Hello peoples, what's rockin? … uhhh… that was a bad intro…
So I decided to look at my reviews again todeh and I received something… interesting.
So here they are!
LD-1449 says,
Ok piece of advice:
Bashing sucks.
Especially when done sloppily which is what's happening here with the Uchiha. When an author has to needlessly *fabricate* a villain, just for the sake of making a mountain out of a mole hillfor "dramatic effect" that doesn't speak very highly of hisor her skills.
There is little basis to make Fugaku a villain. To put him as the ultimate douchebag while pretending the Hyuuga would have no political angle of their own to work towards is simply unrealistic and cringeworthy.
The dialogue as it was in the first chapter is still very unnatural and stiff. I don't feel like they're having a conversation but rather that they're reading off an overdramatic soap box.
I have a lot to say against that, but thank you for your input, I appreciate it.
I didn't "needlessly *fabricate*" a villain in Fugaku. What I did to him in that chapter is specifically to make an enemy out of the Uchiha in general (besides Itachi, since his motives are very clear in the manga). This makes it so much easier to make Sasuke an enemy of Naruto in the future, which is what Sasuke really does become. I'm trying to keep the story as canon as possible while moving on with this plotline.
I think my previous explanation shows the basis in making Fugaku EEEEVIIIIIL.
I never pretended that the Hyuuga have no political angle. It is common SENSE that the Hyuuga have much power in politics, since they're one of the great clans in Konohagakure.
Again, thanks for your input. I needed that.
A guest asked:
"Just how much of Kuruma's chakra can Naruto channel at this point? Can he only channel an initial(no-tails) form but make it full of "purified" yellow chakra or can he go above into version 1 states?"
At that one point where he became angry, Naruto was in his initial form, as you put it. However, once Hiashi awakened him from his anger, he had a moment where the chakra was under his control, as "purified", as you called it. Over the time between last chapter and this chapter he will learn how to control it to the best of his abilities, just like how he did in the manga!
Here's the next chapter for you all! ^_^
Disclaimer: If I owned Naruto, I would make Sasuke wear black lipstick, 'cause he be emo, yo!
Chapter 5: Graduation
*Naruto's age, 13. Hinata's age, 13* (A.N: From now on, the storyline will continue as normal in canon timeline.)
"Rise and shine, Naruto-nii! It's exam day~~~" Hinata sang joyfully, barging into Naruto's room. Like every other morning, he pulled the blankets toward himself, and moaned, "Hime, just give me five more minutes! The academy senseis probably won't give a crap if I passed; hell they'll probably try to stop me…" 'Except Iruka-sensei…'
"Naruto-nii, get that attitude out of your brain and get your ass up… if you don't pass with me today I'm going to wait until you're hungry, shut off your tenketsu and slam you in front of Ichiraku..." Hinata threatened.
She felt a whoosh of wind go past her, and Naruto was quickly at the door, fully dressed and ready to go.
'Works every time…'
As Naruto and Hinata both walked down the stairs to the main room where Hiashi was waiting, they quickly checked each other's gear. When they were both certain that they had what they needed for the day, Naruto sealed their equipment into special seals on their arms which only activate on the user's whim. These were suggested by Kurama, who insisted that "shinobis should never be un-armed".
Once they reached the main room, Hiashi looked the two children over, and nodded. "Naruto, Hinata. I fully expect you both to pass today; Naruto, don't do anything rash to make yourself fail. Hinata, do your best. It is only a genin test, so you should be able to pass it."
A resounding cry of "Hai, Tou-sama!" echoed through the hallways of the Hyuuga compound. When both genin-to-be left the home, Hiashi prayed to whatever higher power there was that both would pass without problems. The Hyuuga had a reputation to keep, after all.
*In the Konoha streets*
Naruto could feel eyes making holes on the back of his head as he walked past crowds of people. Of course, Naruto and Hinata both knew the reasons for it, and they didn't give a damn. Today was the day that Naruto and Hinata could unleash their hidden potentials.
