Disclaimer: I don't own To Aru
Author Notes: Thanks again for everyones support. With said I want especially thank Punitor567 for giving me a very thorough analysis with proper criticisms, these are the type of reviews I especially enjoy because it gives me proper idea of how I can do better. Secondly I can't believe it took someone this long to point out many of the criticisms you did. I've been expecting someone to do so for a while now but it hasn't happened. In other words yes, I am aware of your concerns about the story and have been expecting someone to call them out.
First as far as what tone the story is going for. It's whatever I want it or need to be. Writing a silly story does not mean that the writer cannot be serious about the progression of the plot and conversely writing a serious plot does not mean that the writer has to make the execution of the story serious. I am not used to writing fanfics I'm used to writing my own stories with their own style and usage of tone, I often will set up important and serious plot elements through scenes that are often very ludicrous and silly and it is how these elements develop along the way that gradually change the tone of those elements. Also keep in mind that I am used to writing novel like stories where chapters are 30-40+ pages long and everything I updated so far was originally supposed to be a a part of a single chapter but those type of updates are unreasonable for me at this time so I had to change the pacing which forces me to change how the story unfolds itself but nonetheless the story and plot is serious of what it's trying to do even if it's execution sometimes silly.
Secondly, as far as Uiharu out of character rampage goes I do feel it is justified, the two things Uiharu takes the most seriously and cares the most deeply about are her friends and her responsibilities as a member of Judgment, and this incident attacked both of those at personal level. Even in canon Uiharu has been known to be pretty hard core when it comes to Judgment such as being tortured by Dark Matter the second strongest level 5 for information and refusing to give in and The entire incident with the runaway tanker truck with radioactive nuclear chemicals, I mean come on that was some serious 007 Mission Impossible level shit Uiharu pulled, and even within that volume in the author notes Kamachi point blank states that when Judgment is involved Uiharu can get really out of character.
I know that you did not mention it but I felt the need to cover Saten's out of character usage of Judgment's network as well, although what she did was very stupid and I will admit that, her actions were partially justified as it pertains to the plot we have just yet to get far enough to see how or why. Also Mikotos out of character going to Judgment for help on investigating what Touma had gotten himself into wasn't supposed to happen. Originally Mikoto was to start her own investigation and Judgment got involved in something that led to their own investigation of him as well. But things were changed around because of the pacing. The way these updates work they wouldn't allow for my standard 3-5 chapters each with 40+ pages in Times New Roman Single Spaced 12 pt. Font to set up a basic premise like I normally would, the pacing just wouldn't allow it and it really bugs the hell out of me but I had to make some changes with the set up to kick start things a bit faster and it's still taking quite while.
Thirdly, As to how Uiharu set the dorm on fire I originally planned on her directly setting it on fire manually from her computer by accessing the DOS prompt but I phased that idea out before I even started writing to one that could be intricately connected to several different elements of the plots for both Railgun and Index, I was going to wait on details and specifics but since you pointed it out I decided that it was best to answer. Basically, it wasn't intentional she never meant to set anything on fire but when Uiharu grabbed Saten's computer she unintentionally set it on fire with own ability that temporarily increased power and out of her own control due to her extreme overemotional state and the rest of the dorm caught on fire from the flames from the computer. In other words her extreme overemotional state led her to temporally go through RSPK Syndrome. A phenomena that occurs do to various reasons, extreme emotional states being one of them. The result of RSPK Syndrome causes their abilities to increase and sometimes even lose all control over them. This has been seen with Musujime Awaki during the Remnant arc and the entire events of the Poltergeist Arc were caused by this phenomena, not to mention Therestina Lifeline and Gensei Kihara developed the Body Crystal drug that was used by Therestina in that arc. Body Crystal was designed to actively invoke RSPK Syndrome, and it is the same drug Takitsubo was being forced to take in order to utilize her abilities for ITEM. Judgment had also been involved with investigation of the Poltergeist Incident and the Body Crystal.
I hope this properly addresses your concerns of the story and if not feel free to ask me or criticize me more about those concerns and thank you again for such a detailed analysis on you thoughts.
IMPORTANT: At some point in the story I will need a police sketch of Touma with some specific requirements and because I lack proper drawing and photoshop skills I am calling out to anyone who might be interested in helping me out with it, all credit will go to you of course and the person who helps with it will also get to hear some spoilers concerning that plot point, if anyone is interested please feel free to either contact me through the messaging system or the comments and review section where we can talk about the further details from there. This request is still considered good until I update saying otherwise your help would be most appreciated.
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"So, you want to know about that fucker on the TV makes sense I would like to know what the hell all he was trying to pull myself, but why you asking me about him?"
"Because we're bored and all the information surrounding this person has either been altered or super deleted even on urban legend site where information is already very inaccurate to begin with it's like somebody is trying to super hide his existence."
"Well that's a given, of course information about him is controlled but why do you feel the need to make me the first one you ask?"
"Because you are making it obvious that you know something, and you are someone that she knows, so it beats trying to search from scratch."
"Wait, I'm the only person you know who has information about him?"
"Of course, that's why we're super asking you?"
A sly and mischievous smile spread across her face when Umidori had realized how far out of the loop they obviously were.
"Actually, I don't feel like telling you fuckers anything."
At that Kinuhata's smile grew as she ascended into the dark villain that sends terrors through the spines of children.
"I could always tell Super-Hamazari that you have been eating nothing but sweets for months and haven't once brushed."
"OK OK OK, I'll give you some leeway to start your investigation but nothing more."
"Why not tell us everything?"
"Because it wouldn't be fun if I did now would it, after all what would be the point if I told everything. It's not like you really care about the result of the investigation you just want something to kill some boredom."
