I don't care how whiney I sound- I am a bit dissapointed. I got more reviews pertaining to what was going to happen next than I did about the actual chapter.
Only one person offered to by me my iPod. I can see the love the rest of you have for me.
I have happy news- I got my first major flame for the last major chapter.(Note major sarcasm) I understand if my story sucks and you flame me about that, but flaming me because I sound like a whiney 12 year old when it comes to reviews isn't gonna help you any. SO why bother?!?
I understand if I have a ton of grammer and spelling mistakes and you flame me, but flaming me because I sound like your 2 year old just makes you sound immature. But flaming be because I sound whiney Won't make you any more grown up.
I understand if your my best friend/ family member and you tell me that I won't make it through life if I do something seriously wrong, but flaming me and telling me that I won't make it through life if I can't handle your criticism, is just plain wrong.
I would even understand a close friend or family member teaching me a lesson, but a complete stranger flaming me about how Whiney I sound, isn't exactly gonna teach me anything, except that some people just feel so bad about themselves that they try to drag somebody else down with them.
ANYWAY-------
BPOV
"Why are you here."
"Can't I visit my niece without a good reason?"
"James... what are you doing here?"(HaHa surprised much?)
"Tisk, Tisk. You never did have very much patience."
''James!''
"Fine, Miss Impatient." He started "I smelt another vampire in the area and I came to check it out. But it's only you."He said you with disgust in his voice. Why he thinks I'm disgusting is beyond me. He is the one that murders people.
"So,did you write that?"I asked. Wishing that I had never even seen it.
"Nope, your boyfriend did." Did he mean...Edward...
"I have never had a boyfriend." I've just wished.
"Well it was Edward. Are you sure that you weren't together? He would oof." Edward had tackled him to the ground. Why the hell was Edward here?!?
James and Edward started circling each other. James kept trying to make a move but Edward would read his mind and block. Finally Edward jumped on James and bit his neck. He started to tear Jame's head off and I looked away. I heard Edward light a lighter and then I smelt smoke. I had never smelt something so rancid. The smell was indescribable.
He walked over to me.'' Bella we need to talk."
I wanted to so badly. But I remembered what he did. He broke a blood promise. And Carlisle knew; but he still left me.
But part of me still wondered why he would've written 'forgive me.' if he didn't mean it. Did he realize it was a mistake to leave me behind.
"Well just because we should do something doesn't mean we will. We were going to change each other if something happened...but that didn't mean anything to you though did it?"
"Look Bella I was..." But I cut him off. I didn't want any more lies.
"I don't care Edward. I don't want any lies. I don't want anything from you. Why can't you just realize how much pain that you caused me? I came here to be alone. I tried to go to a random place. But I ended up here. Why is it that everywhere I go, somehow your there?"I was getting louder and louder.
I continued my rant."I used to think that that was a good thing, back when I still loved you, or loved what I thought was you. I never knew you. Not the real you. Either you used to pretend you and I were friends or during your transformation your brain was screwed up."I started to cry, wishing for tears that I knew would never come.
"Please don't follow me again Edward. You aren't who I thought you were."
And I took off into the woods. Hoping and praying with every thing I had that he would prove me wrong and come after me.
I know that it's short but I really can't write more right now. I have another story bugging my mind that I might write after this. PLEASE NOTE that I will keep this story my priority until it is finished. Which might not be long. Here is the summary of my new idea.
After the incident with the Volturin In New Moon Bella doesn't forgive Edward. Even though Edward knew he deserved it, it still hurt all the same. Bella actually wants Edward but Has a good reason to believe He doesn't want her. So Bella pretends she doesn't want him back to try to ease the pain. It didn't help.
What do you think. I also have another one. Here is the summary for that. I already have a name for it.
PASSWORD PROTECTED- Bella and Edward are best friends. They are partnered together for a sience expirement and Bella sends Edward the wrong document for it. Instead of the school one it states her love for Edward. Will it change things?
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