COMMENT! : What do you think is happening? :D
SAKURA
I felt like I was falling away… Falling fast, too fast, so fast…
I could hear someone calling me, but they were so far away… too far away, so far away…
"Mum!"
"Mum!"
"MUMMY!"
I don't know if I'm even breathing anymore. I'm not even sure if any of this is real. I feel as light as a feather but at the exact same time I feel as heavy as a bolder. I can hardly feel anything, except warmth… The kind of warm you can only feel when some hugs you or holds your hand.
"Daddy, why won't she wake?"
"Shhh… Shh, she going to be fine…"
Who's talking? I know those voices but I can't recognise them. My brain can't register them… They sound so echoed, so unclear… too far away, so far away…
I can hear something beeping, then a rumbling sound, like wheels rolling on the floor on louder and echoed. I hear voices but I don't recognise these at all and they're so unclear…
The beepings loud how, and I can feel little bits of warm as something- no more than one- some things are stroking my stomach or something. Now its cold and wet but heavy feeling. Its moving, covering my stomach and beginning to make it tingle. Is it numb?
I can hear my own breathing now, slow and heavy with boring rhythm. Even so, my throat still feels tight, very tight.
I feel numb almost everywhere for a while. All I can here is there bands and those echoed voices… It's all hurting my head so much… All I can see is black. Black black black. Like a black duvet across my eyes. But there is no stars. I wish there were stars. I wish wish WISH there was stars in that black duvet sky… Just something to tell me I'm alive.
Now I can feel something. And it hurts. Its it my stomach, and its gliding down it. I can feel my insides. Something is touching them, fondling them… ripping them.
I can feel liquid, a lot of liquid. My inside feels like a pool.
In have me I can only feel a buzz, but underneath I can feel pain and there's a lot of it.
It's stopped. My insides aren't being fondled, but the pain is very much still there.
Pins and needs is now threading it's self through my body. I can hear the beeping sound getting faster and faster and faster and faster…
It stops. The pain stops too. The buzzing stops.
I can see stars in the black duvet now…
I know this chapter was short, but I felt it would just be ruined if I wrote anymore. Not to worry. The next chapter will be AT LEAST 2000 words :) I wanna do 3000 but that might pushing it for me, but I'll try.
I hope this chapter will give you readers the effect I hope for.