Moon: Okay, I've been gatting bad reviews lately, so please review if you like it.
Would someone please tell me what a mary-sue is? If it means centered around OC's, then you're in for it. Cause guess what this story is...
This is the last chapter I have typed up. Now when I want to post, I'll have to type up the chapter and soon gasp even write it.
Flamers: okay, so my writing is horrible. I was originally going to make this story for just me and 4 friends, but I decided to post hoping for other people to maybe like it too. So, yes, if there is a part that makes no sense or sounds critical, IT'S BECAUSE THIS WASN'T GOING TO BE A FANFICTION ANYWAY! But i'm going to make it one no matter how many flamers I get. So go ahead and flame. As previously stated I don't care.
Lilly was rudely shaken awake. She slapped the hand away, hoping to roll over and fall back asleep. The slapped hand punched her. She sat up quickly and looked at Raul, who had done the waking. She surveyed the camp, seeing the other 3 already awake and packing up.
"It's still dark." She said in her sleep-laced tone. Everyone, who continued to pack, directed a thank-you-captain-obvious look at her. She scowled at them as she got out some of the food they had stolen from Izenguard. "I can't see the sun." She mumbled.
"Sunrise will start in a moment." Nelena declared. "We'll know which way's south then."
"Correct." Raul looked at Nelena.
"Obviously." Nelena retorted.
Lilly finished her food and fell over into a sleeping position. Noeli walked over to her and nudged her. Lilly rolled over on purpose, but she thought it was Raul. Lilly ended up squishing Noeli by rolling on top of her. "Oof, Lilly move." Could be heard from under said barrel-roller. Lilly immediately got off.
"South is that way." Nelena reported, as she pointed towards a direction.
"Incorrect." Raul stated.
"South is that way." Ria declared, pointing in the opposite direction. Raul nodded. Nelena grumbled something about little sisters not being right or something and followed Noeli, who had taken off in said direction. After a few minutes of walking, Lilly struck up a conversation.
"So, anyone want to know how I knew which way to go?"
"Negative." Raul mumbled. Lilly glared at her.
"Well, I just randomly had a vision. I was kinda floating in the air above a whitish city. It looked like it was carved into a mountain. Anyway, this city was populated by the strangest of creatures. There was humans, like us."
"Negative, we aren't indubitably human presently." Raul mumbled, indicating her ears.
"Well, whatever. There was also Elves, what I'd assume to be dwarves, ents, and short people. I'm talking majorly short. Like, 2'-3' tall! And they were under siege from an army of human-like creatures. They were all green and brown and they smelled funny.
"Anyway, there were also these towers made of wood that looked dangerous, and these things that looked like trolls, if you asked me."
"Nobody catechized you." Raul muttered.
"Shut up, Raul." Noeli said. Lilly glared at her older sister again.
"And the people leading the army were the worst. One had white hair with bits of black in it."
"Saruman…" Ria muttered.
"Would you all just shut up!" Noeli yelled.
"Thank you. The other had full black armor on. I thought this was a one-sided thing, like I could see them and them couldn't see me. But then the dude in black turns and looks at me. The scene suddenly changes, and I'm floating before a giant flaming eye. It didn't give off heat, but it sure freaked me out! It then spoke. 'Give up. You can only save your friends by living, and to live, you must join the winning side. I control the winning side.'
"It was so creepy. For some reason, I wanted to follow him."
"Lilly!" Noeli yelled.
"How dare you!" Ria yelled simultaneously. Raul and Nelena just gave her dirty looks.
"No, no, listen. Then I heard 'light. That's why the black is too small to see' from Nelena. Then I woke up. I feel no pull towards him now."
"Cool." Ria said. They kept walking, each pondering Lilly's words.
By the time lunch came around, they were all a bit tired. But as soon as they stopped and pulled out their food, a growl was heard.
"What's that?" Lilly asked in a fearful tone. As if on cue, a band of wolf-like things appeared. They were growling, foam dripping from their mouths. The five banded together in a circle around their food. The wargs started to approach them, growling menacingly.
"Get out your weapons." Noeli whispered. Raul and Nelena drew their swords, Noeli her bow staff, and Lilly and Ria their bows. But halfway through stringing their bows/drawing their swords, the wargs attacked.
Two lunged at Raul, and, through the momentum of her drawing her weapon, she sliced the throats of both in one shot. She stabbed their chests because they were still rolling around. They fell limp. One jumped at Nelena, and she impaled it upon her own sword. But she didn't see the one sneaking up behind her. It slashed at her back, creating four deep gashes in her shirt, but no blood came. She whipped around and stabbed it right in the neck. It fell down, the look of slight confusion still there.
