Hey, this is my first chapter that I'm writing for this story. This is my first story that I wrote that my friends didn't proof read for a month. So, please tell me how it is and I''ll try to make it better. So please, criticize me. I will italicize ancient language.
Chapter 5
Eragon couldn't believe that he had just done that. Really? Give me a little more snuggle time? He had to stop blurting out random things. But he was surprised at how she kicked him across the meadow. He looked at the older elf and saw that she angry.
"I'm sorry I run, but its been a really long time since I've been outside."
He felt sympathy radiating from his master. He actually never learned her name. Wait, sympathy?
The older one just sighed and said, "Let's get going. But first, I want to know what kind of beast you are. Why do you need that many bands to restrain you?"
"Shoot. What am I going to do? He's a bunny. A cute, fluffy bunny. Arya was troubled. What could she do? She could hardly lie to her mother in the Ancient Language.
"Um.." Eragon started hesitantly.
"He's a rabbit." Arya said with a sigh.
"What!" Islanzadi shouted. "I paid five times the original amount for a rabbit? And how do you know this?"
"He...he changed down the hill."
"Um," Eragon said.
"Actually, I'm a..." Eragon started. But Islanzadi was on a roll.
"A rabbit. We know. How could I've been stupid enough to think that..."
"Mom!" Arya protested.
"No let me finish," Islanzadi cut in.
"But I'm not just a rabbit." Eragon shouted. He hated it when his jailors made fun of him because he could only transform into a bunny. Now that he was out, he was not going to stand this.
"Of course, humans would cheat us...what? Did I hear that correctly?" Islanzadi faltered while Arya was saying, "So, he is plenty strong even...wait. Did you say.."
"Yes. I am a rabbit, but that is only due to that I am in my weakest state. I actually have eleven creatures I can transform into. That is why Morzan sees me as dangerous. I'm his perfect experiment that won't listen to him. I don't really know all of the things I can transform into. I've tried several times, but these silver bands draws my power out so I've only been able to transform into five creatures. But now I can't transform at all because of these silver bands." Eragon said.
"But what did you do back at the castle? When you destroyed everything?" Arya asked him.
"Oh, that is how I am now. Still, I'm very weak. Although strong enough to be able to bring you down." Eragon sneered.
"So,then," Islanzadi asked him, "What kind of creatures can you transform into?"
"With each band off, I can transform into the next magical one. So my next one would be a tiger, then lion, then an elf then..."
"Wait, did you say and elf?" Arya said confused.
"Yes, just like you two. Yes, I know it's weird but who can blame them for trying to control an elf. Anyways, next and last one that I know of would be a great fish."
"I want to see you transform into one right now." The older elf demanded him.
"Well, only the master can take off the bands. And mine can only be taken off in a specific order." Eragon said. "I should also warn you. These bands also suppress my emotions."
"What does that mean?" Arya asked.
"It means that with every band gone, an emotion becomes particularly strong." Islanzadi explained to her. "We have to think this through. Do you know the first one that should come off?"
"Yes, its this ring on my finger," Eragon replied showing his right hand to them. He looked at Arya expectantly. He obviously wanted her to take it off, now.
"Leave it there for now. First lets get back to Ellesmera to decide what to do."
Arya could see that Eragon was disappointed. He stood there and glared at her.
"Then let us depart."
But before they could start running, Arya felt her wards shatter.
Arya was shocked. And from the look on her mother's face, it was evident Islanzadi felt it too. Eragon noticed both of their expressions and the thoughts of shock from Arya's mind and knew that something was wrong. "What's wrong?"
"Our wards, our protection..." Arya faltered.
"Our wards have disappeared." Islanzadi whispered.
Suddenly Eragon stood erect. He then slowly sniffed the air. Then he said slowly, I need you to take the first band off me now, quickly."
"Why?," Arya asked as she approached him.
"Because, there are ten Tateem Acurruns heading towards us right now. The only way we can beat them all is if I can transform. Even into just the tiger."
Arya looked at her mother, although her mind was already set. She nodded, "Do it." Arya stepped closer to him.
"How do I take it off?"
"All you have to do is take it off for me." was Eragon's reply.
Arya griped his hands and slid the silver ring off of his finger. As soon as it came off, there was a flash of light. Eragon felt an enormous amount of power returning to him. It was to much to handle at one. He fainted.
Before Arya or Islanzadi could do anything, ten men came out of the shadow of the trees. The elves slowly looked around. They were surrounded.
The Tateem Acurruns wore only a schenti with a leather belt studded with jewels. They all had no top on and had broad shoulders. Each had two to four bands on them.
Islanzadi asked them, "Why have you come here?"
"We've come for that one. Our master...master wants him." A voice from behind them said. They turned and saw a Tateem with five bands pointing at Eragon. It was also clear that he was the alpha, by the way he carried himself.
"Where is your master?" Islanzadi demanded.
"The alpha said, "We've come for...for that one. Our master wan...ts...wants him," he said in a monotonous tone.
Arya knew that this was all that this creatures could say. She looked at him in the eye and said, "No, we will not give Eragon to you. Whoever your master is, tell him no."
The Tateem's eyes glassed over. Then he said, "You have seal...ed you fate."
All of the creatures started to change. They changed half-in, half-out. Their most powerful form. They were ugly.
"Arya!" Islanzadi shouted at her as she threw her a bow and a quiver filled with arrows. She notched three arrows and started to shoot at them. But they were fast. They simply moved out of the way. So she ran back towards their packs and took out a sword. She then engaged four of them at once. There was a tiger, a lion, a panther, and a bull. It was hardly a fair fight. If she was fighting one of them, she could have easily killed it. But she was fighting four while her mom was fighting six of them. Several times they came close enough to cut her in several places. She was losing. "Where is Eragon?" she kept thinking. Finally, she shouted, "Brisnger!" and a ring of fire surrounded her. The beasts all snarled at her. They tried to pass the flames and got hurt. Then finally, one jumped over and attacked her. She lost focus for a second and the flames disappeared. The creatures all pounced on her.
