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A/N: I'm trying out an experimental style of writing, and would appreciate feedback on how I handled it.
A battler. I am a battler. Best battler. Most best. Best. Best. Best. Strong. Yes, strong. Very strong.
Born Rattata. TAYLOR, trainer. Raised Raticate. Hatched Raticate. Made strong. Made Raticate born strong.
Mother was Rattata. Mother was weak. Father was Growlithe. Father was strong, stronger than mother. Father gave Raticate move, strong move, move Rattata don't naturally learn. BITE. Father made teeth stronger, sharper than average Rattata. BITE can tear. BITE can snap. BITE strong, very strong. Raticate use BITE. Very strong.
BITE way out of egg. Teeth hurt. Must BITE. Must BITE. Chew. Snap. Tear. BITE. BITE!
TAYLOR took baby Raticate to Elite Four. Wanted to BITE them. But baby was weak. Egg was weak.
TAYLOR gave Raticate thing. EXP Share. Bit it.
TAYLOR sent out big bug. Ledian. Ledian high level, but very weak. Did not move when fighting. Was weak.
Ledian defeated Elite Four. Gave Raticate experience. Made Raticate strong. First five levels. Then four. More four. More. More. More. Grew fast, grew strong. BITE stronger. Must fight. Must fight.
TAYLOR keep defeating Elite Four. Raticate keep growing. Levels up. Lots of levels.
Finally evolved. Grow big. Big body. Bigger teeth. Strength much higher. Wanted to fight. Wanted to fight. Ledian keep fighting. Keep EXP Share. Learn many moves. Learn Hyper Fang. Like Bite, but stronger, more critical. Teeth grow longer, harder. Snap. Snap.
Then Ledian disappear. Weak should disappear.
TAYLOR train Raticate now on boat. First battle. Persian. Old man. Persian scratch first. Hit hard. Half HP gone. Now my turn. Hyper Fang. Persian almost faint. One more Bite. Chomp. Faint. Experience. Not like EXP Share. Tastier. Sweeter. Strength go higher. Want more. Want lots more.
Fight other trainers on boat. Bite. Win. Win. Win. Bite Remoraid. Bite Machoke. Bite Hypnos. Bite Ninetails. TAYLOR give lots of berries after battles. No lose.
Keep win. Keep win. Must always win. Win for experience. Win for strength. Like strength. Taste good. Feel good. Bite for strength!
TAYLOR not return to Elite Four. Said was not strong enough. Was wrong. Was strong now. Ready for Elite Four. Will Bite Xatu. Will Bite Dragonite. But TAYLOR no take back to Elite Four. Keep on boat. Keep training. Keep winning. Keep getting stronger.
Still not strong enough. Fight many times on boat.
Finally, TAYLOR take to Elite Four. Fought Xatu. Bite. Xatu take big hit. Dark move on Psychic. But no faint. Psychic. Hurt. Almost die. But Xatu slow. Bite back quick. Xatu faint. TAYLOR give Lemonade. Keep giving Lemonade. Bite Jynx. Bite Exeggutor.
Bite Slowbro, but Slowbro not faint. Amnesia, so Bite not hurt. Keep biting. Slowbro keep using Amnesia. Bite stop hurting. Slowbro Psychic.
What? What this? What happening? Can't see. Can't move. Falling. Closing. Can't…snap…sleepy. Faint? Fainting? Slowbro make Raticate faint? No. Can't lose. Can't lose experience. Can't stay up.
Sleep. Turn passes.
What? Can see. Can move. Revive from TAYLOR. Shuckle fainted while Raticate reviving. Ready to fight again. Ready to fight Slowbro.
TAYLOR tell Raticate to not Bite this time. Special Defense too high. Hyper Fang instead. Slowbro no use Curse. Defense weak. Hyper Fang twice. Slowbro faint. Experience. Lots. Level goes up. Keep beating Elite Four. Up and up and up and up and up and up and up. Beat Lance. Beat Dragonites. No faint again. TAYLOR keep using hyper potions.
Want to fight Elite Four again. Want to beat Slowbro. Bite Slowbro in half. Snap to pieces. Crunch. Munch. Faint.