A block before the academy, Naruto let Hinata down from his back. "Hime, you've gotta go without me first. It'll cause a lot of tension between the students if they find out we're this… familiar. They'll start hating you too." Naruto was worried that Hinata's reputation in the academy would drop further than it already was. He didn't want her to be hated. He would shoulder all the hate and pain for her.
"Naruto-nii, shaddap. Stop worrying about me; I can take car e of myself, you know…" Hinata held her nose up high in a mocking gesture, and walked a little bit faster than normal to the academy. Once Naruto saw her open and close the doors to the building, he went into one of the alleys near the academy. He quickly formed some hand seals and bit his thumb, drawing blood. When he touched his thumb to the concrete, red chakra flowed out of his body, but not enough to alert any of the ANBU patrol near him. The chakra took the form of a small fox, who then stretched and scratched its ear with its hind leg.
"Yo, Kura-chan, I'm bring you with me today." Naruto picked up the small fox and placed it on his head. The fox quickly nestled itself in his hair.
"It's been a year since you let me out, you know. I was beginning to worry that you forgot about me." She huffed and pulled a pawful of hair on his head, and snickered at the cry of pain that yelped from the jinchuriki.
"It's easy to forget you when you stop talking to me for that entire year, you know! I just need you here now since I get to show my true colors today," he retorted. Inside, however, he was giddy at the thought of showing the world his strength.
"Kit, you have to hold back a little though. I'd gauge your strength on par with the old man at his prime, assuming you go full chakra mode on your enemies. If you don't, you're easily ANBU level." Kurama then closed her eyes on his head and took a nap.
A minute later, Naruto entered the academy, and found Iruka's room for the day. When he walked in, his sixth sense alerted him to look to the far-right of the room, where duck-ass-err, Sasuke- was sitting. As usual, he was brooding and looking out the window. Hinata sat in the far-left, and Naruto exchanged looks with her and smiled.
Naruto walked up the stairs in the middle and took a seat next to Sasuke, who couldn't care less. Naruto then took Kurama off of his head, and placed her on his desk. Right afterward, Naruto mimicked Kurama's gesture and lowered his head onto the desk. Two minutes later, he was asleep.
As expected, when Sakura got to the academy and found Sasuke, she was enraged to see Naruto next to him. She also saw the fox, however, and got an idea.
Naruto stirred from his sleep, and heard voices. He strained his ears to hear some girl speak, and he wasn't very happy when he did.
"I think this fox's fur would go very well as a scarf for me! I have to impress Sasuke-kun after all." the pink banshee chortled. She took out a kunai that her parents had bought her, and attempted to slam it onto the fox on the desk. Key word, attempted.
The fox had disappeared from the desk. Sakura was shocked. She didn't stab the fox; she stabbed a hand. The hand happened to be Naruto's hand, and he pretended to wake up, stretching . Sakura had let go of the kunai much earlier. This isn't what she had in mind.
"Good morning, Sakura. Did you have something to say to me today?" Naruto gave her a beaming smile, as if nothing was wrong. Sakura's eyes were transfixed on his hand, kunai still dangling from it. He caught her stare and looked at his hand, bloody and all.
"What, you're worried about this or something? This is just a love tap, assuming you have any love for somebody else instead of your precious "Sasuke-kun", anyway." With this, he pulled the kunai out of his hand. By now, the desk was covered in his blood, and Sakura was terrified, somewhat.
"Naruto-baka, what the hell! I just stabbed your hand, why are you so damn nonchalant?!" she snapped. Sakura had expected Naruto to be screaming in pain, like he usually did when she would clobber him over the head. Oh, if only she knew.
"Like I said earlier, this is just a love tap. Look, it's already healing." Everyone around them, including the duck-ass, looked at his hand, which he held up. Everybody's eyes went wide when his hand stitched itself together, leaving no scar.
"Thank you for waking me up, though. It seems the exams are starting soon." He shook her hand with the hand that she had just stabbed. She looked at him, and back at her hand, then back at his hand, then at the fox that seemed to materialize out of thin air onto his head. Wordlessly, she sat down next to him. It was the closest he could get to her "Sasuke-kun" anyway.
