So I have a few reviews to answer/reply to! Thanks to those who've reviewed this so far. Here is the mailbox for this chapter!
Allen Blaster- That went downhill... fast... it was pretty well written though. I sometimes like to read these stories with the shorter chapters, and this one did catch my eye since I've seen you reading so many of my stories as of late. So I decided to give this one a try. My only suggestion is to put a warning in bold at the beginning of the chapter if said chapter contains severe scenes like rape and suicide. Other than that, great! I look forward to your next chapter.
It did go downhill pretty fast but I was trying to jump into the main storyline when things get really good! Thank you though! I'm glad you thought it was well written! That means a lot coming from one of my favorite authors on this site! I will remember to put in warnings at those certain points because I know that some people like to skip through the warnings/disclaimers and get into the stories!
Adrinsane- Very strong. Hope you see this story through, keep it up
Thank you! I'm grateful for your encouraging words!
HelgaButterCup- sounds interesting! wonder what will happen :)
I'm glad you enjoyed chapter one! I hope it doesn't disappoint you in the future chapters!
Guest/Anonymous- It's only one chapter and I don't have anything nice to say about your story. Why do writers like you think rape is an interesting, original and "edgy" story element? It's so over done, especially for female characters. Let me guess: she falls in love with a boy who was supposed to rape her (who I'm assuming is gonna be beast boy)? She gets pregnant? We have to read in gross detail as she gets raped? Great. Maybe you'll prove me wrong and you'll make this story a lot better than it sounds, and I'll gladly eat my words. Or better yet, maybe you'll scrap this idea altogether and forget this boring, edgy sexist bullshit. Oh well, a reader can dream. :)
So I know there's always be a critic and it seems you're the first one I have to deal with. I know that rape isn't something fun and exciting and it shouldn't happen. Not one single bit of it. But I also know that when you're a writer you have to climb into some crevices you don't enjoy even thinking about. I posted in chapter one: POSSIBLE TRIGGER WARNINGS RANGING FROM RAPE TO OTHER STUFF! I never said that I would have rape in this story and if I do put it in this story, I wouldn't be posting something that horrid in details because frankly, that's the only thing I won't write about in my stories in details. And my story isn't sexist. And I guess you won't know how this really turns out until it finishes! But please, do stick with following it so that you can find out how it goes.
Kitori-chan- Great story. Good use of grammar and punctuation. Don't listen to the haters
Thank you! I'm glad you like it! And I don't plan on listening!
Guest 2/Anonymous 2- Some in her position if they had the opportunity would kill their tomentors and even kill the parents that sold them as sex slaves
That's an interesting idea but I have different plans than her killing people. Although there may be some form of dying in the story!
Guest 3/Anonymous 3- If your gonna read the first chapter and then assume the story and talk shit about it then what's the point there's no need to say bad stuff about it you should wait and read it I think this is very interesting and I'd like to see how this ends and I'd love and update
My thought's exactly! I mean they didn't even read the warning properly because if they did then they'd of seen I said POSSIBLE TRIGGERS not that there was rape in my story. I haven't even planned it out far enough to know everything involved but I have some ideas of what I'm planning on doing for this story.
And I forgot to post the ages of the characters in here:
Raven- Raven Roth (17)
Beast Boy- Garfield Mark Logan (18)
Bumblebee- Karen Beecher (17)
Cyborg- Victor Stone (20)
Starfire- Kori Anders (17)
Robin- Richard Grayson (19)
Jinx- Janette Willis (16)
Kid Flash- Wallace West (17)
Terra- Tara Markov (18)
Aqualad- Garth Matthews (18)
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Thoughts
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Chapter 2: Auction
One week later
Raven rolled onto her side, grimacing as she heard new screams sounding a few rooms down from her own. She closed her eyes, thinking of how the last week had been for her. She wasn't sure exactly how many times she'd been smacked or hit in some form of punishment but it'd been plenty enough for her to grow tired of it. Today though was to be her last day in that hell hole. Later that night was Slade's auction and she was one of the prized pieces from what she heard.
Slade's prized pieces included; herself, Karen, a girl with unnaturally pink hair named Janette(who went by Jinx) and another girl, who was as some might describe as an other worldly beauty, from some island that Raven had never heard of before named Kori Anders. As Slade's men had been explaining to a few new recruits, the 'prized' pieces were all the untouched(other wise known as virgins in every sense of the word; kissing included). What bothered Raven was the only people who knew that about her were her parents and of course her doctors. So either her doctors were involved or her father told when he'd sold her to them.
