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Year 2019 - Citadel, Councilor Tevos office
"Councilor, I take it by this call you have given my request some more... consideration" a somewhat mild but graceful tone called out.
Councilor Tevos hated these kinds of decisions; they never ended up where you wanted them to and always went wrong.
"After some advisement and some strong reconsideration" she sighed, a weary expression marred her usually beautiful face "I have decided to give my full support on this observation mission, though I still think it would be prudent not to over estimate your cloaking technology" she advised her, thinking of how many ways this could go wrong.
'They could be seen, there could be a malfunction, they could detect a communication or the ship could crash' she thought as she contemplated her rickety future silently.
"Although if something does go wrong on this mission I hope you are ready to face the consequences" Tevos added in warning and a last-ditch effort to get her to call the mission off. She could order the crew back to the citadel but that would make many powerful people very unhappy with her.
"If something happens I can deal with the blowback councilor" the voice reaffirmed "And remember, I want Shiala on that ship, to see that thing's proceed smoothly"
"I will see what I can do, tell athyeta that I bid her a good day would you matriarch" she requested cordially waited for a nod then cut the link.
Tevos just sighed as she walked over to her desk and slumped in her chair. She put her head in her hands and just let out a slow aggravated sigh.
She looked up from her desk and reached for the communicator to call her assistant. "Nelena I need you to put a call in to our high risk exploration dock, I will forward the needed specifications call me when it is done, also if you could decline any call's or visits for the next four or so hours" with that she cut the link smirking at the mental image of a confused assistant dealing with all of the visitors. She leaned back in her chair and pondered why Shiala, the one who protects her while training her personal commando's. She must have an ulterior motive she mused. We shall see when you play your card, Benezia.
Year 2020 - Thessia, Armali, House T'Soni. Seven months passed
Benezia called over the com to her personnel assistant Mekera, she is a purple asari with white tiger-like facial marking. Good kid, a little naive but that is to be expected at her age. "Mekera would you please send Shiala up to my office" she asks, even though it is a carefully hidden command one she was quick to pick out.
"At once, mistress" Mekera answers quickly sending a message to Shiala whom is currently in the biotic training facility.
After about three minuets of waiting
"Thank you for coming so rapidly Shiala, I hope you are well" She asks warmth flooding her voice.
"Yes mistress, it has been quite a pleasant day so far" She replied cordially, admiring the curves of the matriarch, she herself was about 6'1 slightly smaller that the matriarch who stood at 6'2 while Benezia has a light blue skin, Shiala is purple and has circular patterns around her eyes, then Shiala had noticed her gaze lingering longer that it should have and flicked her eyes back to the matriarch in hopes that she did not see, but she doubted she would miss it.
She noticed but ignored it and filed it away for later consideration "Shiala in four days you are to take a shuttle to the citadel" Holding up her hand to stop the unasked questions she simply informed "You are to spend the next three and a half years aboard the Ilurva providing cohesion and security with 4 other commando's"
Shiala usually stone faced let her eyebrow markings rise to convey her surprise and displeasure. "The only reason I send you is because they are entering uncharted territory and because we have picked up signs of a new sentient race. As you can understand we need to monitor the situation and the matriarchs have decided sending you would be a good idea"
"Do not worry Shiala, I will still be here when you return" at that she turned to leave a blushing Shiala alone.
Year 2020 - Citadel, Docking bay 273
Shiala looked around the bay glancing at the fairly small frigate that would be the home of her and 21 other lucky crew members. She sighed as she realized just how bad this assignment would be. 'I hope I do not end up killing someone in boredom ' she thought in a jovial tone that brought a smile to her face.
"Hello, you must be Shiala" a happy chipper voice called up from her left. She glanced over and noticed an asari wearing a flight suit and guessed "Demeia right, you must be the ships pilot. And yes I am Shiala, I will be providing security and advice on behalf of matriarch Benezia" she finished her face still set in stone.
"Well you seem like a fun person to be around. Il be over here alone, on my box" She said glumly that badly hid a smile.
"It seems like I will not have to kill someone to keep me entertained" she said drawing smiles from both of them before they filed onto the ship.
Year 2022 - Planet side, mountains
"Why did I get chosen to go off the ship, I don't like it here it's too damn cold on this planet" Leassa moaned like a child as she trudged her feet through the snow.
"That's because we are in the mountains" Shiala explained, staring to get sick of her complaining.
"Why are we in the mountains again?" Leassa growled while frowning at her companion.
Shiala sighed and shook her head as she stopped and turned to look at her "We are here to establish surveillance devices so we can observe as to what kind of technology they have while observing civilian movement" Shiala explained while grinding her teeth and clenching her hand's to stop her-self from striking this woman after explaining what they were doing for what must have been the 15'th time.
"I get why here, but I meant why did we have to go" Leassa moaned as she started to shiver from the cold. Stomping the ground to try to get her muscles to warm.
Shiala just ignored her and just turned to start walking again, 'Maiden's' she thought while shaking her head just then she heard what sounded like a mix between a yell of anger and a cry of pain, she stopped and snapped her head in that direction. "Did you hear that?" Shiala asked quietly as she moved to crouch down and draw her weapon, eyes scanning the terrain, all they could see was snow, rocks and the occasional tree. But she was well aware yells and screams could sound close but be miles away in the mountains.
"No what?" Leassa asked oblivious but slightly curious about what had gotten her attention as she looked around straining to hear.