Noeli was having trouble. She would knock away one warg, and another would show up, until she was surrounded by five of them. She whipped out her dagger, and as one pounced, she blocked with her bow staff and plunged the blade into it. One jumped on her from behind, but, without turning around, she smacked it hard enough that the blow broke a few ribs of the beast. One must have punctured a lung, because the warg fell down, dead. Two more leapt at her, from opposite directions. She blocked one and stabbed it, and was about to go take care of the other, when she heard a sickening crunch. She turned to see Nelena's sword impaled in one ear and out the other of the warg. Her gaze flew to Nelena, who was still in the I-threw-it position. Nelena ran over and retrieved her sword as the final warg lunged. Noeli turned to discover Raul had taken care of that one.
Lilly and Ria were pretty good at aiming on non-moving targets, but were having trouble with these. The wargs were smart enough to dodge the arrows. In close range, however, the targets became much easier. Lilly shot at one, and it dodged, but bumped into the one right beside it. Ria shot them both the moment they were off balance. The two shared a look, deciding that was a good plan. They turned around to continue, but the older three had taken care of the rest of them. The dead count was: humans: 0, wargs: 15. They had won.
"Grab the food, others might find this spot." Noeli instructed. They all grabbed their food and started jogging at a fast pace. They kept this up until they met a river. They stopped to pant/catch their breath. The river was about 30' wide, and there was no bridge as far as anyone could see.
"So now how do we get across?" Ria said, hands on hips.
"I surmise this prospers." Raul said. "Gma!" She said raising her staff. The staff flew into the air, pulling Raul with it. It started to fly across the river, Raul holding on with one hand. The staff landed her safely on the other bank. She turned and waved to the others.
"Can't you do that to us?" Nelena called in her loudest voice, which is pretty loud.
"I'll try." Raul called back. "Gma!" She said. The staff started to rise into the air. "No, not you." She said to it. It fell back down to earth. "Um, auy gma!" The staff started to fly again. "No!" the staff came back down. "Sorry, I can't get it to lift you." She called over the river.
"Well, that's all and great for you." Nelena muttered.
"Hey, I have an idea." Noeli perked up. She lifted a stone slab out of the ground and stood on it. "C'mon everyone, get on." The others did, having no idea why. Noeli then used bending to lift the slab off the ground and start across the river. After 20', she fell down on one knee. The rock dipped in flight for a second, then resumed it's pace. 5' from shore, she spoke in a tired tone "Sorry." Then the rock fell into the water, soon followed by the other four.
A rope appeared in front of Lilly, and she looked over to its source. Raul had thrown it. She smiled and grabbed on. Nelena grabbed Noeli and Lilly grabbed Ria. Nelena grabbed the rope and Raul started tugging them in. When they were in the shallows, the able-to-stand did and walked onshore. They shook the water off of them. Nelena dropped Noeli on the ground. "What do we do with her?" she asked.
"We should take turns carrying her." Lilly suggested. Raul nodded and picked her up. They started to walk off, when Ria spoke up.
"You said the city was carved into a mountain, right?" Lilly nodded. "Well, we should stick to the foot of the mountain range, right?" They all nodded. Raul led the way east, because the mountains ran that way.
Of course, no one walked. They all liked rock climbing so much, that they hopped from boulder to boulder. After an hour or so, Noeli was able to move again, and she joined them in their fun.
Suddenly, without warning, Raul, who was in front, stopped. The others crashed into her, but successfully stayed standing. They started to complain, but Raul cut them off with an "assemblage, squelch." They continued to complain until she hissed at them. Then they heard it. A gruff voice was coming from behind them.
"Hide!" Noeli whispered. The girls ran, each behind a different rock. Then a man walked onto the big, elevated rock shelf that they had just been on. He held himself regally, but wore leather armor that had been beaten and bloodstained. But he looked fine. He also wore leather boots of a not so good make. His dark brown hair fell into his eyes as he looked around, pausing at each of their hiding places.
Another man, this one looking much younger, followed the dark-haired man up onto the rock. He had blond hair that was pulled back to reveal pointed ears. An elf. "What's the problem, Aragorn?" The elf asked.
"I thought I heard something." was his answer. He took a last look around before he hopped off the rock. The elf followed him, and the gruff voice started again. A dwarf, by the looks of it, ran to keep up with them. Three children followed shortly after.
"Let's follow them." Noeli mouthed to the others. The girls followed the company at a distance. Sometimes, the man called Aragorn would pause and look back. They would all hide at this point, not even daring to breath. After a very long time, the company finally made camp. The girls also made camp, but it was out of sight. As soon as they were sure that the company had fallen asleep, they all lay down and fell into a restless sleep.
Moon: well, I'm pretty sure that this is the longest chapter so far, and I hope my chapters continue to get longer because most of this was typed up a year ago. My writing has gotten a bit better since, but probably still stinks in the eyes of a flamer. FLAMING EYES!
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