So this is back to Kats POV, please review!
Kat:
I quickly turned my face from the boy claimed by Athena. My cheeks rushed with blood at my embarrassment and disappointment. If I was a daughter of Athena she would have already chosen me.
I barely noticed the kids around me eating or even walking back to the cabin with Thomas. When I heard Thomas telling someone their bunk was next to mine I looked over. "Everything you'll need for inside the cabin is in a backpack under the bed. So your all set now and you can explore the camp and at 6 meet up for dinner then at 7 for the bonfire. I got to get with the rest of the cabin for canoeing but Ill see you then!" Thomas said to the boy as he dashed off, not noticing me. That left me and him alone in the warm cabin filling with the setting sun's light.
He had nice blond hair in a neat wave at the top and clear blue eyes otherwise known as completely hot. "So, uh, what's your name again?" I asked as I tried to play it cool. He looked up in surprise just noticing me by the door. "Oh, uh, my names Shilo Octave." He replied with shyness. He looked like he had lost something or maybe even he was lost. "Hey are you alright? I mean, were cabin mates if something's on your mind you can talk to me about it." I said as I sat on his bed. His eyes looked hopeful as he sat down too then, without warning; he let his words gush out. He spoke of strict parents, running away, dead pets, bird women, and lots of action. By the time he was done the sun was dipped just under the horizon. He sighed and laid back on his pillow with his hands behind his head.
"Hey thanks for listening to my crazy rant, its just I haven't been able to let it all out to anybody." He breathed apologetically. "That's ok; your story was amazing about how you got away and made it here. I actually just got here today too but my story is boring just came from my orphanage where I grew up. Looking back on it, even though you ran away from your parents, at least you had some." I responded sadly. "Its better than ones that ignore you." He replied sarcastically. "Well at least we will find out our godly parent tonight." I exclaimed happily. He turned away with a frown like that was not a cheery thought. Before I could ask what was wrong the other campers started pouring in and filling the cabin with noise and chatter. Thomas came in looking like he took a dip in the lake but was smiling like he had just enjoyed a good joke. "Time for dinner, then CAMPFIRE!" He yelled and the whole cabin cheered in response.
Ok hope everyone liked it! How was it? Took much dialogue? Good detail? Not enough hook? Please review and help me out!