Harry was very sad about Hermione's death. He cried then killed himself with the unforgivable killing curse. He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named rose to power and destroyed everything because he had forgotten that killing everything leaves no more slaves. THE END
AN: This was not my original ending, but sadly, the people did not feel that the last chapter had good closure. So, I hope this helped a great deal in leaving a good taste in your mouth.
To: ARedHair,
I am touched that you chose to leave me some comments on my story and very happier that you even managed to leave some constructive comments. However, I believe your take on the review quota was perhaps a bit misunderstood and I would like to take a moment of your time to explain it.
Continuing this story takes an investment of time that could be better placed writing other stories or honing different aspects of my writing. If I am not recieving an adequate amount of useful feedback offering me an insight into what my readers are thinking about the story (whether it be how real or nonexistant the setting is, how the dialouge sounds, etc) then my invested time is not giving me the returns I feel I should get for the time. Fanfiction. net is here for a multitude of reasons, but if you would kindly look the next time you are writing review before you press submit, you will see a message saying something along the lines of "this is an opportunity for you to offer words of praise or words of improvement". I clearly asked for words of improvement with my review quota.
Furthermore, what you suggested, in asking the readers a specific question, for instance the example you used, "do you think I went over the top with Harry's outburst to Hermione she saw him crash?" predisposes readers to answer one way or another. It is either, yes or no. There is no real opportunity in this question for a reader to say "I think the circumstances leading up to this outburst may have been overly tilted to make a more agressive Harry" or "I see how this can happen but I can't believe he let her just run away like that". Therefore, it is in the best interest of recieving good, meaningful feedback to avoid predisposing readers to any ideas at all.
Even though I do enjoy writing (and I am writing for myself), and though this moment in the story was already planned, this actually makes a good ending point because it can be seen as the final chapter of the story. Thus your comments about the story being "abandoned" are quite false as when you reviewed the story yourself it had already been listed as completed.
I am very sorry that you feel so strongly against review quotas but as I said, I believe you may have misunderstood its real intent. This quota was not set up to recieve any "atta boy/girl" comments but something constructive so that the rest of the story may actually grow to be better than it began.
In final, I will say that I appreciate that you were able to see that this story did indeed have a plot preplanned that it was following to the end, and since you were to see this and actually felt inclined to mention it in your review, I know that I at least have succeeded in making the story well structured and managed to keep the story on track. Your one dimensional comment I am not quite sure in what manner you meant by it (are you saying one-dimensional as in from Harry's view only? Or one dimensional in the manner the story tends to move (eg. covering one central chapter theme before moving onto the next)? Or is it one dimensional in some other way?). However, whatever the one-dimensionality is that you refer to, it could indeed be due to the shorter chapters. I decided to structure the story with shorter chapters in order to properly gauge varying ideas and styles in writing and more accurately pinpoint problems within the story itself.
It is highly unlikely due to the lack of interest in this story that it will be continuing but thank you very much for taking your time to send me some feedback on my story.
Please do not judge those with review quotas so harshly in the future as they are certain to have a multitude of reasons for having them. However, I noted that you have never written any stories on your own account before. I might suggest that you try to write a short story of your own so that you can better identify with writers for whom your review. This might also offer you a new fresh viewpoint on many aspects of stories that you may be taking for granted. Whether you do or do not doesn't really matter to me, but again, thank you for taking the time to give me some feedback. On a final note, I would have preferred giving this to you via PM, but you had it disabled. I am not certain if this was kept intentionally or not, but I think it would be less like a radio and more like a telephone conversation.
theDictionator