Author's note
Hi everyone yeah its me again! well i've gotten some reviews that i would like to share and 2 of them i need help figuring out what it says okay here's one from GrossGirl18,
1. KW is mute. acorrding 2 KF, he nneds a bell.
2. Aqualad?
3. AH! GO TO MY PROFILE, USE THE TT EPISODES LINK, & WACH LIGHTSPEED! ITS 2 RUSHED, OOC, & THOSE LITTLE (ME:...)
THINGS R GETTING ANOUYING!
4. my apologies if this seems like a flame.
Okay here is the second one from GrossGirl18,
1. WAY ooc. (out of character.) Jinx is a bit gothy. she dosnt use ! or show her emosions much.
2. names: Jinx- Jennifar Hexe. Terra- Tara (this i dont really get, cuz Terra is a normal name, but in Things Change, i think she clled herself Tara. + the woman who does her vioce is named Tara Strong (she also does Ravens vioce.)) See-More Seymore. (i think i spelled that rong, but who cares?) Starfire- Kori Anders (cuz if u seperate her Tamarianion name in 2 thats wat it endsup as.) Bumblebee- Karen Breecher. as for the rest, u got them rite, but i suggest u check some other high school storys just 2 b sure. u dont hav 2 change them, just thout id let u no this is how most ppl c them wen their not using their real names.
3. harts r not something i can see in Jinxs eyes UNLESS shes looking at a Unicorn thing. :)
please note im just trying 2 give some cunstructive critism.
Those were the two mean and weird ones. Here are the two good ones.
This first one is from Jinx KF's Badluck Angel
wtf...good story but its kinda rushed you should put more detail in also stop with the hole 'hearts in my eyes thing' it gets annoying...btw u dont have to listen to me but PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON
Next is a newer one from x0xPuppyLuhve,
The idea of you being in the story as an actual canon character, rather than with an OC, is interesting. But, because you're going to be Jinx, you have to try to keep her in character as best as possible, or otherwise, you basically just have an OC that's similar to Jinx herself. I always try to read all of the story before jumping to conclusions, so I'll go ahead and finish off the other two chapter. :) Just, try to work on that detail.
Oh, and on a side note, most of the characters you listed are common on the TT story page, (Like you'll see a lot of Garfield's for BB and Kori's for Starfire) so most readers could automatically guess who is who in the Alternative Universe. I think you could have possibly hinted to the characters in the actual story itself, rather than just making a list.
Alright, I'll stop ranting now. ^^ Hope that you take this semi-well written crit into considersation! Best of Luck!
Okay now i have a question for everyone who is reading this....What do you think should happen when i get back home in the story?
A) i find my parents and brother dead
B)I find only my parents dead but my brother survives wit ha stabbing to the stomach, leg, and arm or
C) That my parents and brother have been kidnapped??
Please review this with your answer!!
Ciao
Oh wait i forgot something.
when i am done with my story do you think i should start a sequel called my 11th grade year summer? Then a My Senior Summer???
Please respond thanks oh and im going to put up my chapter 3 tomorrow which is where your answers will be revieled