"True."
"Listen, you want to get some information to work off of just ask random people. That bastard has built up a reputation several times over."
"Are suggesting that he's so famous that any random person would know, and we were just left out of the loop?"
"No, what I'm saying is that many people know of him but very few people know who he is or that other people know of him as well. Seriously just ask someone."
As she looked around she found a random person walking through the park that she had been sitting in before being disturbed.
"Hey you!"
A rough looking teen stared at what he thought looked like a silly Goth-punk wannabe little girl. Lucky for him the idiot did not voice his thoughts for he might have just ended up as a punching bag hung from a tree by his own intestines if he had.
" Uh…Yeah?" He answered with a genius level vocabulary.
"What level are you?"
"I'm a Level 3 pyrokineticist" the idiot proclaimed proudly.
"Do you know a spikey haired guy who constantly shouts "Such Misfortune?"
"That Fucking Bastard, yeah I know him and I'm going to kick his ass next time I see him." As he said this he blasted a tree with a fireball that miraculously didn't cause a massive fire in the park.
"Can you really."
The idiot went to respond but bit his own tongue and stood in silence as if to attempt to make a proper come back that he knew could not.
"Well, I'll hire somebody to kick is ass."
Both Kinuhata and the girl in the dress were surprised to see such a change in one person first he was filled with stupid levels of pride. Then the mere thought of the guy they were looking for caused him to nearly burn down park, just for him to nearly be filled with fear at the idea of having to fight him.
"See? Of course your best turn out for results would be to ask girls."
"Girls? He goes around getting into fights with girls?"
"Well, I don't think it really matters to him rather or not you're a girl, guy, crippled, pregnant, young or old he'll fight you if feels like it. But that's not why you should ask them, it's not the fights it's his ability to gain their affection that becomes a problem"
"So he's a super womanizing pervert who's willing to pick a fight with anyone breathing?"
"Well, that isn't exactly a false statement but there's more to it than that. Either way make sure you ask around any restaurant or grocery store anywhere where they might sell food. You should definitely get some feedback if you hit the right places."
"So, basically we just need to go around and asking women, food shops, and any guys who may have ended up in a fight with him about what they know until we can piece together enough information about him to truly get into the deep level of investigation, right?"
"Basically yeah, if you ask me I might give you too much information too quickly for it to make it worth your time."
"I guess this can allow us to blow time and super enjoy ourselves."
As they were walking away they were stopped by a last remark that was much more tense than one would expect Umidori.
"Also, I know that you're just having fun but don't go investigating too deep into this guy, ok. If you think that you've seen the darkest and most twisted shit this world has to offer, you're wrong. Outside these walls which protect us, there is a Hell so dark and so twisted you can't even comprehend it, the outside world runs on different laws, laws that defy the very nature of what we have come to understand about our reality and your only savior is ignorance."
"Thanks we'll keep that in mind Morpheus."
"Fuck You."
From there they went their separate ways Umidori left the park as Kinuhata and the Girl in the dress went further in thinking about what was said.
"I don't like it."
"What?"
"Umidori, the entire time she avoided trying to talk about him so much so she even helped us find more ways to find out about him."
"What's the problem with that?"
"She is super conceited if she knew information that we didn't and wanted she would have taken pride in that fact and super dangled it in front of us, and she would never go out of her way to help us."
"But that's not what happened, so you're thinking that maybe she wanted to avoid talking about him."
"Possibly, but then there was that warning she gave us, she super isn't the type of person to warn others of possible dangers."
"She definitely seemed completely unsettled thinking about whatever it was she was warning us about."
"So what is it she finds so terrifying, the guy we're investigating or 'Hell from the outside world' that follows him?"
They stared at each other as a seemingly eternal silence fell between them.
"I'm starting to think we should be getting super paid for this."
"Yeah."
SWOISH
"Oh, Kuroko there you are, we need your help."
"What do you need Konori-senpai?"
"You see these two binders, there are four more of them on the sidewalk right outside, Misaka-san is keeping watch to make sure no one tries to steal them but they are very big and heavy and kind of hard to carry up all these stairs."
"So, you just need me to teleport them up to the office?"
"Yes, and once that's done we can start on the investigation."
"Got it, I'm on my way sissy."
SWOISH
Attention to all whom it may concern.
A bounty has been put on the head of a unique individual with a rare ability. The subject of the bounty is known as Imagine Breaker. Subject must be captured alive for full bounty, dead for partial. Once the subject is captured reply to this email to receive information of the destination that the Imagine Breaker must be delivered to. There is no limit to which method you use to send the subject as long as the body is confirmed. At that point if Imagine Breaker is confirmed to be alive then the full bounty will be automatically transferred to your account. If the body is confirmed to be dead then the partial bounty is will be transferred.
BOUNTY RULES:
1. Any Information on the Imagine Breaker must be investigated on your own with your own expenses.
2. Equipment needed to capture Imagine Breaker must be acquired on your own with your own expenses.
3. Equipment needed to kill Imagine Breaker must be acquired on your own with your own expenses.
4. Body dead or alive must be sent to the designated location at the designated time as accordance to these specifications after replying to this email.
5. Your reward is based on the confirmed condition of the body once received, not when captured.
6. All terms are non-negotiable.
BOUNTY:
Dead: 10,000,000 euros
Alive: 100,000,000 euros
Thank You For Your Patronage.
Good Luck.
Holding the mysterious email in hand a twisted smile spread across the face of the 4th Ranked Level 5 Mugino Shizuri as another hunt begins.
Yes, another update out. The story is slowly starting to unfold but how much more can it unravel before it gets going?
Thanks Again for your support.
So Long and Thanks for All the Fish!
Signing Out.