TAYLOR take to Elite Four again. Stronger now. Chew through Xatu, Jynx and Exeggutor.
Slowbro again. TAYLOR tell Raticate not to use Bite. Use Hyper Fang instead. Attack stronger than Special Attack. Want to Bite Slowbro, but TAYLOR say no. Use Hyper Fang. Slowbro faint. Experience. Win. Win. Win. No faint. Win.
Keep fighting. Keep beating Elite Four. Level 60. Level 70. Level 80. Higher and higher. Stronger and stronger. Take down Elite Four in one snap, no need Hyper Potions anymore.
Need to keep fighting. Need to keep getting stronger. Feel it. Stats shooting up. Need to keep stats up. Need to keep fighting.
Then new egg came.
TAYLOR breed pokémon. Breed Raticate. Now breed another pokémon. Bring new egg everywhere. Bring egg to Elite Four. Bring Egg to Mt. Silver. Egg start moving. Start making sounds. Egg hatch into Slowpoke.
Weak baby. Can't move fast. Slow. Dumb. Can't attack. TAYLOR want to raise anyway. No see why. A waste. A mistake. Could snap in one bite, like Elite Four. Useless.
TAYLOR take baby to Elite Four. Give Slowpoke EXP Share. Like Raticate. Train Slowpoke like Raticate, though Slowpoke slow, weak and useless. Slowpoke nothing like Raticate. Fight anyway. Snap down Xatu with Hyper Fang. Experience flow. Wait. Where's rest? Why only part of experience gained?
Slowpoke get stronger. TAYLOR check stats. Slowpoke get bigger, jump levels, on Raticate's experience. Mine. Mine. Fought and won by Raticate. Slowpoke useless. Should not get my experience. Why? Give it back. Give it back. Get weaker so Raticate can get stronger!
TAYLOR say no. Say that Slowpoke will be trained, and will get half experience earned by Raticate. Say to keep battling. Levels will go up, but now slower. Hate it. Hate Slowpoke. Slow, useless, weak. Want all experience. Hog. But TAYLOR say. So keep battling. Slowpoke keep jumping levels. Raticate levels crawl.
Need Elite Four and Red to go up one level now. Slowpoke go up one level every three battles. Not fair. Slowpoke should be earning own experience. Not stealing. Strong not made from stealing.
Level 90 now. Bite down Dragonite. Dragonite faint. Lance faint. Slowpoke go up more levels.
TAYLOR visit pokémon center. Go to second floor. Pick up Mystery Gift. Talk to lady. Give Slowpoke special stone. Raticate never need stone. Raticate never got stone. TAYLOR go inside special room. Talk to person at computer. Swap pokéballs.
TAYLOR leave room. Let Slowpoke out. Slowpoke now Slowking. Taller, with big white stone on head. Look even dumber, weaker. Could snap easier than Slowpoke.
TAYLOR say that Slowking now strong enough to fight Will. Strong enough to fight Xatu. Not possible. Slowking never fought battle before, never make faints.
Xatu is Raticate's faint, not Slowking's. But TAYLOR send Slowking out instead of Raticate. Take long time, and many Super Potions, but Slowking win. Slowking win against Jynx. Slowking gain lots of experience, Raticate's experience. Slowking fight Exeggutor and faint. TAYLOR send in Raticate to finish Will. Raticate win easy. Slowking fight in no more battles, and not get EXP Share. Raticate get lots of experience, all experience. Slowking worthless.
Keep fighting Elite Four. Raticate always fight Karen and Lance. Slowking fight only Will. Then Slowking fight Koga and Bruno. Raticate no fight Koga, Bruno or Will anymore. Slowking no faint anymore. Win all experience from Koga, Bruno and Will. But Raticate have Karen. Raticate have Lance and Red. Still, Lance, Red and Karen take long time to level up Raticate. Take long time for Raticate to go up levels now. Slowking growing faster, but much weaker.
Almost level 99 now. Slowking almost level 60 now. Slowking fighting all of Elite Four but Lance. Lance and Red faint by Raticate. Need to bite. Need to bite more. Need more battles. Need more experience. Want level higher. Want to go up to 100 and higher. But TAYLOR no fight with Raticate. Always Slowking now. Slowking take all of Elite Four. Teeth itch. Need to Bite. Need to Hyper Fang. Fight. Fight. Fight!
