If you are 'Anonymous the reviewer' please read this:
Sorry, this story was simply dull and unoriginal
Me: Of course! I already warned you guys by the OOCness and crazyness of Vegeta... So?
The humor wasn't likely to amuse even a first grader, nevermind an adolescent/adult fanfiction audience
Me: Uhh, what? Why am I getting 11 positive reviews?
Your grammar is despicable; you seriously need to consider having someone proofread your story
Me:Would you like to tell me which part(s)instead of telling me so? This OOCness is a story when you're bored and want to make something funny. Obviously I didn't even WANTED to upload this story at first, because I thought it was just something stupid for my own boredom. I already told that I was bored when I wrote this, so either you read it, either you don't. I don't care...
I am often frustrated by authors like you who receive many reviews for hot-off-the-press stories like this when truly talented writers are completely ignored
Me: Okay I completely understand this, but are you frustrated that I get reviews? Look Anonymous, THIS STORY was when I was just a little girl who had nothing to do at home. Maybe you should read my other stories, but that's besides the point. Even 'talented' writers want to have some fun writing something stupid to make her/him laugh. This chapter 2however, I wrote it a few days ago, but if I'm bored I don't want to make it a long story and GOOD story, or else I would've written and updated my other stories.
If you take your respectability as a writer seriously and have enough decency to respect your fellow fanfiction writers, I would remove this story immediately and try writing something more polished
Me: What's wrong to have some fun? Some readers are just as bored as I am and want to read something different. Why should I remove it? Okay I will make it better 'someday' in the future, but now, I just want to laugh and update this story since it was YEARS when I haven't updated it. And I already have some good stories. Reallywho are you to tell me what to do to my stories and JUDGE me because of one story? And why didn't you left your email behind so people (who might be reading this) wouldn't waste their energy on you?
Even if you are writing a humor fic, you aren't excused for unrefinement and complete thoughtlessness when it comes to the plot and characters of your story.
Me: Sorry, I've read ENOUGH stories that has Out Of Character-ness, and even WORSE than this! Why did you even reviewed such a long review? Don't you have something better to do than to judge me, when you even HAVEN'T read my stories (some of them I didn't even uploaded here)?
I hope that you take the time to improve your writing.
Me: Yeah, me too! Have a nice day! Lol!
If I would get answers from him/her later in the future, I will delete this Author's Note!
I wanto to say something to the reviewers who have the same issue with me as 'Anonymous (what's your nick?)':
Like I said; either you read it, either you don't. I already warned you people written in the summary that this is not a normal fic. It's just something to read when you're bored. And don't get me wrong that I'm not a Vegeta fan, I AM! That's why I wanted to have some fun for exchange.
Have fun reading this chapter!
Chapter two
"Shut up Kakarot! Instead of insulting me like a pig, admire my suit! Or else I'm going to send you to the next dimension!" Vegeta hissed angrily.
'Man and I thought I'm crazy! He needs a therapy! And fast!' Goku sighed in defeat. "Fine… Vegeta…"
Vegeta smirked. "Hn, you idiot! Don't call me Vegeta! Repeat after me: I the idiot Kakarot love the suit of Vegeta, the Prince of all Pikachu's!"
Goku gulped. 'I can't believe it! This new Vegeta creeps me out! But I 'should' tape it! But it's too late now…' He takes a deep breath and holds his laughter that is threatening to burst. "I… the id…iot…"
"THE IDIOT! SAY IT!" Vegeta yelled at the top of his lungs and was also getting stares of other people around them.
"I THE IDIOT KAKAROT LOVE THE SUIT OF VEGETA, THE PRINCE OF ALL PIKACHU'S!" Goku yelled, in fear that Vegeta might 'hit him'.
All the people in the McDonald's were snickering but some held their laughter, knowing full well that someone with a high temper like Vegeta could only mean 'trouble'.
Vegeta nodded his head proudly. "Yes that's it!"
Kacarrot,… ehmm I meant GOKU continued to watch the new and idiotic Vegeta. 'I mean, who would enjoy a Pikachu suit at his age? Oh boy, this is going to be a loooooong day. -- '
Later at Capsule Corp.
As Goku tried to explain things to Bulma about to get him into therapy, Vegeta continued to show off his suit in the mirror of the bathroom, while Goku and Bulma heard every word what the Saiyan Prince said. "Yeah! Who's your daddy? It's me, PIKACHUMAN! The new hero, who fights for the good of people, protect the innocent and gives JUSTICE to the people!"
Goku and Bulma peak into the bathroom and stifled their laughter. Bulma whispered to Goku, "Goku isn't that out of character? You're right! We have to get that evil Vegeta back or else we'll lose him forever." Bulma's voice was concerned. Was her own Vegeta gone? Or will she save him in time?
"Man, I never thought that having a 'good' Vegeta would be this disturbing! We should change him before he will become something worse…" Goku said while he was trembling nervously.
"What do you mean by 'something worse'?"
"Maybe he'll transform into a Raichu! I never liked Raichu, Pikachu's cuter!" Goku said happily.
"Maybe I should bring you to see the therapist too." Bulma exclaimed with a long face and sighed.
"Why? I thought I'm sane!" Goku is disappointed.
"If you think that he will transform into a Raichu, you're crazy! He's not a Pokemon, he's a Saiyan! Pokemon do NOT exist!" Bulma was almost out of oxygen.
Later when Vegeta came back from the bathroom, he started complaining with himself. 'I should divorce from her and marry a female Pikachu-fan! That way I can die happy!'
Bulma noticed it. 'Maybe I should talk to him?' "Vegeta, what's wrong?" 'Maybe he FINALLY cam to his senses and is ashamed of himself! Please let it that!'
"Bulma…" Vegeta started with a serious voice. "I want to divorce…"
"WHAT? WHY?" Bulma almost lost her consciousness.
"I'm not happy with you. I… I want to marry another one like me, a Pikachu-fan! Together we will fight the evil!" Vegeta said in the most serious way.
'Maybe he became WORSE! Oh my God! He needs help! AND FAST!'