Just as the Violette was falling asleep, she heard footsteps storming down the hallway. She kept her eyes closed tightly before the steps sounded in her room and she was yanked off the floor. Her eyes shot open as she struggled to free herself from the man's grip. He grunted as he dragged her from the mattress.
"Quit your fighting." He huffed. "You need to be cleaned up for the auction. It's starting earlier than planned."
Raven continued to fight back, even as the man flung her over his shoulder and carried her to a large bathroom like space. She let out a yelp as he unceremoniously dropped her into a large tub of luke warm water. The girl resurfaced and gasped, coughing as she wiped her face. She looked around and spotted Karen, Jinx and Kori in tubs of their own being scrubbed down by a few older women.
Kori was the first to spot Raven just as one of the women cleaning them poured ice cold water over the Violette's head. The 17 year old gasped at the coldness and shivered. At her gasp, the other girls whom she had made allies with looked over to her. Karen gave her a small smile as Jinx flicked her wrist in a tiny wave. Raven growled slightly as she felt her head get jerked back.
"Do you mind?" She demanded, turning her eyes to look at the older woman. "That hurts!" She hissed, flinching as her hair was tugged and pulled, trying to get matted blood and dirt out of it.
"Sorry, darling." The woman said, shrugging. "It's so matted from all the muck and blood and not getting cleaned that's making it so hard to do this gently."
Raven scowled, arms crossing over her chest. After about 20 minutes of the harsh cleaning, she was finally able to stand up and get out of the tub. The woman wrapped a towel around her and walked her over to where a couple other women more her age were waiting. A dark skinned female yanked the towel off of Raven, causing the Violette to stumble. "Hey!" She snapped. "Could you be a little rougher?" She demanded irritably. The other girl beside her smiled faintly. "Jo, be careful."
The dark skinned woman rolled her eyes. "Be glad you get to get out of her, girl." She stated simply. "Some of us are stuck here being the bitches of Slade's men." She replied. Raven frowned, her eyes narrowing.
"You guys are stuck here? How long have you been here..?" She asked quietly. The two looked at her. The blonde bit her lip, before replying. "I was 14 when I was grabbed off the streets and thrown in here."
The dark haired girl frowned and paused dressing Raven. "My dad was one of Slade's men.. When Slade seen me and demanded my father give me over to him, my father said no and tried to take me and leave. Slade killed him and took me anyway. I was 12."
Raven's eyes went wide. "I'm so sorry!" She whispered softly. Her eyebrows furrowed in thought. "I don't know where I'll be going but I'll do my best to find you and get you guys out of here." She said softly. Both of the women looked at her with soft smiles.
"If you can set us free, we'd be eternally grateful to you." The darker girl said softly. The blonde nodded and stepped back. She sighed. "It's time for you to go.. I hope we'll see you again."
"What are your names?" Raven asked suddenly as two men walked from across the room. The blonde looked at her with a smile. "I'm Tara Markov."
"Monica Douglus" The dark beauty answered. Raven nodded as her arm was grabbed. "Bye.." She stated simply, not wanting the men to hear anything else she had to say.
Both girls waved as one of the men placed a blindfold over her dark purple eyes. Raven frowned as she felt herself be pulled along. She wasn't sure just how long it took to get her wherever she was going but it felt like ages and by the time she finally stopped, she felt the heat of spot lights beating down on her.
On both sides of her, she heard noises from who she was presuming to be other girls. She frowned but made no noises. It was about 5 minutes later that a booming voice came from two large speakers from above and around the girls.
"Welcome, ladies (ladies?) and gentlemen." The voice greeted. It didn't take long for her to realize that it was Slade who spoke. "For those of you who do not know me, my name is Slade Wilson. This is my auction. Everything here has a price! The girls you see here tonight, are yours to do whatsoever you please to do with them. For house servants or whatever your hearts desire…"
Raven stood, droning out his voice as she prayed that whoever got her wouldn't treat her the way she'd be dealing with the last week or so. She hoped they'd at least give her a chance to see her mother. Even if it was only one last time. As Slade's speech ended, she felt herself be tugged off the stage and into a extremely cold room to wait until the bidding for the girls to begin.
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Sorry if the chapter seemed short. I will try to make it up to you. I have the next chapter somewhat laid out so I know a little bit of what my plans for the story is. I also have my newest story that I will be working on as well titled "A Thousand Years." If you haven't checked it out just yet, you should! It seems to have bit a pretty decent hit so far. Anyway, for those who've been waiting a lifetime for this chapter, I'm so sorry! My net was out for a week and I lost my flash drive for a few days. But I'm back now! And I will do my best to update!
Anyway, bye guys! I love you all tons!
RavenInTheDark