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Blood of the Great Devil
Chapter One: Awaken The Blood From Within, Dark Dragon Sword
On a peaceful night upon a village called Konoha somewhere within the village there a boy who nearly 4 years old and he living by his self and no family to call of his own and as well no friends do the fact is that the villagers tell they children to stay away from him for no reason why.
But in truth is that this boy holds a Buji named Kyuubi that attacked Konoha four years ago, Many lives were lost and the greatest lose was they beloved leader, so the villager put they angry toward the little boy who name is Naruto Uzumaki because of his Jinchuuriki states and all the villagers thought that he's the fox himself.
As in right now 4 year old Naruto is walking a forest thats forbidden to anyone aren't Jounin or above but for now Naruto is walking with left injure leg, bruised up face and his arms have scars but his injures are healing but slowly though and Naruto has blonde hair and whispers on each side of his cheeks and he wearing a black shirt.
As Naruto moving around while tears flowing out of his eyes cause of the pain he just gotten from the villagers and whats more it about 2 months away for his fifth birthday "why do they keep beating me up? I never did anything bad to them" said the confused Naruto as he tries to found the reason why they keep beating or hurting him in fact he had once ask the 3rd Hokage who he look up to him like a grandfather but all he said to him, They just angry and someday that everyone will realize of what they doing and stop but will such a day come? Thats all little Naruto ever wonders about.
Naruto is lost in his thoughts and not noticing where he's going as he tips on a rock then falls down and hits his head on the ground and gets knock him out cold and he enters into his subconscious mind which is where someone who wanted to meet him for a long time.
inside of Naruto's subconscious
Naruto wakes up to see a sewer with water covering his foots and its has barely any light which giving the sewer a dark and scary feeling to Naruto "w- were I'm? did someone found me and threw me in a sewer?" said the confused Naruto who getting scared but then he hears a voice calling out to him so as a four year boy he decides to follow the voice in hopes maybe the person that calling out to him knows the way out of this swear which he doesn't that the 'swear' is his state of mind.
For while now Naruto walks into deeper in the 'swear' who still doesn't know that this is his mind nothing more, nothing less anyway as he goes further while hearing the voice that calling him out yeller as he gets getting closer to the person then Naruto reach the end of the line he stand in front of a huge cage with a paper on it and on it there a word that says 'seal' that gotten Naruto ever more confused.
Then suddenly a huge pair of red eyes open up and scared the poor boy half to death while saying this "so the jailer finally meets his prisoner" with a powerful voice while Naruto looking him funny as he say back to The Kyuubi"prisoner? Jailer? I don't know what you are talking about? I not holding anyone as a prisoner" said the confused Naruto and before Kyuubi could say anything else, Someone else with the powerful voice speck first "before you say anything Kyuubi" said the voice that Naruto turn to see a man with swept back, long, silver and wavy, and he is always portrayed as wearing a black jacket and his style of clothing that Naruto never seen before "w who are you?" said the Young boy as he asking the man in black then "I see, my Jailer is part of your bloodline" said Kyuubi as he has his eyes Focus on the white haired man.
"He is, which is why I must speck with him along" said the white haired man as Naruto whose very lost at the moment as Kyuubi the same buji that attacked Naruto's home village Konoha 4 years ago started to laugh then say "if thats the case, then tell me, Will he going become strong as you are Sparda?" white man who name is Sparda and he's nods toward the Kyuubi who laughs a bit while the fox smirks and Sparda has his whole focused on to the young Naruto.
"Hello young one, like Kyuubi said my name is Sparda, whats more you and me are family, in fact I am your Ancestor though your father side from more then 1000s of years ago" said Sparda while Naruto looking while tears starts forming on his eyes "y you're my Ancestor" said the crying Naruto while Sparda put his hand on his head.
"You must have gone though a lot for a child of your age haven't you?" said Sparda who feels sorry for Naruto "yes I have and I don't know why though" said Naruto who rubs his tears away "I know the reason why there humans hurt you so much because of what they don't understand" Said Sparda as he look toward at the cage where holds Kyuubi "but its not because of Kyuubi here, Just like you, He too is a victim, he was used to attacked your home village 4 years ago as well losing your parents by a man wearing a masked and I know this though your father's memory since I'm nothing more then a ghost that looks after all of my descendants" said Sparda as Naruto couldn't believe of what he hearing.
Naruto couldn't believed it that all this time the sold reason why he doesn't have mother, father or any siblings, whole reason why that he all alone cause a man wearing a mask had attacked Konoha 4 years ago and so he decides yell out his angry that he hold for so long "its all that man's fault that I don't know about my mother, have my father teach me how to be ninja or have any brothers or sisters its because of him I'm all alone" yelled the angry Naruto who also crying his very soul out while the tailed beast doesn't know what to say and Naruto wasn't finish yet "I don't blame you for attacking the village or that no one wants me around, Or I don't have any friends at all" yelled Naruto as his tears dry out.
