thx jazzie-kun 4 th good review! and stop flmaing the stroy!1 i bet u cant right such a good story!1!1 No offence, but I think I could, i'm not good, but at least I know how to spell.
StarPaw walkd over too the appentice's den. Insid she saw her sister's FlamePaw and lakePaw and hr frend JazzPaw (a.n: jazzie-kin ur my bff!) waz slepping on the mos. Fun fact, I looked up slepping, it's actually a word, it means to drag, so they were dragging on the moss? Also, Jazzpaw is a messed up name, just pointing it out now
"JazzPaw get up." She cried. Who made you the boss? Let her sleep! JazzPaw opend her brlliaint blu eyes and looked at hr.
"Do yo want 2 go on pattrol wit me?" she asked. Again, only the deputy/leader chooses the patrols, you're not the boss!
"Sure!" Said JazzPaw getten up from the moss. They leavt and went two the entrnse too camp.
But then, a cat came in thru the entrnce! It was BlackStar!1!11 So?
"Shadowclan are attaking!" But only Blackstar appeared She yelled. All the cats came out from there dens. She jumped on a cat and clawd him and he ran of. WOAH WOAH WOAH! A FUCKING APPRENTICE WHO'S BEEN A FUCKING APPRENTICE FOR ONE FUCKING DAY BEAT A FUCKING LEADER? Wow, how many times did I swear? Sorry, acted out of character there.
"Good job StarPaw!" FireStar called, "The last cat i new that culd fiht lik that was SandStrom. Your a good fihter!" No, Sandstorm was a good HUNTER!
StarPaw was happy. She wus a good fihgter! Maybey this was wat the prophcy meant. Did the prophecy say you were a good fighter?
thnkx and ples no more flams Yea, you kind of made me swear so...