Addressing Issues:
Hello readers! I received this anonymous review last night on my latest chapter and I feel that I should address this reader's concerns. I am not taking this as a flame, just a merely honest opinion and I would like to explain my own reasoning for having the plot line take its current course of action.
Please note that I do try to make my stories as original and realistic as possible, but I am a 21 college student, I have never fostered a child, bought a house or been imprinted on by Paul himself. So I don't know everything there is to know about such things and I don't claim to. So without further delay I shall address the concerns.
This is the review:
I'm sorry but what the hell. Why would you take this amazing plot line and turn it into this crap. These last two chapters sucked, like come on. You can't just go up to someone and be like I want to foster you. I know you made the character seem like she deserved being adopted but how can she afford it? and how can she just move in with Paul and their not really even together. Its just stupid she can't just up and move her life and move to la push like that, its just unrealistic and dumb. I'm sorry I don't want to be spiteful or mean but I really liked this story until you changed it in this direction. It just didn't make sense to me. Maybe if you revised it and changed it to make it more believable then maybe I would like it but I am really disapointed in these 2 chapters.
And how can she be so casual about the 'guy' who is stocking her. And this 'guy' is so obviously a leech. NO ONE is that chill about something that creepy. Because in real life that's serious and not to be taken lightly.
-I'm disappointed!
You can't just go up to someone and be like I want to foster you. I know you made the character seem like she deserved being adopted but how can she afford it?
As I said before I don't know how the foster system works. With that said my logic is that Meg is able to Foster Tommy because she became a 'registered' foster parent which means that she can foster more than one child. I know that when you foster a child that the state sends you a certain amount of money per child, I tried to research it and find out how much but I didn't find anything consistent. Plus, I did mention this in the plot line in the first chapter that the nearest foster parent is in Seattle, so Carry would have gone to Meg anyway. Meg is also in her mid-twenties with a career, so she is making decent money.
Also, I just introduced Carry, I have yet to give her background, but I have always known that she would be fostered by Meg. Please be patient her story will be told soon.
2.and how can she just move in with Paul and their not really even together. Its just stupid she can't just up and move her life and move to la push like that, its just unrealistic and dumb.
No, Paul and Meg are not romantically involved yet in my story but they are also not moving in together under the pretense that they are. They are going to be roommates for financial reasons. I have also intended for this to happen since the beginning, Meg stated in one chapter that she didn't intend to stay in that apartment for long, also just a few chapters ago she stated that the apartment appears to be getting smaller and smaller. I don't see this as 'uprooting her life' she isn't moving that far away about 30 – 45 minutes? I see this as accommodating her new life and making the correct decisions in the best interest for the children that are now under her care. She isn't changing jobs or anything of the sort she is just moving houses.
3. And how can she be so casual about the 'guy' who is stocking her. And this 'guy' is so obviously a leech. NO ONE is that chill about something that creepy. Because in real life that's serious and not to be taken lightly.
I will say that I'm not one hundred percent sure how to write her being stalked, I'm not trying to brush if off, but I feel that when such things happen people are often in denial that they are being stalked and they try to downplay it. This will be expanded upon further in the story as it escalates. Also, No Calvin is not a Vampire, but he isn't Human either.
NotHappy, I'm sorry that you are disappointed with the twist that my story has taken, but I do have reasons for what I do I just don't always make them known. I hope that I've made you feel better about the story, I'm not trying to attack you but I felt this needed to be addressed.
I would also like to say that if anyone else feels the same way let me know. I don't mind addressing concerns, but please realize guys, this is a story for fun. Honestly, it's my stress reliever and it just makes me feel good to write. I don't believe that I will be writing for a living, I would like to, but I don't believe that I'm good enough, so don't expect author level stuff here.
Thank you for reading
~Chaos