Then Kyuubi say "Don't be so sentimental with me boy, I just wanted to be free from this cursed cell! well then there it's way better then being chain and pined on a rock" and before Kyuubi could go on, Sparda stand up and say "You know who I am and I can do, If you wish we can Grant you in some form of freedom but to do that I must first make Naruto like I am, A devil" as Naruto look at him when he said 'devil'
So Naruto ask him before anything else could happen "Sparda-san what are you really?" said Naruto who curios about his ancestor Sparda turn to look at Naruto "if you should know I'm a devil and we that much stronger then a demon, Let me tell you a story of my past and please listen to my tale of what I did that was never forgiven to every demon out there" said Sparda who begins telling his story while little Naruto listens to his story.
After Sparda finish his story about him being a traitor and fought against his brothers in arms and as well about him felling in love a human woman name is Eva the love of Sparda's life then later give birth to his two twin sons but didn't get to live long enough to see them growing up as couldn't save Eva "thats my story as Sparda the Legendary Dark Knight who have once saved mankind from demons and devils alike" said Sparda while Naruto is a bit awes and feels a bit sorry for him but he stops and start thinking about something "does that mean I am a devil as well?" said Naruto as he wondering about that.
Sparda answered Naruto's question "yes but only 00.04% of my blood that runs in your veins, if I use my power I can very made you into full fledged devil but you wont be human anymore and whats more the fox won't be in you anymore cause he will turn into a devils arm, a demonic weapon that you could use in battle if he's okay with it" stops and looks at Kyuubi who nods in agreeing to turn into a devil arms then he turn back toward Naruto, " know this young Naruto if you go thought this, the transforming will put you though so much pain that you can't possibly imagine" said Sparda as he waiting for Naruto who has to make this decide.
After thinking for awhile little Naruto finally makes his decide "Sparta-San I will go though the transforming because I'm have reasons why I'm willing do this, one I will show everyone that you never mess with a devil and two I wanted to protected there are precious to me from any harm and thats a promise, I will never go back on my word" said Naruto who determinate to keep his word which make Sparda smiles at this "you know you remind lot like me when I was younger" said Sparda.
Sparta told Naruto to get closer "lets begin young devil and mark this moment that you are no longer Naruto Uzumaki from now you are Naruto Sparda the Dark Devil and I only ask for one thing, show the world what a true devil can really do" said Sparda while Naruto nods at this "Let's rock!" said Naruto while Sparda put his hand on Naruto's head and channels his devil like powers to jump start Naruto's transforming into a full fledged devil and every part of his little body starts changing as well the color of his hair as whole Naruto's whole mind get blight in a dark light.
Outside of Naruto's subconscious
A Burst of powerfully devil aura arise up from around Naruto's body who standing up to his leg as the burst of energy coming out of Naruto's body and creating a huge crater and going as the crater keeps getting deeper and deeper, Naruto's whole body starts cracking and his eyes have a dark glow as he changing, a broken sword that its blade in a shape of flame and the color of it is completely dark black and its header is golden and the sword is in half is bit of pieces.
A shadowily figure appears over Naruto then in a flash a very tall devil takes young Naruto's place, the shadow of the trees covering his face but this figure's skin is black with blood red lines that glows and on his back are bat like wings which giving him the ability to fly and the figure checks his hands and the rest of his body just one swing he destroys quarter of the forest and the figure is awe his power and strength but what about this speed? but he save that for cause he see a break sword that in half and walks to it.
"Now what is this? a sword? I have swords around Konoha before, but nothing like this and I can feel life in this sword but barely" said the figure who voice sounds very demonic and very deep, he picks up the broken sword and checks it then say to his self "I wonder if I do this" he put his hand on it and starts channeling his devil like powers to see if the sword holds any memories.
And what he saw was like he was there as he see a man in black wielding glowing sword and slash the dark blade sword in half and leaving it behind on the ground, After that the figures stops and looks at the broken sword as well learning the sword's name as well its history "so your name is Dark Dragon blade and the person who made you, use bones from a dark dragon but you have gotten broken in half by your sister the Dragon Blade's owner" said the figure who talking to the broken sword.
it didn't take long to gained all the pieces of the Dark Dragon blade and placing the pieces where they should be, Now the huge sword is on the ground as the figure thinking what to do something with the sword then an idea come to this mind "I should able reforge you to your former glory but in order do that I have to channels my power into you but you will no longer be the same cause if I do this you will be bond to me and me alone" said the figure as he see a weak glow from the Dark dragon blade as if it's saying 'I accept you as my master'.
