Just got back from swearing lessons from Tayuya, bitch really, really knows her stuff. I got a smile out of her just from calling her that (lol).
….just fucking wow. Believe it or not, this is actually my first submitted work, so I'm blown away that I've gotten any positive reviews, let alone this many (okay, to a writer like Desaix, or shadowmaster62, this is nothing. But come on, they've written stuff that's over 200,000 words in fact, over 300,000 words for Desaix. With something this short, I'll take what I can get, very greedily, might I add)
Anyway, it's been decided by democratic vote (okay, not really, just more people said go Jiraiya then Kakashi, so Kakashi will be chapter 4, then Hinata as chapter 5.)
With that said, it's Giggity-giggity-time (don't kill me if you don't know what that's from.)
Enjoy the latest chapter, and please R&R
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(Acknowledged in order of reviews, don't worry, I cut this out when I preview it to make sure that this doesn't make up the bulk of the word count)
hells demons: Sorry to hear that, but instead of telling me that you didn't like it, perhaps you could tell me what you didn't like it, being a little bit more specific then "it was dumb", or "it wasnt good". Maybe then I can actually do something about it.
jackie: Yatta! (Alright!) pumps fist up and down Tiger Wood's style
Kai's Snowfall: In order of your points, I have some of my own
1. Shnipplitasticularmetry! Well, considering how short I keep these in order to avoid just rambling on and on and on, I have to compensate by being able to write them fast, ne?
2. Glad I'm not alone in my views of Sakura, although I tend to kind of ease up on her because she treats Naruto a lot better after the time skip in the anime, but because he was exiled in this, that never is taken into account.
And for the OOC thing, just wait 'till you read Jiraiya's PoV, I'm thinking about putting a warning for sexual themes just because of how dirty his mind can get, lol (don't worry, I won't go too far).
3. You know, I had never even thought it of like that. Your absolutely right, you would think that would totally destroy a person's ego. But during the anime, a 'psycho poodle' seemed to be immune to this after getting his ass kicked right before the first part of the Chuunin exam.
4. Speaking of the psycho poodle line, in all honesty, I wasn't trying to be that funny when I wrote it, but after you commented on it, I went back and read it a few more times. Now I don't know how the hell I wrote something that hilarious. Anyway, checked out that URL you posted, and nearly fell out of my chair 'cause I was laughing so hard. Thanks for putting my words in there!
You rock, thanks for the awesome review!
KiraraKat: Hai, I think it would be rather interesting, because I believe that Kakashi viewed Naruto like a second Obito (please tell me I don't need to explain the manga storyline to anyone, at least yet), not to mention, Naruto's father (Yondaime) was also Kakashi's sensei. In my opinion, he would regret showing favoritism among his team because he believes Obito and his sensei would be disappointed in him. Unfortunately, he's going to get the chapter after this one, because more people supported me doing Jiraiya's PoV. So you will get your wish, just not until chapter 4
I'll give you a teaser though, I'm thinking of titling it (Apathy)
Thanks for the great review!
Steel Timberwolf: You're completely right, but from what I can see, Kakashi respects Naruto a lot more when after the time skip in the manga. Also, I'm working off the presumption that Kakashi has also fought Naruto and got knocked out, because the blonde is a missing-nin (yeah, that's how stupid the council, they exile him, then declare him a nuke-nin missing-nin), so Kakashi would have proof of how strong Naruto is. Anyway, I hope to satisfy you with the next two chapter's I'm going to post, since both your wishes are going to get granted, the first one now, the second one sometime later today. Thanks for the great review!
I like the idea about Hinata, and I'm planning to make her PoV veeeeerry interesting, so be sure to watch for my 5 chapter.
greekapino (for both reviews): Cool, I didn't know this was worth salt (no sarcasm actually intended, I'm grateful) Thank you so much for the two positive reviews, it's stuff like this that helps me keep writing (well, actually, more like stuff like this keeps me posting, I'll write the stuff anyway )
Zaodin: Your wish is my command, but the chapter after this is going to be my opinion of what Kakashi really feel's after Naruto has been exiled. If you review again, please tell me whether you like what I've already done or not, otherwise I can't change what you don't like. Anyway, thanks for the review!
----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------Disclaimer: I don't own Naruto, but if I did, Hinata would have jumped Naruto's bones a long, long time ago ()
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Jiraiya's Point of View
Look at all these hot babes! It's like heaven on earth for me!
Not to mention the fact that I'm so far away there's no chance they'll even suspect I'm here.
heheheh
…………
You know what? Fuck it, it's just not the same anymore.
Part of what made peeping interesting after I met the brat was that I could shove him into a room full of naked women, and sit back to watch the fireworks.
Of course, the feeling was mutual of course, so I've gotten thrown into a few onsens as well.
I can still hear him bugging me for a new jutsu, little brat never fucking gave up, not even when I thought learning some of these would kill him.
Kid, you sure as hell proved me wrong.
I can still hear you shouting "Oi, ERO-SENNIN," at me. Even the memory gives me a slight urge to begin arguing with you.
Naruto, I'm not sure some of us can live our lives without you here to push us.
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I didn't realize this until after you were exiled, but Hatake had treated you the exact same way that my sensei, the Sandaime, had treated me. He favored my team mate Orochimaru, an irony that I sure as hell hope occurred to the 3rd when he took the grass-cutter sword through the gut
Of course, I turn around and show favorites again, but this time, your father get's all the attention. However, for some reason that I can't figure out, he turned out okay.