Arya fell, and before the creatures could rip her to shreds, she said, "skölir eka" There was a temporary barrier between her and the beasts but it would not last long. She heard a loud snarl and the Tateem Acurruns were knocked off of the shield. When she looked up she saw Eragon.
"Eragon, you're all right?"
"Yes, I was just not ready for the power to return. Looks like you need help." Then Eragon saw her cuts, "Did they do that to you?" Eragon said angrily. He felt protective towards his master. He was, after all, made to serve his master.
Arya winced and nodded. "Can you help me?"
Eragon turned and then he started to transform. Fur started to cover lightly on over his skin. It covered his torso, chest, legs and arms. His ears became pointed. Fangs appeared in his mouth and a tail appeared. His hair also grew to his waist. The color of his skin and fur was white. Though the others looked horrifying at their strongest, Eragon was not like that. "Wow, he's beautiful even like this." Arya thought. Eragon looked at her and smirked. Arya was shocked, it was almost like he had read her mind. Then she blushed.
He said, "Drows."
Arya was confused. What did he say?
Then a sword appeared in his hands. He then bounded forward with a shout and attacked the Acurruns. They snarled and tried to attack but he was too fast. He slashed, cut, and stabbed them. Arya ran to help her mother. Her mother was shouting spells at them but, she was quickly tiring. Arya engaged the beasts. But then all of them left her and Islanzadi and ran towards Eragon.
As the creatures ran towards him he shouted, "ekame mad leihs!" Immediately a shimmering dome appeared around him. The Tateem Acurruns pounded, scratched, and ran into it but it did not budge. Arya and Islanzadi just watch all of this with awed expressions. Then he shouted, "erifdnu orruslla foeht seru taercdna yort sedmeht!"
Fire shot out from his outstretched hands and it surrounded each beast and started to shrink onto them. As soon as the flames touched their skin, they were covered in flames and an unearthly howl could be heard from them. Arya watched all this and was grateful that Eragon was hers and was to protect her. She did not want to have him as her enemy. Beside her, Islanzadi was thinking that this was the best deal she had ever made.
After all of the Tateem was destroyed, Eragon walked towards them. Arya said, "Thank you for saving our lives."
"Well, since I'm bonded to you, I have to." a pause, " Your welcome." Arya saw him smile. She felt that Eragon, liked her at some level. If only for the fact that she freed him.
"Eragon, how did you do that?" Islanzadi asked him.
"What?"
"Cast a spell not using the Ancient Language?"
"Yes, I've noticed that too. You also don't speak in the Ancient Language. Why? And How?" Arya asked him.
"Honestly, I don't know. I've always been able to cast spells using my language. I understand the Ancient Language, but I've never really learned how to talk." Eragon replied.
"When we get to Du Weldenvarden, we'll have to ask you more." Islanzadi said,"Now, that was a coordinated attack. But there was someone else. That person shattered our wards. I would rather not meet this person here, after such a battle. Let us go before we meet that perso..." Islanzadi trailed off.
Then there was a rustling noise in the bushes. Eragon stepped forward and said, "Come out. Show yourself." Again, protectiveness.
An elf with blue fur stepped out. Eragon looked at him and found that he had fangs, pelt of a forest cat, and the eyes of an eagle. But the most outstanding feature, was how the elf looked a lot like Arya.
"Blödhgarm!" Arya ran forward and hugged him.
Eragon asked, "Who is he?"
Islanzadi answered, "He is my son and Arya's twin brother. I have no idea why he's here. He should be at court with my mate."
"So her name is Arya?" Eragon mused.
Arya stepped out of her brother's embrace and turned to Eragon. "Eragon, this is my brother Blödhgarm. Blödhgarm, this is my Tateem, Eragon."
Eragon morphed back into a human. He stepped forwards and shook hands.
"It would seem that you got an intelligent Tateem. And a strong one too. Thank you for saving my sister." Blödhgarm said.
Eragon nodded and stepped back.
"What are you doing here? I thought you were with father?" Arya asked.
"I was, but Evander was worried and sent me to intercept you. This," as he gestured at the battle field, " was what he was worried about. But it seems that your Tateem has taken care of it." Then he walked to Islanzadi and hugged her too. After he stepped back, he said, "Let us get going."
They nodded. They packed their arrows and swords. Arya noticed that Eragon's sword had disappeared.
Eragon murmured, "evigem etair porppa sehtol cotraew." In a shimmer of light, He was in a tunic with boots. "That's better."
Blödhgarm looked impressed.
They were about to leave when a figure stepped out in front of them. He emerged from the shadows. He was wearing a long black cloak that obscured his face. His long hair fell out from the hood. He had red hair. And from what they could see, he had chalk pale skin. Then he spoke "Stop. You will hand over the creature you call Eragon or face destruction."
Glossary of terms
Brisnger – fire
skölir eka – shield me
drows – sword
ekame mad leihs – make me a shield
erifdnu orruslla foeht seru taercdna yort sedmeht – fire, surround the creatures and destroy them.
evigem etair porppa sehtol cotraew – give me appropriate clothes to wear
A/N So how was the story? Was it good? Please review and tell me.
Narrator: Who is the mysterious man in the black cloak? How does he have red hair and pale skin? What is going to happen next? Find out this Saturday 6/27/13.
To Close it off..
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