Iruka entered the room, and looked at the back. He saw the blood on the desk and the discarded bloody kunai. He was about to comment when Naruto sent him a look. "Don't do anything about it, I'm fine, just do what you came to do."
The chuunin shook his head, but took out his papers and plans for the day. He cleared his throat, shuffled through papers, and selected one. Unfortunately for him, the class was bustling with gossip over Naruto's new ability (according to them, it was nothing new for Naruto). The only people that seemed to be silent were the blonde boy himself, Hinata, Sasuke and Shikamaru.
Iruka drew in a deep breath, and exhaled. "Class, settle down…"
Of course, with that tone of voice, only those in the front got the message.
"Guys, be quiet!"
Now the middle got Iruka's message, and toned it down a bit, but those in the back were the loudest, and couldn't hear.
Iruka was about to use his "Big-Head-No-Jutsu" but Naruto raised his head first. "IF ANY OF YOU WON'T SHUT THE HELL UP AND LET ME SLEEP I'M GOING TO PERSONALLY SEND YOU IN BODY BAGS TO YOUR OWN HOMES!"
The threat was picked up easily, and those around him immediately shut up. They figured that he couldn't do it, but they just saw him shrug off a kunai stabbing, and didn't want to argue.
Iruka nodded his thanks, to which Naruto gave a "Hn." and put his head back down.
"So, class, as you all know, today is the day of your genin exams. Your results will be recorded and will be distributed tomorrow for the written exam only. The ninjutsu, shuriken and kunai tests will be graded on the spot via conditions, and you will be put in genin cells tomorrow based on your scores. In my hand is a…" Iruka droned on and on for a few minutes, and by then Shikamaru and Naruto were conked out on their desks, with the exception of Naruto drooling. The little fox on his head was no different.
Iruka passed out the exams, and when he got to Naruto, the boy reached out and took an exam without looking up and fell asleep again. Iruka blinked a little, but shrugged it off since Naruto was bound to wake up anyway. His sixth sense, however, alerted him to a presence behind him and he turned around only to see Hinata boring her eyes into Naruto's side. Her message was picked up by the small fox, who had raised her head to look around. Silently, she poked Naruto's head, and he stirred. He finally woke up, though. "Kuramaaaaaaaaa, you're going to get it when we get home after this, ya know?" Naruto 's words could not hide the threat, but Kurama was used to this already. The fox hmph'd and disappeared again, back into the seal.
The boy picked up the exam and looked at the first question. Right after he did his pencil blazed across the paper and in the span of a few seconds his test was already over and done with. It was no surprise he could since he did extensive history with Hiashi and Kurama. Sakura didn't know that, however, and was open-mouthed at the speed in which he completed his exam. She couldn't believe it, really. Naruto, the dead-last, the class dobe, the class clown, had went from an idiot to a person who stood up for himself
Naruto stood to give in the exam, just as Hinata did as well. The two exchanged looks, and smiled at each other, knowing that today would be a great day. Iruka caught this and looked at his own copy of the exam. He wasn't done yet (he took the exams along with the students) and these two children didn't even take a full minute!
Hinata took the stairs down, but Naruto didn't care for stairs anymore. He took a kunai, emblazoned with seals, and tossed it over to Iruka's desk. It went with a "ka-plunk" as it embedded itself in the hardwood. Iruka was on full alert, thinking something was there to get Naruto's attention. However, nothing was out of the ordinary, and Iruka looked up in the back. He saw the blond boy stand, and… disappear.
The teacher blinked, and looked to his right. He saw Naruto, picking up the kunai that he threw and calmly putting it back into his holster.
"N….naruto, did you just… oh my god…"
The boy knew exactly what Iruka implied, and Hinata couldn't help but giggle. She turned around, and the entire class was wide-eyed at the "dead-last", except Sasuke, who was looking out the window.
"Ne, Iruka-sensei… I'm done with my exam. Can I give it in now?"
Iruka was speechless and he stuck out his hand. Naruto took Hinata's paper and gave both exams to Iruka, who took them and put them in a drawer so he could personally grade them later. He couldn't believe what had happened today. He looked at the clock, and there was still half an hour left in the class time. Naruto and Hinata had already seated themselves.
