First kyou kara maou fanfic! Please review it and please help me improve my fanfic!

Well majority in my fanfic are POV's so please bear with it since I still haven't mastered the normal POV.

Yuuri's POV

ON EARTH;

"yuuri! Oii yuuri" shouts a familiar voice. I looked at the direction of the voice.

Oh it was murata….. wearing his school uniform..

Today is a normal day as usual. Clear blue skies, perfect time to hang out or play baseball, children playing and laughing, people walking, couples having dates, and a lot more.

Ah what a normal day it was..

Though unlike them were not here to hang out nor are we normal…..

If Getting sucked into another world and being the maou of a place full of bishoujo's and bishounen claiming that there mazokus, accidentally proposing to a GUY you just met,not to mention discovering that that guy is 84 years old, meeting the man who named you , a guy that looks scary but like cute stuff, having a daughter in your young age, in your 16 years of life and being involved in life threatening situations and discovering your best friend is the reincarnation of a 4000 year old sage means being normal!

But its not so bad…. Since I got used to it.

We were here in the train station waiting for someone. I was currently looking at the wall next to me thinking nothing.

"oi, Shibuya what are you looking at?"

Oh yeah I was waiting for HER with Murata.

"nothing much just thinking about stuff"

"oh…. Hehehe…. I see" he's smirking and laughing in a weird way…. I wonder what he's doing.

"what do you mean "I see" hm?" I asked as I stood up in the park bench and stretched my arms.

"shibuya aren't you going to meet with your long lost HOT childhood friend? That's a GIRL" he smirked.

I blushed at the HOT and GIRL parts.

"aren't you exaggerating Murata? We're not long lost. We just haven't seen each other in a long time."

"yeah says the guy that couldn't stop talking about Shouko this and that" he replied with a big grin.

My blush became worse as i felt my face becoming redder by the minute.

Shouko Yuri Wincott. My childhood best friend AND my first love. We haven't seen each other for a long time since she had to go to America due to family reasons. And the bad part is my parents doesn't want us to know the 'reasons' behind this. But I had to let it go eventually. What matters is the now!

"are you still thinking about her?" he asked happily.

"s-stop that murata!Anyway why do you want to meet with her as well ?" I scowled at him.

"well this kind of opportunity only comes in rarely. When you get to meet a hot girl and all"

I sighed " I can't believe I'm actually OKAY with this. Just don't try to creep her out okay?"

He mumbled some thing then nodded.

.

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… and an awkward silence suddenly overwhelmed. I looked at murata, and it wasn't a very nice sight. He was practicing his so called "charming smile" and some dialogues like "hello lady is it hot in here or is it just you?". Creepy. Anyway I wonder how everyone in shin makoku are doing.

I wonder if Conrad,Wolfram,Gwendel ,Greta and the others are fine. What's happening in shin makoku? I wonder…..

"oi shibuya, about wolfram…."

Murata suddenly asks that question. What about wolfram?

"hm? What about wolfram?"

" you and he are engaged ya know? how will you explain this to wolfram about shouko? Wont he think that you're cheating on him?"

"hm…. Guess your right.. I wonder"

Hm….. I wonder what I should tell him about her…

"ne ,yuuri can you tell me more about shouko?"he asks, I can hear both boredom and interest in his voice

"hm… she's 15 but advance and really talented." I said calmly

"What' she good at?"he asks with curiosity

"at singing, at dancing, at sports, at arts mainly martial arts but she's also a real great painter and making fanfics"

"fanfics? What kind"

"It would be best if you ask her instead" I shrugged. Just thinking about her fanfics gives me the creeps…. I mean seriously BOYXBOY fanfics?

And again awkward silence…

"ne, Shibuya, care to explain why her name is shouko yuri if her last name is Wincott? Is she half Japanese or something?" now his voice is full of boredom.

Wincott….. reminds me of Julia….

"well she's full Japanese. She's adopted" I said in a sad way.

"adopted?" murata glanced at me with full curiosity.

"her parents were killed when she was 6 by a murder in her house. Her family was very close to the Wincott family so they adopted her, or so I heard….." I answered with a weak voice. Just thinking about her past saddens me. The only thing I can do for her is to sympathize her.

"oh…." He said in a really low tone.

"but the interesting part is before she was adopted in the wealthy family of the Wincotts, her family were exorcists, and she mastered being an exorcist at the age of 4!" I said with excitement! Really when she told me this she was really happy and it was interesting that she knows a lot about demons!

"oh I see… by the way does she have a boyfriend?"

"hm…. None she's been single for a long time" I answer. When I looked at him he was smiling in a very disturbing way. His eyes were shimmering as though he won the jackpot.

"Yuuri !" I hear a girl shouting my name.

I look at the direction and saw Shouko, wearing a plain brown scarf around her neck, 3 layered hair(use your imagination). first layer was her bangs (strait bangs use your imagination)second was a thin layer of slashed hair reaching her chest, and the third was straight brown hair reaching her waist, a yellow short sleeved shirt with a hoodie and a black skirt, black leggings and her black boots almost reaching her knee and a small heel . she was also wearing a brown travelling backpack a big one might I add , Her blue eyes were shimmering like the sun. her clothes were really cute on her. Then I turned at Murata.