"All right then lets starts oh that reminds me I haven't give you my name yet" said the figure as he about to give the Dark Dragon blade his name "My name is Naruto Sparda, but for the rest of the world It's The Dark Devil" said Naruto in his Devil Trigger form while he place his hand on to the sword and send his devil powers into the sword to reforging it as it giving the Dark Dragon blade a new form and huge dark light as it start forming a dorm of dark light appeared at the Forest of Death.
Time skip 9 years later at Konoha day time
It's a Lovely day here at the strongest village there is cause it has survivor though 3 wars as well many things and here a towel where the Hokage work at and sign many paperwork which is the Kages greatest emery of all time anyway here we found a man in his late 60s and he signing piles of paperwork and it seen like that it's trying to killing him "sigh I'm getting too old for this, I just wish to just chose the next Hokage and finally able returning my retirement but not yet, I can't stop until Naruto is found" said The third Hokage then he realize that it's had been 9 years now since the disappeared of one Naruto Uzumaki.
The old Hokage stops signing papers and look out of the window to see everyone are busy doing they daily everyday routine as he thinking 'I can't believe its already 9 years now since Naruto disappears then 2 months later, this rouge who appeared out nowhere who carries a dark bladed Masamune sword who has an appearance that of a devil but in enough of the, I wonder how team 7 with team 8 as they back up doing they first mission that outside of village' said the thoughts of old Kage as he look at the blue sky and said "it's such nice day" then sigh sadly as he goes back to the paperwork.
Somewhere near the Wave village
A man with grey hair is fighting against a rough ninja from the Kirigakure and one of members of the Seven Swordsman Of the Mist as well "Its not a nice day" said the grey hair man who whose name is Kakashi a Konoha Jounin sensei of Team 7 while other Jounin who a female is guarding an old man who a bridge builder and 6 Genins are with her guarding the old bridge builder and A boy with white puppy next him said "man this too intense for anyone to handily Kurenai-senseni" said the boy who name is Kiba while the white puppy bark that agreeing with him.
Kurenai who the boy's sensei along with 2 more "I know Kiba but you have to hold on and this is how a real battle between two ninjas" said Kurenai who trying help everyone to remained focus and clam but it's not really working when you sensing the killer instinct from a man who fights like a demon who is after all Zabuza Mooch he also known as The Demon of the Mist and he's going toe to toe with Kakashi.
As both Ninjas fighting but one of them is getting tried quickly and the answer Is Kakashi mostly because of his left eye is Sharingan and it once belong to a dear friend of his from time ago, "damn it, Losing too much of chakra , I have to end this here and now " said Kakashi who feels like that he going to faint at any giving moment while Zabuza who isn't shown to be tried at all while having his large sword on his back "well it seen that someone is getting tried and I see that you losing chakra cause that eye of yours, well as for me? I NOT ONE BIT OF GETTING TRIED BECAUSE I BARLY GETTING STARTED" yelled Zabuza who getting ready to kill but then everyone clapping and they tried to location the source of the clapping.
A girl with Ink blue named Hinata as she tries found where the clapping is coming from by using her family The Hyuga clan's bloodline the Byakugan, She locates a person with her eyes and see a male siting top of tree near them wearing a black jacket with blood red muscle shirt with black Aubu pants with red lines, fingerless gloves and has two belts that makes X cross and wearing combat boots and finally on his back is a long sword in its sheath and the hander of it is golden with bit of black but she can't see his face because of the fog "there I found him, he's right next to us" said Hinata who gotten everyone's attention and see the person who still clapping while the mist is covering his face.
"Who are you? what are you doing? this dangerous get out of here" yelled Kurenai who trying have the person to leave the area before its too late but the person says "your right on that, it is dangerous but it's not because the Demon of Mist" he jump off the tree while going down he remove his Masamune from its sheathe and the blade is pure dark black when he land he unleashed a powerful burst of Chakra that feels very devilish and change into humanoid demon and his killer instinct is far greater then Zabuza's.
"It's because of me, and I'm sure you know name of the Dark Devil" said his deeper and demonic voice while 4 of 6 Genins are getting more afraid cause they thought that the Dark Devil wasn't real cause for the stories from they parents.
The other two Genin weren't much afraid cause one she heard stories of the Dark Devil thus becoming somewhat of fan while the other thinks that he's a fake and which he decides do something about it "yeah right I bet your just a fake like that you ca-" before the black haired boy who name is Sasuke from the Uchina clan could finish of what he going to say, Dark Devil appear in front him in a flash "you bet huh? Didn't anyone tell you that you shouldn't bet against me since I always win on bets" said the Dark Devil as he swing his dark bladed that one swing, he created a straight line of destruction and thus proofing that he is the Dark Devil and only he has that kind of power "is that good enough for you?" said the Dark Devil as he moves away from Sasuke who wet his pants in fear.
