The Olivia Files: I'm Gonna Make This Place Your Home
by frozen belle and olivia
Reason for being in Truly Unique – It's Truly Bad (with an artistic flourish).
I shall admit, I am putting this on for slightly personal reasons.
This person comes to me and asks if I will put their story up in my community. I look into it, and see that it's not very good.
The plot is a Fangirl of the show is Gold's and Belle's kid, not very original and the editing is not very good.
Everything is just one long paragraph, she some how managed to put a snowflake in place of the 'O' in Frozen, along with some purple hearts and teddybear heads.
The way things are strung together is hard to follow. I'm 50% certain the main caricature and her friend are in line to see Hunger Games 2 and then time warp and are in line for Frozen, and then are back to going to see Hunger Games again.
So, the editing is bad, the flow of things is not there, the story is, just because of what it is, not very good.
I think this author has potential to be better, but I don't see it here.
But this author doesn't know that, because after telling her that I would add this story to the community if she fixed just her editing, she said she would, and then blocked me.
So, maybe she will one day fix this story many problems, maybe not, unfortunately she won't let me ask her. But, seeing as how she has yet to fix the problems and it has been a few days, I'd say that for now, it's a sub par piece of work that is hard to look at.
So why is it here you ask, is it just here because I think it's bad. No, I said artistic flourish, the bear heads and purple hearts is interesting, I have never seen that before on the site, so if for no other reason, look at it for that.
