A.N. Ok, so I've been learning just how hard it is to write action scenes without sounding ridiculous. Here are my best efforts- please tell me how it turned out! (in other words- REVIEW!) Also, I got a request for more line breaks, so hopefully this will be more comfortable to read.
Disclaimer: You just have to rub it in, don't you. No, its not mine.
P.S. Does anyone else feel like my sentence structure gets repetitive? it comes from writing too many formal essays, and not enough creative stories.
Havoc was gaping at the scene unfolding in front of him, and even Hughes was momentarily stunned before he come to his senses and pulled Havoc to the side, seeking shelter behind a huge slab of broken concrete. Half of their shock was from the room's inhabitants, the other half from the room itself. The room was massive, the ceiling so far above that it was hardly visible, and the walls obscured by pipes, gears and machinery. And in the very center of the room sat a console with a chair and hundreds of arterial tubes.
Standing next to the chair was a tall, blonde, and vaguely familiar man over which towered the most horrific, mutilated, multifaced…nightmare… that either of them had ever encountered. And with a roar the… thing tore itself free of the concrete pillars it was impaled upon, blackish fluid running down its side as an evil laugh rumbled out its enormous mouth. "You think that can stop us?" shrieked Envy. "Your going to have to do better than that!" he challenged as red lights sparked over its side. The gaping holes, which would have stopped any normal creature, rapidly closed.
Hughes and Havoc crouched watching, transfixed, as the beast leapt towards a small, familiar, blonde braided figure. "Brother" shouted a piece of metal as it struggled to stand. Ed turned towards the charging Envy, leaping aside in time to avoid the blast of flame from behind him, which hit Envy face on. "Are you asking to get singed?" Mustang bellowed.
Havoc turned to grin at Hughes, but Hughes was focused on something behind him. A childish voice sounded from above Havoc. "Can I eat them, Father?" the creature perched on top of the concrete slab moaned. "Can I? Can I? I'm hungry."
"Yes Gluttony" the tall figure drawled, without even turning to identify Gluttony's meal. Hughes and Havoc slowly backed out into the open, watching to see what that…thing called Gluttony would do. Ed spotted them and yelled at Mustang. " Hey, looks like you managed to pull in even more people into this mess, Colonel Bastard", automatically assigning the Colonel the blame.
"Hey, just think of it as additional support." Mustang shouted back, sending a ball of fire at Envy's eye, who screamed in pain, blundering blindly and almost crushing Al.
"Watch out!"
Ed slammed his hands together desperately, and a huge stone pillar pushed the body of armor out of the way before one of Envy's massive feet came down on top of him.
Hughes and Havoc were having no better luck holding off Gluttony. The knives and bullets stuck in him didn't even knock the homunculi down, much less kill him, and with their amazing regenitive powers, homunculi could survive multiple deaths, The multiple "small" wounds Gluttony had already suffered from Mustang and the Elrics made no difference either.
Mustang tried to keep an eye on both battles, but was having trouble. Envy had advanced to pin Al, who was trying, unsuccessfully, to rouse the unconscious Ed, so Mustang nearly missed seeing Havoc fall over a piece of rubble. He had time only for a quick, unaimed flame to stall Gluttony before rushing over to the Elrics, now separately pinned under to monster's paws. Envy saw him coming and wiped him out with a quick flick of his tail. Mustang slammed to the ground and barely managed to roll out of the way of Envy's foot, but the claws caught and tore Mustangs alchemy gloves.
"Shit" he hissed, nursing his bloody hands. At a sudden crash, he turned back and "oofed" as he was slammed down to the floor again. With horror, he watched Gluttony stalking forward over the uneven floor to the now unarmed Hughes, stumbling under the weight of Havoc who he was supporting. Mustang struggled against the heavy weight of Envy, who simply laughed at his efforts, then pressed down harder on his prisoners. Sick with trepidation and uselessness, Mustang watched his friend and his subordinate face the inevitable death by digestion.
"Bam. Bam. Bam. Bam."
Four perfectly aimed shots rang out, one after the other. Gluttony reeled back with a bullet in each bloody eye, the center of his forehead, and his throat. He struggled to sit back up, but was forced back down when three more shots rang out in quick succession and Hawkeye dropped down upon him.
Envy reared in surprise, momentarily releasing his hold on the alchemists, allowing Mustang to roll free and aid Ed in dragging a damaged Al out of the fray. Hawkeye quickly slit Gluttony's throat with a knife to hold him off for a few more minutes. "Sir" she yelled. Three items flew through the air. Mustang caught and donned the new pair of gloves as Havoc reloaded his gun. Maes fumbled the knife she threw him, fingers slipping on the blood that covered it. Hawkeye switched her attention from one homunculus to the other. With carefully measured bursts of fire, she aimed at Envy's eyes, throat, brain and heart. Which each shot she advanced, and with each step she staggered further back, howling in agony.
Suddenly there was a much more animalistic shriek of pain. Maes, having seen the chimeras slinking hesitantly into the room, had whipped around and flung his blade straight through the brain of nearest one. Just as quickly, Mustang and the Elrics began aiming alchemist attacks into the midst of the hoard. Maes backed behind the three alchemists, hoping to find a new weapon. A slight motion warned him to the threat before the wounded chimera attacked. But human reflexes weren't fast enough to get him completely out of the path of the beast, and he yelled as the beast's claws tore into his arm and side. "Shit" snarled Mustang as he saw his best friend fall. Recklessly he threw his flames into the destruction of the chimera that had downed his friend. "Chief" hollered Havoc, clearing Mustang's head long enough for his subordinate to pull Hughes to safety, covered by Hawkeye's gun. Sheltering Hughes under a slab of concrete, Havoc and Hawkeye advanced on Gluttony, trading shots, trying to kill the Homunculus as many times as possible. The mass of chimeras was left to the alchemists.
Envy peeled open an eye, slowly battling the pain, and the first thing he spotted was Hawkeye. Damn that human he though furiously how dare that puny…HUMAN…kill him. He would… he would get that bitch. And with a flick of his tongue, he attacked.
Hawkeye paused to expertly reload her gun when she felt Havoc freeze beside her. She was about to turn to see what threat he'd detected when something slimy slammed into her, wrapping tightly around her arms and legs, hoisting her off her feet to reel her in like a fish on a line. "Lieutenant!" screamed Havoc, as she was smashed into the wall. Envy laughed cruelly as the Lt.'s head whipped back, spraying blood into the air and leaving a smear on the wall. "Hawkeye" yelled Havoc again, desperately. Mustang whirled to see what was harming his lieutenant and froze in horror at the sight of his Lt., hanging limp and bloody from Envy's grip. There was a moment of silent shock before Mustang recovered and roared.
"Hawkeye!"
Hehe. don't fall off the cliffie! Next Chapter coming soon.