Alright now this is the second part. If it's anything like the first then we can assume that there is going to be some glitches.

The Stranger in the Palace

(Why that for a title?)

After King DFF beheaded in the empress Dana in his courtyard, which later became known as the "Devils End" many rumors spread of wild tales that no one could tell if they were true or not and for years the great king DFF sent out researchers and explorers to see that all these tales were in fact, in true.

Rumors about what? I mean wouldn't we like to know where these researchers and explorers are going off too? It would be nice to I don't know be told what they were searching for. I mean right now they could be looking for indoor toiletries! Picture it for a moment would you.

King DFF: Go out and find an plumber!

Researchers and Explorers: "Alright."

*Time passes*

Return with Mario

King DFF: I am pleased.

Every time however, the explorers and researchers came back with the same, unfortunate answer. That they did not know if the allegations were true or false, as there were equal signs that pointed to them being both true and false.

Allegations? Of what!

This distressed the King. For he was now unsure if he'd ever find out if he and his beloved children were still in danger of the once great Empress Dana, even in her death.

Vampires or zombies? Hmm this isn't going well

It was only fate,that one night, a legend appeared(Is that a good legend or a bad one?). Many knew that there were still those who worshiped Empress Dana(Alright now is she a goddess at some point. Because that's what worship is for.), for she terrorized only the weak, but the strong were left in peace, and it was the strong who remained loyal to her after her death. Many believed that the Empress paid them all to stay loyal to her, but some were weary of the theory, as she was dead, so why would they stay loyal?

Alright again what is We All Need A Nap talking about? I mean Allegations to them might make sense. But right now I'm confused.

There was a stranger waiting for the King DFF in his drawing room. The stranger was by no means attractive, with his tall but scrawny form, along with long greasy haie,(Hair!) and eyes that could make a pig squeal in fear.

"State your name" the King ordered of the stranger.

"Why...I am Lord Cornelius Corps" the ugly man said firmly, holding out his sweat, slab of a hand for the king to shake. He did not even bow, this man was out right disrespecting the king by acting with such manners.

(Marine Corps which is the spelling she uses.)

"In the future, I might remind you to bow to your king" King DFF reminded him, sternly, but not cruelly. The king got an Erie feeling from Lord Dare(What did someone else enter the room? I mean Corps was in there? When did someone else get in? Those are obviously lazy guards. I means first a stranger walks in. Not long after another stranger walks in. I mean come on! Guards aren't lazy! Servants aren't lazy. Heck if you're sick in Parliament's guards immediately throw you out. Mostly due to the fact it's illegal to die in Parliament.), but his kindness stopped him from judging the man to quickly, The king however, was certain that he'd be keeping the man away from his three children. "Now what is your business here?" The king asked, walking around and sitting in his chair, while the stranger remained on his feet.

"I am here on behalf of our old Queen...Empress Dana" lord Corps replied, a smirk playing his thin lips.

And no one notices this Lord Dare is hanging in the background? Hmm how odd? This author is leaving so many gaps! I can't believe it!

Alright this is it for this one. I'll be carrying on writing this. If you got any others you'd like Analyzed feel free to shot me a PM. I'll analyze the whole thing top to bottom and do a little digging for members that are involved. Until next time Peace!