Now level 99. Almost level 100. More battles against Red! More! More! Snap. Twist. Chomp. Chew. Faint Pikachu. Faint Espeon. Faint Venusaur, Blastoise and Charizard. All faint by Raticate's teeth. Experience go up. Level go up.
Yes! Level 100. High! Higher! Strong! Must keep getting stronger! Must keep battling! But, why feel strange? Why strength not hungry for more experience? Why teeth not itchy anymore? What wrong?
TAYLOR stay at Indigo Plateau. Say that now Slowking will take all battles. Raticate will have no more battles. Raticate at level 100. Will not go any higher. Say Raticate will wait in PC until time for stadium.
No. No. No. No. NO! Raticate must keep fighting. Must keep getting stronger. Level not matter. Raticate can still get stronger. Raticate just need more battles. Slowking not needed, Raticate stronger! Need more time. Need more attention. TAYLOR! TAYLOR! Train Raticate more!
Night. Party go to sleep. Slowking take everything. Slowking weak, not like Slowbro, Raticate stronger now and will faint Slowbro and Slowking. Raticate better than Slowking. Will chomp Slowking, then TAYLOR will train Raticate again. Raticate will have all that Slowking stole. Will be best. Will keep on fighting. Will get Slowking's battles, will get all of Raticate's battles.
Slowking wake up. "Yes…what…is…it…that…you…want?"
"Take everything! Take all! Now Raticate will take all! Raticate will stay with TAYLOR, will stay battler!"
Slowking not move. Raticate attack!
What? What this? Can't move. Can't move. Psychic! Mind trick! Dirty trick! Should fight with hands, claws, teeth and feet, not with tricks!
"You…are…done. TAYLOR…is…training…someone…else. You…will…not…get…any…stronger."
Lies! Fight. Struggle! Raticate can get stronger. Raticate will get stronger once Slowking gone.
Psychic hurt! Hurt much. Raticate not die. Raticate trained more. Super Fang! Slowpoke now half weak. Half to faint. Raticate try to attack again. Will Bite, just like Slowbro. Bite do little damage. Why? Slowbro use Curse, and Hyper Fang no make faint. Try to Bite, but Slowking use Psychic, which hurt and block. Can't reach Slowking. Psychic keep throwing Raticate back.
What? What's going on now? Slowking in Raticate's head. Breaking mind. Ow, it hurts! Stop! Brain cracking. Teeth can't stop shaking. Out! Out! Stop the tricks. Fight real! Can't stay awake. Slowking breaking mind. Can't…attack. Bite. Bite. B…it…e.
Wake up in pokéball. No! TAYLOR! Wait! Raticate can get stronger! Raticate much stronger than Slowking! Let Raticate fight again! Raticate good at fighting! Raticate defeat Elite Four and Red without using Lemonades! Raticate strong! No! Do not forget about Raticate! Let Raticate fight again! More chances! More experience! Raticate just need more experience! Raticate will break level 100 with enough experience! TAYLOR! No! Wait!
FIN
The last pokémon I raised before my gold version erased was a Slowking, who was preceded by a Raticate. I raised my pokémon in the order that I happen to find them in my boxes, and I thought it was very ironic how the two got arranged to be raised together. I grew attached to my Raticate, since I thought it was so adorable, and was saddened when it reached level 100 and I put it away for a Slowking, which is never really the same thing as a strong Raticate.
When writing this story, I wondered how would a hyperactive, battle-crazy Raticate speak. Answer: not in complete sentences, and mostly in third person. Pronouns? Couldn't imagine it. Hence, the style that the chapter is written in. I hope it didn't get on anyone's nerves, but this is how I honestly think mice, if they could talk, would speak. With a metabolism that fast you know they're not going to waste their speech on little things like articles, subject-verb agreement and pronouns.
Oh, and the name of the chapter is from what I actually nicknamed by Raticate. I never mentioned the Raticate's nickname simply because I thought it would destroy the reader's image of him. His name was Squeakers. Yeah, he was a psychotic little thing.
