to mellie:
First of all your a bitch.Secondly just because you can write does not give you the right to try to destroy the dreams of others by being an asshole anjust bitching about how bad the story was and not adding any true constructive criticism!
If I could only get my hands on your fat evil ass I would cut open your back and pour salt on your most sensitive nerves. Then I would stitch it up and cut open your stomach and pull out your organs from least to most useful show them to you and pile them up then drench them in gasoline and set the ablaze and force you to smell your own rotting innards while you lay wasting away.
also I'm sure your not 13,I bet you just want more credit for your stories and more fame.If you were really 13 you would most likely be famous to an extent.I though am 13 and don't need assholes like you trying to discourage me!!
burn in hell. I will soon die as well to torture you from heaven!
also i have spell check.I wrote this mostly on ff.
4 more things
1:hinaXnaru doesn't really have that much of a bad rep.
2:I will send this twice.
3:you are a loser if you can remember that far back into a series also I was writing a different scenario and it was supose to be kind of cheesy!!
4:I hope this hurts your feelings.