OK, so i was looking over this story the other day, and i have to say... i am absolutely appalled. Besides the fact that there's barely any plot, numerous character inconsistencies, and a complete disregard of any logical thinking and-or planning on my part, i just don't really like how its turning out. So, while this version of the story will be discontinued, i may rewrite it when i get the time. ( hopefully i can make a storyboard and stick to it!) I think i'll leave this story up, for later comparison.
thanks for the support,
TheAttentionJustEncouragesHer.