A/N:I never expect to do a author's note this early in the story, I just wanted to know if you guys like how the story is or do you guys want more violence. If so, I just start over again and use my Chaos army theory and turn it into the hosting project thing. I give you a preview on how the Chaos part is if I change the whole story to see which one you like better.
Maylin Barricks's POV:
I can feel my heart pounding in my ears, my vision was becoming blurry, my breathing became labored, behind me I can remotely hear the footsteps of my captors behind me. They was playing some type of game with me, the cut the left side of my rib cage with a sword, then let me go, I was running threw a forest, branches whipping by me fast, slapping against my wound and my face, but I didn't care, I wanted to get far away from them. When I thought they wasn't going to chase me, I heard them behind me, laughing, calling out my name, telling me to come back. They are still far behind me, even though I was wounded I still very fast, but I know soon that I will black out any minute now, I lost a lot of blood. In front of me was a huge tree, that I knew how to climb, dad use to teach me how to climb up trees when I was younger, he always say just in case I need to get away, this is the perfect time to use my training. There was a branch not to far up from my head, I streched my arms above my head, gripped the branch tightly and pulled myself up, I wanted to take a quick break, but I know my captors can still see me. So again I reached for the branch that was closetest to my head and pulled myself up.
It took me at least ten minutes before I got to the middle fo the tree, where there was no possible way they could find me. You did good, Helen cooed in my ear, I couldn't really say anything to her, but I just smiled a little. I heard their foot steps stopped at the tree I was in, oh gods, they found me, I don't know if I can fend them off, I'm too weak as it is.
"Where is she?" came a growl, I recognized that voice, it was they guy that cut me with the sword, his name was Dylan Catoloni, I recognized him immediately, he lived not that far from my house.
"I don't know, she couldn't have gotten far, could she? She's severly wounded," the female answered him, it was Valkyrie Briley, she went to the same school as me, her and I used to be best friends until she left and never came back, then she got all evil villian on me.
"Come on, let her die out here, we need to see your father," Dylan said, his voice was rough, cold.
"Fine," I peaked a little, for I can see them walk away, Dylan walked in front of Valkyrie, he was five feet in front of her when she turned and looked directly at me. She nodded at me, and mouthed "I find you some help, stay where you are." She continued walking behind Dylan, sometimes glancing back to the tree.
A/N:So do you guys want this one or the previous one, this one will start when she is held captive and gets cut and end when she is rescued. It won't necessarliy be a camp, it will still be located on a uncharted Island of Hawaii, but the travel sometimes, to different places. This one will have more action, but will also have some of the story mixed into this one. There will still be a parenting class. This one will also be detailed. Anyways let me know which one you guys like, and if you want to add anything to your character. They all live in the same house, the girls and the guys have different wings, boys haves west and girls haves east. If you want to add anything to your rooms let me know. Also everyone just got there three days ago, but won't start training yet, because Chaos was waiting for Maylin to show up. That's all for now