"You know what bothers me about this story? The illogical character actions. I mean, if somebody came to my house with a knife sticking out of their chest I would call 911 and not sit there and do nothing. Please rewrite this so that Tsubaki does call 911 but Maka dies anyway."
laptop's screen is broken down the middle so i'm sorry for mistakes.
2.I got a piercing,and it is sore,so I haven't been updating.
3. I want to adress this review on my story I will alway's love you.
I decided to do a 'update'about this because I wanted to also explain this to anyone who thought the same. Imagine yourself in Tsubaki's situation. The love of your life,and your everything(cheesy huh?) was dying. At first it was shock that kept Tsubaki from doing anything. I don't know about you guys but I would be quite shocked as well. Then it was how obviously Maka was going to die. A knife is someone's chest,and bleeding that much it was insane that Maka make it to Tsubaki's. Tsubaki knew that with Maka loosing as much blood as she did there was noway she could live. So Tsubaki decided to stay by her side. Wouldn'y you much rather spend ypur lover's last time on earth together,then the ambulence taking them away? You can agree or disagree on my story as much as you want. And I am in no way trying to put down the writer of this comment. I put much time into writting chapter one,and as i promised I am going to write more to this story,as I have already thougt up a plot. Thanks for everything everyone who has supported me throughout this,and will countinue to do so. Thank you,and I hope this cleared somethings up. The second chapter will be up soon.
-Yumi