So cut the slack and stuff, all I need to say is that I can't write some scenes specifically well. Anyways, here's the second chapter.
Disclamer: Maplestory is not owned by me and vice versa
It was late-afternoon now, the slightly diminishing sun streamed down my bare shoulders. Sweat literally poured from the tip of my head into the mess of the ground below. Yet, despite my labour, my attempt to find my sister was less than spectacular as I had already scratched myself numerous times from walking through thorny plants and falling down. It was going to be night soon, and if I couldn't return back home before sunset then my mother would probably bust her old heart with anxiety. I continued to search for a half hour or so before I preceded to call for her name. "Reve!" No answer.
I stopped for a while before shouting again albeit in a different way. "I give up!" I cried, "Now just get out of whatever, hole you're in and get back home." I waited for her response. It was strange, usually when I admitted defeat, she would spring out from behind me and torture me with her feministic abilities before mocking at my failure jokingly. Now despite the fact that she was an arrogant nag and other stuff, she was my *twin sister and she was my only companion. Throughout life, she was always there to comfort me whenever Mama was too busy and we shared a direct sense of kinship with each other. Therefore, when she hadn't appeared, great anxiety fell upon my heart, I was also too afraid to ask the townspeople to start a search leaving me to stand there in one place. A few minutes ticked by until I finally heard the sound. Moments ago, I was literally to occupied within my mind to listen toward the commotion, however, once payed close enough attention I figured that the sound originated very close toward my proximity. I eagerly dashed off toward the sound ignoring any damage received toward my bodily form earlier. When I arrived at the originated path of the noise, I mentally gasped. There crouched low on the ground was an enormous behemoth of a creature. Its white fur was thick and matted and masses of scars showed all over the body which pertained to injury from previous fights. The massive creature then sensed my presence, it turned around with it's bloodshot eyes erect and stared right through my soul. I trembled with fear as it began to make predatory advancements toward my upright body, in which with each stride it took I displayed it's enormous muscled body which towered over mine. I also noticed that its claws were fresh with blood and that it was incredibly hungry which screwed me over for it meant a very quick and painful death. Fortunately, as I was locked in my upright stance, the beast stopped in the middle of its path and stopped. This action puzzled me, however, I made the fatal mistake of walking away. As quick as I could blink, the behemoth charged at me baring it's steel fangs which glinted gold. Some vital instinct kicked in forcing me to "attempt" in dodging the blow. It was no use, the great beast didn't lose his footing, instead it twirled around snarling and aimed again. Now, during by moment of panic, I hadn't noticed the image of one emerging from the bottom of some old cart until I heard a noise of shuffling and struggle. While I had deliberately shielded myself from the fangs of the beast, Reve had grabbed a knife ( She always possessed things that the adults used) and attempted to subdue the monster in a way I hadn't known. Despite her attempts, the wolf managed to shake her off and now it was even more alert than before. Now, wolves have one fatal weakness. They are bound to work together as a group to take down the larger target. However, when a lone wolf is around, it is highly susceptible to defeat as it depends on the coordination of the pack. This happened to be our advantage. When the wolf darted toward Reve, I charged toward it with a stick a dealt lashing toward its hide. Once the wolf turned angrily to face me Reve would either charge in or through a stone at the wolf to divert its attention. Using its species own tactics, Reve and I did manage to get some good hits on that best, however, since we were only four we had almost no strength and our blows were only mere hinderances to the great beast's pride. The battle continued on...
I can't remember what happened next, as all I know is that the villagers found me and carried me and my sister back to my mother alive. Also, the wolf was apparently dead by the time they found me so yeah...
CONTINUED...
Also, another story. In the village there were a bunch of sociopathic adolescent children which would steal household items from their parents and use them to torture stray animals and orphans. Reve often snuck into their stash and collected few trinkets for example, a knife. ( Her mother never knew)
So that's it. PLZ review! I need to know what I can be doing better!