The thirty minutes went by quickly, and Iruka clapped his hands.
"Okay… class, I'll be coming around to take your exams. Come back in four hours for your field exam."
The class left the room.
*Outside the building, in the training ground*
Everyone was discussing answers under the trees and out in the open. Naruto and Hinata didn't give a damn, obviously. They decided to get sleep under the shade of a tree. Their sleep was short-lived, however, as Sasuke went up to the two. Naruto had sensed him way beforehand and opened an eye.
"Sasuke-teme, what do you need now? What could you ever need from a dead-last like me?" Naruto remarked, knowing it would strike a nerve. As expected. Sasuke recoiled a little, but quickly gained his composure.
"Fight me dobe."
Now this, Naruto did not expect. He half-expected Sasuke to tell him off and tell him to give up. Naruto really couldn't deny a challenge; not saying that Sasuke would even BE a challenge, though.
"Sasuke-teme, I've lived in your shadow for a year or two now. It's time someone put you in your place, duck-ass," Naruto retorted. "Tell everyone to clear out; they'll all listen to the great Uchiha-sama, wouldn't they?"
The Uchiha looked calm and collected outside, but inside he was furious. Naruto was mocking the last Uchiha! Such a thing should not be allowed!
Sasuke cleared out the training ground, and Naruto stood up. Hinata took Kurama from him and watched as Naruto went up to Sasuke. She wasn't worried for her nii-san, she was more worried for Sasuke. She knew that Naruto would toy with him.
"You should be privileged to train with the last Uchiha, dobe," Sasuke sneered, "even if you will lose to me. You're nothing but a clan-less idiot who won't amount to anything in your life. You should just quit trying to become genin."
Naruto snorted. "And you're just a sad, sad emo who has no parents and whose brother left you."
The duck-ass let out a growl and pulled out a kunai. Everyone on the training grounds believed Naruto would lose in less than a minute except Kurama and Hinata, and cheered for Sasuke.
Naruto grinned. "Seven minutes; seven minutes is all I can spare to play with you." At this statement, Sasuke retorted, "I don't need seven minutes. I'll end this in two."
Sasuke charged at Naruto, who stood there, hands crossed behind his back. Once Sasuke was in his face, Naruto jumped and kicked off Sasuke's head and landed behind him. Right afterwards, he took out the same kunai emblazoned in seals and threw it in the air. He did some hand signs so quickly that Sasuke couldn't follow, and called out, "Kunai Kage Bunshin no Jutsu!"
Suddenly, the kunai split into ninety-nine copies and fell down around the battleground. Sasuke was confused, but found a way to gloat.
"Even with your one-hundred kunai you couldn't touch me. You're weak and you don't deserve that kind of power!"
Naruto sighed. Only one minute had passed and he was getting bored already. Sasuke charged him once more, but this time he threw his kunai. Naruto didn't move, though. The kunai hit his chest, right into his heart, and Naruto grimaced. Sasuke was appalled.
'Why didn't the dobe dodge? That was supposed to scare him off, not kill him!'
Everyone gaped at Naruto and his idiocy. Hinata was now frightened for her nii-san's life, but Kurama was grinning. She knew what her container was trying to do, and applauded internally at his tactic of instilling fear.
Sasuke screamed at his fellow classmate, "You idiot! Why didn't you DODGE?!"
Naruto stood, open-mouthed, but to Sasuke's amazement, he smiled widely. "Teme, you have no idea what you're trying to fight against, you know?"
Much like with Sakura, Naruto pulled out the kunai from his heart. Blood spurted out like a geyser, but Naruto stood without a care in the world. All the academy students were cringing in fear, since Naruto had just literally survived a killing blow.
The wound stitched itself together just like it did with his hand. Sasuke looked at the place where he had stabbed Naruto, disbelief evident on his face. Naruto stretched backward and forward, testing the wound to see if it would re-open. When it didn't, Naruto straightened up and beamed at Sasuke.
"It's been four minutes, Sasuke-chan."
Sasuke couldn't move. He was so in shock that he couldn't think straight at all.
"You're done, then?"