Then suddenly there was a deep roaring sound that seemed to echo of every surface for miles. Leassa looked to Shiala with a scared expression on her face, thinking 'that roar sounded close by, as whatever made it was chasing or attacking prey'.
"Shhh, get down" Shiala whispered quietly, "Because of where we are whatever that was could be miles away, hopefully" still glancing around looking for hints as to what made the sound.
"Is it safe to be up here" Leassa asked beyond nervous as to whatever it was would find them, praying under her breath that the goddess delivers her to safety.
Shiala looked to her as the creature roared again sounding closer and said "No, it is not safe to be here, we need to get to our location and leave quickly. It is getting closer" she commands, decades of outdoors training and experience coming to the forefront of her mind. Senses sharpened she sees what looks like a large muscular four-legged animal, its fur covered in blood running after something. "Leassa it looks like we cannot avoid contact with it as whatever it is chasing seems to be coming towards us, stand behind me and slightly to my right. Be prepared to use your biotics" Shiala whispers as she draws her side-arm and enables the muffler, 'Don't need everyone in the next 20 miles knowing someone is here' she thought.
Leassa moved as commanded and summoned her biotics, ready to warp the creature if it got near them. "Shiala I have no hunting experience, what do I do" she mumbled just loud enough for her to hear.
"Do what I do" she snapped back while listening to the sound of footsteps getting closer.
Leassa heard the growl again but this time in the middle it suddenly stopped after a whimper. "What happened" she whispered to Shiala puzzled by this turn of events.
Shiala took a few tentative steps forward, her eyes still flickering around looking for something but seeing nothing. Her eyes eventually came to rest of a medium sized humanoid shape down on one knee with a knife in the bear's throat.
Shiala and Leassa just stared at this creature; it took them all of a few seconds to realize this was the native of this planet, a female 'human'. She was about 5'11 with deep black hair and dark blue eyes; she was dressed in what looked to be leather armor with a furry coat over the top. As she looked up from her kill several expressions fluttered across her face, the first was anger, then confusion and then strangely hope.
As she stood she retracted her knife from the kill, as it was long dead. She stood with a slight lean on her left leg, leading her to believe she had been injured, which also was proved by the amount of blood freely flowing from her.
Leassa took a tentative step forward but was stopped dead in her track's when Shiala grabbed her arm, frowning she turned to see her still in shock but more cautious than anything. "We don't know if she is dangerous" Shiala explained like it would make everything make sense, growling to try to make the human distance herself.
So when it stood and started limping towards Shiala she raised her weapon and it froze dead still before it looked to its hand holding the knife and then her bleeding side, almost looking like she was having an internal argument she held the pointed end of the blade before hobbling forwards.
"Shiala what do we do, we can't have her living to tell anyone of us being here" leassa lamented.
Shiala stoic as always just stared with her gun pointed. "It does not look like that will be a problem if that bleeding is not stopped" she said glumly.
The human staggered within 10 feet, stopped swapped her hold on the knife so it was at its handle undeterred when Shiala started to glow with biotic power.
It quickly brought the knife down into the ice causing it to stick, causing both asari to stare amused and confused.
"What is she doing" Leassa whispered hoping for some insight.
"She is showing that she is not a threat by laying down her weapon, I don't know why though" Shiala obviously sensing the human female's intentions.
They only watched as the reached behind her back and removed her backpack. Standing and limping over to Shiala she stopped about a meter away and held out the bag, with such desperation in her eyes as she watched her blood flow from her she shoved it into the asari's arms, took a step back and fell down beside the knife. Just laying there bleeding with a relived smile spreading across her face as she slipped into the beyond.
Leassa could only stare at the desperation this woman had as she gave Shiala the bag and could only wonder what it was that was worth spending you last dying breath on securing safely. She scooted over to the woman who looked so pale for some reason, and then she realised that she was dead. "She is dead Shiala" She confirmed while still with shock and confusion fighting over her expression.
"So she is" was all Shiala could muster. "We should return this bag to the Ilurva to see what it was that was so valuable. After we do what we came here to do of course"
"Fine" she replied while growling with annoyance at having to spend more time in the snow.
Year 2022 - 3 hours later
"Shiala to ship we are ready for pickup, be advised we have a small piece of cargo we are requesting to bring aboard" Shiala's voice crackled over the radio.
Demeia stared at her radio for a second thinking about what the extra cargo could possibly be. "Demeia here, what sort of 'cargo' do you have" She asked suspiciously while looking at her captain for answers.
A few seconds later Shiala's voice can be heard again "There was an encounter with a human, it killed a large animal then limped over to us, digging her knife into the ice then giving us a bag shortly before dying"
Demeia and her captain could only stare at each-other for a moment looks of pure confusion plastered over their faces, the captain gave a small nod and commanded "I would like to see what is inside this bag, Shiala"
"Yes captain" Shiala replied then cut the link.
Mystified Demeia turned and asked "What do you think this human had in the bag that was important enough to pass on before she died? Captain"
The captain just stood there for a moment "I have no clue as to what could be inside the bag"
"It sounded important to the human" Demeia pushed
The captain sighed, a long and slow sigh. "Yes, yes it did. And I would like to know why"
Demeia joked "No one said we could take presents from the locals, now we are goanna be spoilt sick"
That caused the captain to crack a small smile, but a smile none the less.
"Since Shiala is already a hold of it tell her to head to the med bay, we need to be sure it does not contain any potentially harmful items to the crew. I will be waiting" She ordered
Please tell me what you think, this was my first fic and I would like people to tell me what I did wrong and what I did right.
THIS CHAPTERS RE-WRITE IS DONE