I mean, besides the not being a pervert like his sensei.
That's one of the things you and your father always had in common. Even after he had gotten married, he still refused to acknowledge the glories of the female body (young female, mind you) despite my best efforts.
Heh, maybe I worked so damn hard to make him a heterosexual pervert in order to make sure he didn't start liking little boys like my ex-team mate, the snake bastard.
I wonder at what point was it that I started seeing you as both a student and something like a son.
Of course, both you and your father would yell that I shouldn't have any kids because I'm an ero-sennin.
But it looks to me like you both turned out okay.
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Pretty odd how I've taught both the 4th and the boy who would have been the 6th Hokage, had not fate intervened.
Gahhh, fate, now I sound like that Hyuuga boy.
I wouldn't mind having his eyes while in a public bath of course, I mean think of all the possibilities, heheh.
I guess it's funny that way, Naruto. I actually remember people the best after you've beaten the shit out of them. Half the time (if not more), they thought they would just kick your ass without any problems. I mean, hell, you kicked Mizuki's traitorous ass when you hadn't even made it to genin yet.
I've known a lot of amazing things in my time, Tsunade's cleavage being one of them, but not many academy students could totally beat the hell out of a chuunin.
As stupid as it looked like I believed you were, I always knew you were something else, brat.
Fuck, I sound like a total pansy.
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I'll never understand anything that the bastards who call themselves the council do.
I mean, by exiling you, all they've done is make sure that Tsunade will resent them as much as possible. And neither she nor I care about how wrong it is, sometimes I wish I could just put a rasengan into each councilman's chest.
Okay, maybe not all of them, but the ones who scared the more timid ones into going along with the plan.
Fucking assholes…
You'd think they'd get it through their tiny little heads how useful it was to have a shinobi like you be part of the village. You'd be the best damn Hokage ever, only, without Tsunade's eye candy.
Seriously, someone who beat some sanity into a freak like Sabaku no Gaara should have been praised for saving the village.
But we all know who got the credit for that, don't we?
Little red-eyed fag.
Those sons of bitches nearly held a parade in that moody queer's honor after that. It was only when Sasuke did the one thing that might be considered humble and denied that he beat Gaara, and acknowledged you, that they stopped.
Fuck, it's not like those shitheads believed him, but more like they just didn't want him admitting something like that in public.
Seriously, I don't know what Tsunade's waiting for. Every single one of those mother-fuckers should be thrown out on their asses.
And if I had my way, riddled with my kunai and shuriken.
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Sakura……
Brat, what the hell is wrong with you? Why did you make a mistake as fucking stupid as being attracted to her.
She's always been nothing but a bitch to you, and a slut to Sasuke.
I bet if she could gotten that asshole into bed when she was 10, she would have done it gladly.
Compared
to Tsunade, Sakura almost looks like a pink-haired guy.
I ask you,
what the fuck did you find attractive about her?
She has like NO BREASTS!
It's like a motherfucking crime against nature for a girl to have no breasts.
If she never spoke out loud, I bet Orochimaru would screw her, at least until he saw the other hole.
Heh, after that, you wouldn't be able to get him to touch her with a ten foot stick.
Maybe kill her though, almost makes me wish he would come and do just that.
I wonder if Tsunade is as annoyed with her bitch student as I am.
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I wonder if I could have lived your life, and turned out the same way.
Fucking doubt it, if I had been treated like you, most of Konoha's population would suddenly be lacking the heads department.
Bunch of shitheads they all are.
And I still can't figure out why they keep seeing you as a demon, considering.
From the relatively small amount of knowledge I have on demons, I do know they have the shortest tempers in the world. Add that to more chakra then any normal human could possible hope to achieve and you have the world's most sensitive bomb.
I can't help but wonder why you didn't just snap.
Now that you're no longer a leaf nin, you'd have every right to come back here and slaughter everyone here who made your life a living hell.
Keep in mind however, that I made your life a living hell in order to make you stronger, so I hopefully don't end up losing body parts next time you come by.
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These days, I just sit around peeking at women. I doubt I'd do anything to help if the council wanted me too, but I might help Tsunade, if she doesn't bitch to me too much about it.
Brat, you're enough to drive anyone fucking crazy
I wish like hell you'd come back.
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AN: And that's my view of Jiraiya's thoughts for ya.
A couple of notes to end this with:
1. I tried to keep his thoughts from being redundant, so besides focusing hatred on the council, I tried to vary the topics a little, like Jiraiya counting the similarities between Naruto and his father.
2. As far as I know, Sasuke is the one who Konoha tried to give credit to for defeating Sabaku no Gaara. Which everyone who's seen those episodes is bullshit, because we all know how much of a badass Gaara is. Everyone knows whiny, angsty pretty boys can't beat a true badass, except maybe by boring them to death.
3. I tended to make Jiraiya a little angsty himself, I guess because while Kakashi showed favoritism to his students, so did Jiraiya as far as I know.
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Third chapter up, and longer then the other two before it by a long shot, even without the acknowledgments.
After this chapter comes Kakashi, which I'm going to start working on right away.
Then, I'm gonna try and do Hinata.
If you have any suggestions for me, it'd be great to hear them, and if you want to discuss any of these, my msn is in my profile. Plus, it'd be totally awesome to hear from someone who's read this.
Please R&R, and this time, I won't pull punches from flamers. Anyone who flames will start to notice soybeans getting sprinkled on them from a helicopter. If you're allergic to soybeans, then I suggest you don't flame, kay?
I'll still be here, somewhere.