When Murata saw her, he whistled as though he saw his girlfriend.

"Shouko, yo! long time no see" I said to her with a normal smile. Murata was eyeing her with affection.

"Yuuri! I missed you back in America! How've you been?" She smiled at me while catching her breath. Then she looked at Murata.

"ah Yuuri who's he? A friend of yours?" when Murata heard her he immediately blushed and smiled.

"Ah, I'm Murata ken nice to meet you, I'll hang out with you guys for today and onwards is that okay?" he answered rather calmly I never expected that

"ah, its okay mura-mura! Hehehe, you look red are you having a seizure?" wait "mura-mura"? they only met a now and she made him a nickname?

She placed her hand on Murata's forehead, and he immediately blushed. This scene is kinda funny.

"guess not. Anyway mura-mura you should rest"

"no no I'm fine! "

Hehehe he's flustering. She suddenly looked at me with disbelief, as though she was thinking that he was my…

"ne, homo-kun, you jealous?" she was mocking me.

And I wasn't happy. Urgh, again with the homo nickname! Do I really look gay? Well, I have a male fiancé, BUT THAT DOSENT COUNT SHE DOSENT EVEN KNOW WOLFRAM! And Murata is laughing out loud behind her. Haha yourself mura-mura….

"no and I'm not a homo!"

"fine bi"

"bi?"

"bi as in bisexual!"

"fair enough…" well, its okay I guess, I mean it does mean liking both girls and…. Guys so it dosent matter as long as its not gay, homo or retard…..

"anyway since its late can you guys escort me for a while? I have to unpack my stuff in the place where I'm gonna stay in! and I have to practice my fencing moves " she told us as though she was in a hurry.

"you do fencing? Wow that's great!" exclaimed Murata happily.

"yeah sure its okay were is it anyway?" I answered normally.

"in your house" she said calmly. Wait a minute, ,MY HOUSE?

"what why in my house! I don't remember any STUFF in my HOUSE!" this is insane!

" well, my dad just phoned you guys last week and judging by now my stuff is now in your house." She said calmly, CALMLY!

"urgh fine! Lets just go home kay…." I sigh in dismay.

"yes! " they both shouted in joy.

"oh yeah bi-san I'm going to expect a nice bath okay?"

"fine….."

They are so the perfect couple. They should be together. But I kinda treat her as my little sister, so I kinda don't approve. I mean she's to pretty for him! And her brother is gonna kill me if he finds out I haven't been taking care of her sister and getting her a boyfriend! Just thinking about it makes me tremble in fear. Just like when Wolfram gets jealous for no reason. Wolfram, I miss him so much.

Wait, why am I thinking about him!

I felt like my body temperature increased dramatically.

Wolfram….

WOLFRAM'S POV

BACK IN SHIN MAKOKU

Training my troops as usual…..

Man I'm tired…. I wonder how's yuuri…..

That wimp…. I wonder what's he doing there on earth….

Its been weeks since I last saw him… maybe he's studying that thing they called algebra? Really…

Or maybe he's cheating on me! That wimp! I will interrogate him when he comes back! I am his fiancé! He's mine and only mine!

I dismissed them and went back to our bedroom and I saw Greta near the window.

I went closer to her and embraced her. I can tell that she was surprised to see me hugging but she smiled tenderly yet sadly.

"ne, Wolfram, when's Yuuri gonna come back?" she asked me sadly.

"I'm soon he'll be back here soon." In answered her sadly as well. she nodded sadly and continued staring at the window. I sighed sadly and looked the greta.

Yuuri….. please hurry back… I miss you….. WE miss you

YUURI'S POV

Back to earth

Well we've arrived at my house. Mom greeted us as usual in her happy tone smiling but when she saw Shouko she squealed like a crazy fan girl seeing her idol. Mom nearly dragged Shouko inside our house (she even forgot to take of her shoes) and talked to Shouko happily. Well mom was certainly happy to see Shouko again after all these years. I can see that in her smile. Mom gave her a thing wrapped around in cloth. I think its her sword, I'm not sure though since I wasn't listening anyway.

I was supposed to prepare the tub for her a nice warm bath. I headed up to the bathroom with Murata (I practically dragged him since he would just ruin their moment) and tried to prevent him from fainting when I said I was gonna prepare Shouko's bath. When she says bath she means with the aroma candles and a really REALLY sparkly tub. And our tub wasn't sparkly.

Anyway I put on some water to check if we still had warm water. I sighed and was ready to head out of the bathroom until…..

"YUURI! ARE THE CANDLES READY?' she accidentally bumped into us which made up a black hole in the tub which made a time paradox that made a hole on the tub…..

In smaller words we were transported to shin makoku.

In shin makoku

We arrived in shin makoku at last. We're soaking wet and trying to catch our breath. I thought that she jumping with us was a dream but when I turned back I saw her unconscious, soaking wet. Man this is going to be hard…