OK, first off, I don't need you to be telling me my story sucks. I send so much time on this, I let my grades fail. I appreciate constructive criticism like this: I really like your story but I've found a few things you could improve. And then you fill in the blank. I do not appreciate flames, so I overlook them.
Now to respond to a few reviews:
I wrote the characters how I see them. And I will keep doing that.
Thalia pinned Zeus because he was really weak from using that much of his energy to hurt Athena and Annabeth. Also, I wanted to give Thalia a moment to shine.
It WAS necessary for Percy to break Annabeth's ankle, because you can't set a half- broken one. I know because I have been really, really close to a broken ankle before, and the doctor had to break it completely break it in order to get me in a cast.
I don't think my story is unrealistic. At all.
You have to read all the chapters to understand the title. Also, it will make more sense later one. And fanfiction screwed up my chapters because of my A/N's, so that was chapter 13.
Got it all? Sorry about the long A/N