Zabuza saw of the Dark Devil could do he decides to escape while he still have the chance while Kakashi said something to him "so even The Demon of the mist is afraid of me? is that something" and Zabuza answered back "yes I'm and I'm not going to be fool to face someone who far more stronger than myself right now, you better wish that luck is on your side Kakashi" said Zabuza as he leaves the area in a rush.
While the Dark Devil sense someone near by and walks over where that person is at before he or she could do anything "try run away from me won't do you any good" said the Dark Devil as he cuts down coups of tree and found a person with a hunter mask on and he can tell that the 'hunter' is a female before the ninja 'hunter' could have done anything, Dark Devil grabs her and throw her toward Kiba and boy with sunglasses name Shino and both them hits by the ninja hunter who was throw by Dark Devil.
As both boys getting back up and the ninja 'hunter' then the two Jounins said "everyone we have to get out of here this mission have become far more dangerous for anyone could handily, Dark Devil has the highest rank of rogue ninjas there is, even though he's not from any village at all" said Kakashi as he holds his kunai while Kurenai does the same "I want all of you to take Tazuna with you and go back to the village while we hold him off" said Kurenai who staring at Dark Devil who seen that he getting board at this while waiting both Kakashi and Kurenai while saying "don't even brother trying makes no differences to me, after all I'm far more stronger then both of you Kakashi Hatake and Kurenai Yuki but I think I'm just let you all go cause I have business somewhere eles, lets do this other time" said Dark Devil as he jumps into the air and starts flying away by using his bat like wings.
As Dark Devil disappeared in the distance everyone even both Jounins fall on they keens once the presence of Dark Devil's killer instinct fades, but it doesn't mean they won't able to forget it "Damn it that was Dark Devil the only person on the all Elemental Countries most wanted man there ever lived" said Kakashi who cover in cold sweat because he never been in this much afraid of his life.
Everyone didn't notice that Hunter ninja whose a fake have disappeared to be with her Master and not only that they have't even notice that Hinata who looking at the spot were Dark Devil is blushing while specking in her thoughts 't-that was Dark Devil-sama the only Elemental Countries's most strongest Rouge Ninja every live but he's not from any village and many have said that he's not human at all" then it hit her "I could have seen his face that no one even did" and starts blush blighter then before.
Then without a warning Kakashi fainted cause he over used his Sharingan eye, everyone snap out of it and Helps out Kakashi and the old man Tazuna take them to his house which isn't far from here.
Later with Dark Devil
A bit later after Dark Devil lift the Konoha group in fear and he flying around as if he looking for something, or rather someone "Man there guys were boarding, I was hoping I getting a good fight out of them, but there Genins were in the way but that girl with Ink blue hair is cute though, specking which Its has been a long time Since I last saw there's Headband, could have ask about old man Hokage but that only give me away of who I really am or who I was" said Dark Devil who Naruto Sparda who 'disappeared' 9 years ago but in truth he had left the Village to be stronger even anyone.
Naruto sense someone near him and knows who it is and change back to his human form the lands on the ground while speaking "get any new informant for me Itachi Uchina?" as Naruto while a person who Itachi come out of the shadows "yes I do Naruto, With what I have gathered, The Sanbi's Jinchuuriki has been killed by woman who lead rebellion goes by the name of Mei" said Itachi while Naruto nods at this then sigh out.
"Isn't thats just great! I have to wait 3 years to show up but then I will have 5 out of 9 Devil arms of the Bjiū and freeing the they hosts from they fated" said Naruto as he rise up his hand and two spheres appear above his hand.
"I already have the Kyuubi's and Yoni's and once I have all 9 tailed breasts, I can combine them into well you know the rest Itachi anyway I believe you should be heading back before your panther decides tries looking for you" said Naruto who see Itachi nods at this and goes back to his panther leaving Naruto alone "what should I do next? maybe I really should return home?" said Naruto as he looks at sword is the Dark Dragon blade reborn in form of a Masmune when the sword speck though Naruto's mind as it telling him something.
"So you think I should wait at the bridge for the next battle begins like that I can go with the group from Konoha to return home?" said Naruto as he keep looking at Dark Dragon Blade "lets go with your plan after all they never go wrong but I just hope I can face old man Hokage after this years" said Naruto as he Dark Dragon blade glows, Naruto walks toward the bridge as finally the shadows revealing his face and white hair but bit of it is covering his right eye and said "I have the feeling the next fight is going to rock".
well that ends that, i hope its better when it was before, so stay tune when I go work on chapter 2 of Blood of the Great Demon, laters
P.s this is the re-edit version of this story, but i think it still need some work so let me know what needs to be fix or that it needs a change