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Chapter 3 Twilight's night
She stood there as he walked around the corner. She was so tempted to run out there and ask if he would rather go on the tour tonight. But alas she didnt. She went back to reading. And just as soon as she picked up the there was a knock again. Her heart fluttered. "Please be Flash, please be wanting to go tonight." She thought as she galloped to the door. When she got there and answered it, her heart dropped. It was just Pinkie Pie, Flutter Shy, Rainbow Dash, Rarity, and Apple Jack. "We've got to talk y'all." Twilight said. "Whatever about?" Questioned Apple Jack. Twilight gave her a glare saying that she could mule kick her. "You all asked Flash to come to my house. That is what about." Twilight said with anger. She began to cry. They all looked at her with sorrow. "Jeez, sweety we just thought you might want some help. We didn't mean to make you cry." Twilight looked up at them. "Rarity, i'm gonna need to look pretty for tomorrow." Rarity shot up at the oppurtunity. "Pinkie Pie, i'll need you to plan a party." Pinkie Pie went bonkers. "Really?" Pinkie Pie asked with delight. Twilight looked at Rainbow Dash. "I'll need you to make sure there ain't a cloud in sight." Rainbow smiled and said "Sure thing bud." Twilight sighed. "I'm sorry I don't have anything else for the rest of you all to do. Will you all be willing to help Pinkie Pie?" Flutter Shy and Apple Jack looked at each other and in unison said "Yes! We would love to." Twilight looked so happy. She started to cry again. "I think it's getting late, do you all want to stay the night and get everything started in the morning?" They all looked at her and Rainbow Dash said, "We are going to go ahead and get everything started. Sorry but we want to get a head start." Twilight looked depressed. "Alright if you all get tired and need some rest come back here and take a rest. As they walked out the door she stopped herself from crying. She crawled into her bed and fell asleep and started to dream.
Twilights Dream
It was dark, so very dark. Twilight couldn't see her own hoof infront of her face. Where was she? She tried to run but wasn't sure what direction she was heading in. She ran straight into a wall. She wanted out of the darkness. Suddenly a bright light came from no where. She ran towards it. And she felt a warm embrace against her lips. She felt her heart stop beating. She looked into the eyes of the one she fell for. It was Flash. She blushed as her heart revived itself. She pulled away. "Flash... why... why did you just do that?" She questioned him. Flash smiled at her. "Because we are married silly." Her mouth dropped. "You mean? How long? I wouldn't marry some one I just met would I?" Flash looked at her confused. "You mean you don't remember. Sweety it's been six years. You just didn't meet me we dated for 6 months. The first month we spent getting to know each other. The second one we went out atleast four times a week. The third was the the first time we made love. The fourth was when you found out you were pregnant. The fifth we moved in together and I followed my dream and opened my own place. The sixth we got married." Her mouth just dropped. She couldn't believe it. She started to cry. Flash said "Sweety don't cry, I know it's rough. Do you want to see our son?" She looked up. "I have a son?" Flash walked into a room with her. "We named him after our dear departed friend. Michael, he was murded 2 months into our marriage."She couldn't belive it. Michael is dead?! After all I put him through." She began to cry even more. And then she awoke.
Reality
She awoke screaming. She was scared. Her heart beating out of control. Why, why did she dream that? When she dreams it normally comes true. Does this mean that she will marry Flash and Michael will die? She started to cry. Rainbow Dash walked up to her bedroom. "Hey you ok in here. I came to take a break and you were like freaking out and crying in your sleep." Twilight looked down. "Please Rainbow I have a secret I need to get off of my chest."
Ok so that's it for this chapter. So any ideas about her secret. Let me know. See y'all next time.