Sasuke didn't say anything.
"Alright, then. I'm done here, go have fun with your fangirls, ne?" With that, Naruto disappeared and reappeared next to Hinata and Kurama under the tree. He took Hinata's hand, and put Kurama on his head, and disappeared again.
Sasuke was seething in anger. 'How does the dobe have so much power?! He's clanless! He has no status! What the hell? I must have this power!'
*Timeskip: Exam time*
All the students were back in the academy. Iruka was there, but he was startled at what he saw. Everybody was sitting AWAY from Naruto this time. Iruka wondered what the hell had happened, but assumed that Naruto had pulled some prank again, and continued the exam. After taking role and leading the students out into the training field, he tested each student on henge, bunshin, most proficient ninjutsu and kunai/shuriken tossing.
"Sasuke, come up. It's your turn."
With a "Hn", he went up to his sensei. "Okay Sasuke, henge into a Hokage." Sasuke henged into the Sandaime.
"Henge into me."
Sasuke henged into Iruka. The chuunin was satisfied with his henging, and continued. "Okay Sasuke, use your strongest jutsu."
The last Uchiha made hand seals, and said, "Katon : Gokyakuu no Jutsu!" He breathed out a giant ball of fire into the sky, which dispelled itself upon reaching the height of the academy building. All the girls were cheering for Sasuke, especially Sakura, who was screaming her lungs out.
Iruka then set up bunshin around the field, and had them run around. "Okay Sasuke, here are five kunai and five shuriken. You are to hit each bunshin. The more you hit, the higher your score."
Sasuke proceeded to do so, but he missed one bunshin. It was more than enough to pass, however, and with his one missed question on his written exam, he was satisfied. "Beat that, dobe." Sasuke sneered again at Naruto for the second time that day, but Naruto put his hands in his pockets and whistled.
"Okay Naruto, you're the dead-last in the class so you're up last. Come up here."
Naruto disappeared and re-appeared once again up to Iruka, who almost fell down in surprise. Naruto snickered, and helped his sensei regain balance by holding him up. Iruka shook it off, and said, "Naruto, henge into a Hokage for me."
With a poof, Naruto disappeared in smoke, but when the smoke cleared, Iruka was disappointed. Naruto looked no different from when he did before.
"I'm sorry Naruto, but you've failed the ninjutsu portio-" He had a sudden revelation, and gasped. "Naruto" then grinned at Iruka, and replied, "Do you see what's just happened now, sensei?"
Iruka nodded dumbly. He had just henged into the Yondaime Hokage, and he couldn't see the difference! Something was wrong here…
Naruto un-henged, and looked at Iruka expectantly. The instructor just shook his head and told Naruto that he passed the henging portion, and told him to use his most proficient jutsu. Naruto merely grunted, and loudly proclaimed, "Guys, you might want to step away a little. This will get packed in a second."
Everyone except Sasuke backed off, who wanted to see the dobe's strength first-hand.
Naruto looked at Sasuke like he was an idiot, but Sasuke stared equally as hard right back at him. The jinchuriki sighed, but held up his hands in the tiger seal. Before Iruka could notice what he was about to do, he shouted out his favorite phrase:
"KAGE BUNSHIN NO JUTSU!"
Immediately the students looked around as hundreds of Narutos materialized around them. Some stood, the others stood on trees, hell some even stood on other clones. Iruka stood shell-shocked. That was an S-Ranked Kinjutsu and Naruto did it with no problems! Hell, he summoned over two hundred and wasn't even winded!
Naruto noticed his sensei's look, and dispelled all of his clones. When the smoke cleared, Naruto stood with five kunai and five shuriken already prepared, the kunai laced in one hand and the shuriken fingered on his other hand. Iruka was amazed, but managed to create the ten bunshin, which began jumping around at full speed. The bunshin only moved a fraction of a foot before Naruto's kunai and shuriken fizzed through them all, dispelling them as well.
Everyone stood silenced by awe, fear, and hatred; the hatred coming off of Sasuke. He was just shown up by the class dobe, the dead-last, the idiot. He didn't want to acknowledge the power that Naruto seemed to exude in waves, however deep inside he knew that it was right.
