I'm not usually going to update this quickly but because I already have this chapter done I wanted to upload this because I love getting a review because I usually don't get them so thank you to ERODE(Guest) for reviewing this. This is once again a pre-written chapter but I will always love to get reviews. Now we should get to the story but first…
Disclaimer- I do not own MLP, I only own my OCs
Chapter 1:
In a place outside equestria
"Come on Lightning Wolf! Hurry up!" A blue unicorn mare wearing a cape she never took off and spotted in a bit of grim that never comes off her coat called form on top of a hill. "Oh come on StarWolf(Star) it would be easier if you let me see more than just what's in front of me." Lightning Wolf(Lightning) a teal colored Stallion mock-complained. "But that would ruin the fun." StarWolf just laughed cheerfully. Lightning grumbled walking up the hill. When Lightning got to the top of the hill and she took off the magical shield that was preventing Lightning from seeing anything she didn't want him to see. "Finally" Lightning said "This took forever." StarWolf just rolled her eyes. "Stop complaining Lightning, this is worth it, now look." Lightning stood there his mouth gaping. He was looking at an amazingly designed two story house with a workshop next to it for StarWolf and their youngest and only daughter BrightStar a light blue pegasus that's blind. "So how do you like it?" Starwolf asked. Lightning Wolf just stood there. "Uhh Lightning are you ok?" StarWolf asked as she waved her hoof in front of Lightning Wolf's face. " it… is so beautiful" Lightning Wolf said hugging her tightly. . "CAN'T BREATH!" StarWolf managed to say. "Oh sorry" Lightning Wolf replied letting her go. "And there's a workshop for me and Bright(Bright Star), a calm area for you, and FireStar(Lightning and StarWolf oldest and only son who has OCD, cutie mark is a star of david, also called Fire) can clean up as much as he wants, and I even have my own muffin cabinet, and you better not take my muffins got it?"StarWolf said explaining than getting very defencive about her muffins. "Dear can we look on the inside now?" Lighting Wolf said. "First we have to get the kids" StarWolf said. Lightning and StarWolf started walking back to their camp when Star heard a rustling. "Alright you two come out." The two kids came out of some brush. "Awww Fire you gave us away. If you hadn't moved we wouldn't have been found!" BrightStar complained. "DID NOT and beside they would have found us eventually!" FireStar replied angrily. BrightStar just huffed and sat down. "It's o.k. it just makes it so we don't have to walk more." StarWolf said cheerfully. "Come on." They walked back to the hill where StarWolf showed them the house to Lightning and covered FireStar's eyes as she had done with Lightning. StarWolf walked happily up the hill happy to give her family a good house to live in. "Now would you guys like to see the inside?" StarWolf asked. "YAY!" The kids exclaimed running down the hill(of course the magic covering Fire Star's eyes was gone). "Come on Lightning race ya." StarWolf said cheerfully running down the hill after the kids. "Oh come on Star no fair wait up!" Lightning yelled running after her. Lightning Wolf got to the bottom of the hill and was breathing a bit hard from running "No… fair… you… cheated." Lightning Wolf told StarWolf. "No your just slower and have bad reaction time" StarWolf said smiling. "Oh come on can we just go in the house now?" BrightStar whined. "Sure I mean you hardly whine Bright so you really want to go but because it's new I'll show you where the door is." StarWolf said. "Shouldn't you show all of us the door?" Lightning asked. "Ya but you can see, anyway everyone follow me."StarWolf responded. StarWolf showed them where the door was and led them in. "Welcome to our new home." StarWolf said proudly. Then she used her magic to transport all their stuff from their campsite to everywhere in the house it's supposed to go(without the rest of the family knowing). "What did you do that for mom?" Fire Star asked. Starwolf just smiled and didn't say anything. After they walked through the entrance-way they walked into a room with different doorways with no doors, on the left was the living room, in front of them there was the stairs, and to their right was the kitchen. In between the stairs and the kitchen there was a medium sized room for a bathroom and a closet in between the stairs and living room. "Wow, this awesome mom!" Fire Star exclaimed after StarWolf showed them everything. "I'm glad you like it but remember there's still an upstairs." StarWolf reminded him. "Sweet let's go see it." Fire Star said enthusiastically. "All right come on." StarWolf replied to his enthusiasm. after going up the stairs there's a right and left turn leading to two different hallways. On the right there's four bedrooms, a guest room(just in case), a room for each of the kids then a room for Lightning and a room for StarWolf. On the left there's a bathroom, another living room, stairs to the workshop for StarWolf and BrightStar, and an area to the attic and roof(because the roof has a flattish structure). After showing the family there new house Fire Star said "wow mom this is awesome." They just laughed until StarWolf said "I'm glad you like it Fire." after that they all went to sleep in their new rooms for the night noticing that StarWolf transported all their stuff to the house.
