they had talked with each other quite a lot, and not long after became friends.
These two pairs were not in the same class for two years. Year 2 was when they were finally put into the same class.
It was during a PE lesson that they all became friends. Students had been put into groups of four, and by fate, the two pairs of friends had been put together.
There were eight teams, and the game that they were playing was 'Rob the Nest'. With great teamwork and coordination, and a sneaky plan, they had been able to win a few rounds of it.
After that lesson, they began to work together more often. Through time, they learned more about each other, and became great friends.
They have been through so much together, facing many challenges. But they were always able to work together and find a way through anything that came their way.
Here we are now, four friends, writing a book about ourselves. It sounds weird, but we know that we will look back on this in the future, to remind us that together we can accomplish great things.
And it's just the beginning.
I sat up on my bed, determined to find and help my friends. But there was a problem. I didn't actually know how I was going to be able to do that.
-Hidden Land, 15F-
*Dylan's POV*
I watched as Grovyle unleashed Dig on a Magmortar, who fainted. "Keep going," he instructed.
We walked on for a little longer before coming to some more stairs.
We were at a checkpoint- I could tell because of the Kangaskhan statue.
"Take some more Apples. Then we can continue on," Grovyle directed.
Lachlan did as he was told.
"I think we're getting close to the Old Ruins," Pikachu commented as we continued walking.
"Yeah," Lachlan agreed.
-Hidden Highland, 1F-
Walking forwards through yet another narrow lane, we encountered a Manectric. Lachlan was able to take it out with a few Razor Leaf attacks.
In the next room, we walked to the left when suddenly there was a loud explosion.
"Ow!" I cried. Pikachu did too, but not as loudly.
"Self-Destruct Trap!" Lachlan called out. "Don't step on it again."
I was still shaken up by the explosion for a few floors afterwards.
-Casey's Room-
*Casey's POV*
One of the 'quirky' (as my friends describe it) things that I sometimes do when I am stressed out is literally pull my hair. So I was stuck doing that for a few minutes. After I had finished doing that, I stared out of my window, at the cloudy sky. One of the things that we do while we are bored is watch clouds and tell each other what they look like. 'Cloud-watching', I guess. Like bird-watching, but with clouds.
I noticed the sky begin to darken. The somewhat gloomy mood that the sky began to give off as it darkened even more reminded me again of the tricky situation that I was in. "I get distracted so easily," I thought. But it truly did seem like there was nothing I could do. I felt helpless. I couldn't do anything about the problem. It was out of my control.
"Should I just wait? Wait and see what happens?" I asked myself.
After a moment of thinking, I finally gave up. "Yes, I should," I concluded. I slowly walked out of my room and into the kitchen to have breakfast.
The end of the chapter! I'm trying my best with the characters' backstories, personalities and etc. although since I haven't done too much of that and we're not that far into the story yet, I think I'll be able to add some more of that in later on, or at least try to. Anyway, that's all for now! Don't forget to leave a review! See you in the next chapter!