Iruka slowly nodded, his face showing obvious pride for his student. He knew that he played no part in the strength of his favorite student, but he was proud to at least have been some factor in his life. He had always looked out for Naruto, sympathizing for him when the villagers would look at him with hate.
"Congratulations Naruto. You passed with full marks on your written exam and full marks in the field exam."
The boy merely nodded his thanks and started to walk away. However, Hinata looked like she materialized out of nowhere next to him faster than you could say "Hiraishin", with Kurama nestled in her arms. Both exchanged smiles, and jumped away on the rooftops towards the compound.
Cut! That was amazing! :P
I had a lot of fun writing this chapter. It makes me positively ecstatic to know that I control Naruto's power in this story, and that I control Sasuke's power in this story. Of course, I won't deter TOO much from Sasuke's end of the plot… unless someone convinces me otherwise.
I finished this chapter kind of late, so here's another response to a reviewer.
almightyironman says:
Ummm they already know what the bijuu animals are kokuo is the five-tailed dolphin horse. And gyuki is the eight-tailed octopus-bull. (Kokuo, dolphin head on horses body)
The wiki doesn't say Kokuo is a dolphin horse. I concede that he's five-tailed, but not a dolphin horse. It's been said by Kishi-sama himself that he had AIMED for a cross between the dolphin and the horse, but that implies that it really didn't work out. I also concede that Gyuki is the octobull, and I will rectify that mistake. Thanks for telling me, though.
Here's something else; I was in the shower when I was thinking of this plot when I thought of something funny, so here's an omake!
OMAKE:
Naruto disappeared and re-appeared once again up to Iruka, who almost fell down in surprise. Naruto snickered, and helped his sensei regain balance by holding him up. Iruka shook it off, and said, "Naruto, henge into a Hokage for me."
The blonde boy shook his head and let out a big laugh. Iruka looked at him confusedly, and Naruto stopped laughing enough to explain himself to his sensei.
"You see, Iruka-sensei, I couldn't help but look over on your desk and you couldn't hide that little bit of Icha Icha Paradise that you printed on a sheet of paper…"
Iruka blushed furiously as the entire classed laughed at him. He got what he wanted though as Naruto put up a seal. He didn't expect Naruto to scream out, "HAREM NO JUTSU!"
In a flash, five blonde naked ladies smothered Iruka from every possible angle. One set of breasts fell between his face while another set of legs straddled his waist. Iruka froze and fell over, blood gushing from his nose. He wasn't unconscious yet, but was fighting a losing battle. He couldn't hold it, though, when one of the "women" whispered into his ear,
"I'm all yours, tonight, Iruka-sama~~~~"
Everybody looked away except Hinata and the guys (excluding ), who were all laughing with tears threating to roll out. Even Shikamaru had looked up from his sleep to catch what happened.
The clones un-henged and Naruto appeared, back in his normal outfit.
"So, sensei, did I pass?"
Of course, he didn't get an answer, but his nonchalant response set the already out-of-breath teens into another fit of laughter. Naruto joined them as well, roaring and heaving.
*Scene Change, Hokage's Office*
There was a knock on the door to the office, and a woman's voice spoke up. "Hokage-sama, may I come in? You have a message from the Daimyo…"
No response. When she received no reply, she became angry at the thought that either:
a) Hokage wasn't there
b) Hokage was sleeping
c) Hokage was ignoring her
Yuki slammed the doors open, but was surprised when her feet met a trickle of blood. She looked up at the Hokage only to find him unconscious, blood running out of his nose. She looked at the crystal ball that was on the table, and found Naruto doing some kind of jutsu involving many naked women.
When one of the councilmen entered the open doors, finding it unusual, he found Yuki and the Hokage both slumped over on a chair/desk, bleeding from their noses. It was no secret that both Yuki and the Hokage were closet perverts and fans of Icha Icha.
Somewhere, a white-haired man sneezed, and fell out of his tree into the hot springs of Tanzaku Gai, where he was met with the glares and killing intent of a few dozen women.
"Oh shit…"
~HDN-Lunar