Okay, I decided to rewrite this. I had originally intended on just touching up on what I had already written, but I turned on Missing by Evanescence on my iPod (after some FNAF music and Kamelot) and... BAM. Whatever rut I was in suddenly was sucker punched right in the kisser and impaled in the ass by a rusty flag pole. ((Sorry, but I read that line like six times and I still laugh so it's STAYING XDD))

So, new and improved, here is the new version of what I wrote (and took down)!

Warning(s) are and probably not limited to: Blood, cursing, violence, OOC (because I make a horrible Rin in my opinion, but hey, as my dad likes to tell me continuously, practice makes perfect), and an OC (who I improved to NOT be so close to Mary Sue, I hope).

Everything belongs to their respectful owners!

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It was the early morning at True Cross Academy Town, the students slowly waking from their beds in their dorms. One girl in particular was a bit slow moving, wanting to take her time. It was there, still... Sitting on her shoulder and cackling at her very misfortune... Whispering words of hate and anger into her ear... The pain it gave her was becoming only a numb droll in her every day life, but the damage it was doing to her was not as short term as one might think. It dragged her down and wounded her mind, traumatizing her. She couldn't focus in class and she couldn't do her homework, and her friendships never last long... Not with this... this thing eating at her very being... Always finding new ways to hurt her and destroy her from the inside out... And sometimes, the outside in...

Going to the bathroom, the girl saw the black mass of shadows and blood and eyes watching her, cackling at her as though it knew just what she was thinking... Which more often than not, it did. Her own chocolate brown eyes were clouded and hollow, her cheeks sunken in slightly. Her long, straight, light brown hair was a tangled mess, but it was easily fixed with a quick brushing. All the while, though, the thing on her shoulder was spewing hateful words and lies at her. Nobody would miss you if you were gone! Bitch! Skank! Whore! were only just some of the things that it said to her. Tears burned her eyes, but the emotional pain was truly lacking. If anything, the reaction she had to it was only something that happened out of habit.

"Raven? What's wrong?"

Raven quickly wiped her eyes and turned to the one girl who tried to help her with her problems... "Paku..."

Paku glanced at Raven's shoulder where the thing rested, but she said nothing as she looked at the girl in the eyes. "Raven... If something is bothering you... I think that you need professional help... Okay?"

Of course. If only a therapist could get rid of the thing that haunted her so. All Raven did though, so as to not discourage the girl, was say, "Yeah... Alright... Thanks, Paku..."

The girl looked worried, but as her friend Izumo walked into the room, she turned and joined her, talking to her in hushed whispers. Raven only watched until they vanished into the baths. She then turned back to the mirror and sighed. Turning on the cold water in the sink below, she cupped her hands under the stream and allowed it to pool. But she didn't raise it to her face. The numerous scars and cuts on her wrists stopped her from doing that. Cursing, she dropped the water and hurriedly turned it off. With the seasons turning warmer, she couldn't exactly make a good excuse for wearing a jacket to class anymore... And her cuts went up to the crease of her elbow, so bracelets wouldn't disguise them... Bandages would be too suspicious... The only thing that she could think of was to just keep wearing her jacket.

Ever since the autumn season started, the thing on her shoulder had done nothing but hurt her, over and over. And she was on her brink... She was so close to something rash that it was driving her insane, and yet, with every word the thing spat at her right in her ear, that something rash was starting to sound better and better... Anything to get away from it and its harmful ways... And as of late, it had taken on a sinister agenda. It made her lose focus purposefully, causing her to create a great deal of messes and make her speak her mind out loud when she wasn't supposed to. It was ruining her and her life, and there was nothing she could do about it. Well, nothing that she knew of...

Shaking, she dressed herself in her school uniform, grabbed her jacket, and hurried out of the dorm before anyone could stop her. Not that anyone would... Most everyone in the door thought she was an 'emo freak' and wanted nothing to do with her. Her day was normal for the most part... She sat in her classes and tried to focus, she attempted to do her work, she went to a lonely lunch and ate very little, and had extra time between lunch and her next class. So, sitting alone at the base of the fountain in the school yard, she drew her knees to her chest, hugged her legs, and buried her face as best as she could to hide the flow of tears. The thing was cackling and laughing at her, slowly sounding like a group of people. When she realized that it really was a group of people laughing, she risked a glance upwards and found a group of boys walking her way.

Standing, she hid her face with her hair and attempted a hurried escape from the fountain. However, she was stopped by one of the boys. He looked startled some, but he didn't look as though he was going to harm the girl. Dark hair and handsome, sapphire blue eyes, he was a dream boy, but... Raven knew it before the thing on her shoulder said it. He's way out of your league, it whispered into her ear. "Hey, are... Are you okay?" the boy asked her.

Raven nodded, not trusting her voice any. Not with her tears still flowing despite how hard she tried to stunt them...

The boy frowned and looked at her shoulder. He then dusted at it. The thing screeched and backed away. Then... It was gone in a brief flash of blue flames. It was so brief that Raven was unsure that she had seen it at all. "Sorry, there was a bit of dust on your shoulder. It was bugging me." He offered her a smile. "Be careful, okay?" He patted her shoulder and released her arm delicately. Raven stood dumbfounded as she watched the boy walk away and rejoin his friends. One of them scowled and promptly scolded the boy who only barked back, the other two shrinking back a little to avoid the cross fires.

She had no idea as to what he did, but... The thing was gone. Just... like that!

Unsure of how to handle it, Raven swallowed and made her way to her next class, all the while drying her eyes so as to make it appear as though she had never cried.

[xXx]

This was the rewrite! There will be more, obviously, but let me know if you guys like it! (And if you make mention of how Rin got rid of the Demon way too easily, note that it was a low level, at this point he can control his flames, aaaand I did it on purpose because it'll help the flow of the story further in, I promise).

So, read and review, please!

~Adriane