I'm back! :D
Kinda. In a sense. By the way, you WILL be hearing from me about the sequel soon. :D I'm just planning it out right now – I have the basic plot down, I just have to get some more details straightened out and then I'll start writing. Don't worry – I haven't ditched it! xD
This time its not an actual chapter – It's just here to clear up some confusions you might have had. Sorry if you didn't understand some parts!
So, to answer some questions:
Why did the princess from the diary die?
Remember, when she abruptly stopped writing in the diary? Well, it's because the guards found the diary when she was writing in it. She mentioned before that they started to hit her, and this time, they decided to punish her for keeping the diary, and they got a bit too … uh … enthusiastic with the hitting. Oo;; And so, she bleed to death. D:
Why were they attacked by Marth's country?
Aritia wanted more land. D: Invasion. –sighs-
Why did Zelda stop ignoring Marth?
That one time in the brawl against each other, Marth demanded an explanation as to why Zelda was ignoring him. She rethought it over, and realized that it was pretty pointless to ignore him that way, as the war was way before he was born and had nothing to do with him. Good job, Zellie! xDD
If you have any other questions, feel free to ask me! :D
I had an anonymous review (with constructive criticism!). Heres the reply from me! xD
Zelda and Marth fell in love WAY too quickly to be believable.
Sorry if this wasnt clear enough, but they knew each other for quite a while by then. Its just that I decided not to write what had happened from the start of the tournament to then, because it was pretty irrelevant to the actual plot. So, it wasn't a "love at first sight" thing, don't worry. xDD
Not to mention Zelda would not risk her life to reunite two souls. Shes responsible for an entire kingdom; she cant carelessly throw her life away when so many people depend on her. To be honest, the chapters after three rushed.
At first, I thought it might be kind of likely, because Zelda always seemed like a caring and kind person, so I thought she would always try to help someone who needed her. However, you do have a point about her ditching her kingdom – I guess I didnt consider that far. Heheh – sorry about that! D:
I know it seems a bit rushed, but I wasnt exactly sure what I could put in – there didnt seem to be anything else that could really build a stronger foundation, because I pretty much put in everything I thought I needed in already. xD (I am considering revising some parts though to make this fic better according to the criticism, though. :3)
Disliking someone because of their ancestors seems out of character for Zelda.
Good point. Oo;;
Link seemed out of character too, with his stuttering and nervousness. I know you have a lot of room to work with regarding Link's personality since he essentially doesnt have one, but I dont think he would get nervous that easily.
I know hes not likely to get that nervous easily, but he likes Zelda, and people tend to get a bit nervous when they're close to the person they like. Also, that one time he was taking that walk with Zelda, he was just trying to figure out how to word his worry about Zelda and Marth's relationship. xD
Nor do I think she would blow up at Roy. She's a very kind princess, remember?
She is a nice person, I know, but she was worried sick for her friend's safety and was stressed out. That's why she got pissed. xD
Thanks for pointing out the part about the Author's notes, by the way. xD I'll stop doing it in the middle. :3
That way you don't have the dame word twice in the same sentence. Speaking of speech, you pointed out that Zelda was formal and very princess-like even when away from the castle. In that case, I think you should have kept her speech formal as well. I doubt a proper princess would say "wait up."
Oo;; Oops. Heheh. xD I didn't notice the awkwardness of that sentence earlier. D: Sorry!
YOU'RE RIIIIIIIIIIIIGHT! DD: Woops. Thanks for pointing that out! xDD
Thanks for the review, my lovely anonymous reviewer! xDD