Alright, we are here!

FUCK YEAAHHH!

Now, before we start, let me ask you a question; How was your Homunculus oc made? Is the oc part of Father, or was it made by a failed transmutation? Because in FMA '03 and '09 they were created. Although the '03 one doesn't make sense to me...

It made sense? Since when?!

..Always? What? Whatever, can you just explain? You just-ugh.

Whatever. In the Fma '03, a Homunculus was created when someone tried human transmutation. So, I can expect there's a fairly decent amount of them out there, and not just centered around the deadly sins. Maybe there could be some that are the opposite? I don't know... How much Homunculus there could be in this one was never specified.

Really? Hmmm, I need to watch the '03 again... Anyway, in Brotherhood, the sins were created by using Fathers emotions, and he made these emotions into different red stones and created the Homunculus. There are only 7 in total, but I suppose there could be more, but you guys have to use your imagination for a sin!

You think I'm joking?! NO IM NOT! I have seen...things. Horrible things. All for a Homunculus oc.

? Now I want to know...

Ok, look, I've seen a 'rage' oc, That is wrath, are you serious?, that had bright blue hair and red eyes. Oh, my, god. I was so scared.

Oh my god. Poor baby! *sarcastic*

Your mean... Anyway, lets continue. A Homunculus has special abilities too, as you can clearly see from the show. Now, you need to give your oc ONE power. and if you give them a second one, make sure its connected to the main power.

For example; Gluttony can eat everything and everyone. His power, 'the fake gate', aids him in eating everything in sight. I don't want to see an oc with a power to control peoples emotions and then can control shadows. Those don't mix.

Best example you got?

Yes. DEal WiTh It.

..Ok... Your scaring me a bit... Now, your oc should have the following traits; Purple eyes and an orobus tattoo somewhere on their body. The tattoo should correspond with the power too. Such as how lust has it on her... bossoms.

Boobs. Candy, its called boobs. Anywhore, when you give them these traits, you need to make sure the hair color is dark, but you may give them any outfit you may see fit. Seeing as lust had a dress, and she fights, so I guess clothing doesnt really matter? Just not anything like mini-skirts. It needs to be 18 century style. You have no idea how many oc's I've seen with revealing outfits that show off so much boobs.

Like, oh my lord, keep it in. You don't need to show your boobs. We don't want to see your boobs. You became a whore. Sally, when did this happen? We raised you properly. You taking after your grandmother. STAHP.

Sally?

Sally sparrow.

No.

Fine. Any-who, when you make your oc, you need to keep in mind to give them good traits as well as bad ones. I'v seen oc's that were 'violent, bloodthirsty, and hates everyone', but thats not the only things that can make up a Homunculus. Remember, each of the Homunculus had good traits too. Candy, care to give an example?

Sure. Wait, they were good?

You fail me.

ok.

Look, here are what some of the sins were good at: Gluttony always asked permission before doing something, Greed never told a lie, and Father was patient. Necessarily, not all the sins had a bad trait. And if you get the idea for the opposite sins, you need to remember; give them a bad trait. Simple logic.

I have something.

Yes?

Ok, so when you make your oc a deadly sin, you know how they give them a name like 'sadism' or something like that?

Ok, so? Where are you going with this?

Look, I found some things that can count as sins, but are not actually sins. Example: Depression was a sin before sloth took its place. Vengeance, Insanity, and Vanity could also be considered sins. HOWEVER! There are opposite sins, called 'Cardinal Virtues' and here are they and the sins they oppose;

Chasity- Lust
Temperance- Gluttony
Charity- Greed
Dilligence- Sloth
Forgiveness- Wrath
Kindness- Envy
Humility- pride

All of these are prime examples. Yet you guys go for things like 'rage', 'sadness' and Sadism. Da faq guys. Seriously. Stop.

Ok, I think we covered all the parts. If you guys think we missed anything comment. Oh, and before I forget, Candy, we have our very first oc to review.

FUCK YEAH! LET ME KISS YOU! *Grabs AA Addict and kisses his cheeks* MWAH MWAH!

Over dramatic much?

Bitchy much?

There are times I want to slap you. Ok, lets continue. This is Addicts first oc, so we will be kind.

NOPE!

I'll keep her in check. Anyway, here it is, ALSO THEY ADVISE YOU TO SKIP OIF YOU WILL READ THEIR STORY:

My OC is a homunculus named Pride (she gives something else as her name, like Selim does).

Isn't Pride already taken? Is this after when he becomes human?

More importantly, what generation is she from?

She's fifteen. Her elder sister died when she was twelve in a burning building, and she tried to resurrect her, but, obviously, it failed.

Yeah, ok, i'm going to take a swing and say it's Brotherhood? I read ahead.

I have no idea what was taken off her. Her hand, because her sister used to take hold of it and lead her? I dunno.

Make sure to know what is taken! Plan everything out about two days before you do the oc!

But then, she gets injected with a Philosopher's Stone for some reason (don't worry, I'll smoothen out the details later) and becomes a homunculus unwillingly.

Thats why you said it was brotherhood?

Yeah.

This part can essentially make sense, seeing as how this was how Bradley was , why was she injected?

Her tattoo in on the back of her neck, which is why she always wears starched collar shirts and coats.

Makes sense, I guess?

I don't. But I'm too tired. CANT UNDERSTAND WHAT IS GOING ON.

She wears black all around, apart from a red interior to her coat.

Sounds allot like Edward. Fix that up a little.

She has blood red, cold, hard eyes, and her voice is cold and hard.

All homunculus has purple eyes. This actually makes her more suspicious around people. Because if I saw someone with purple eyes, I would think its a trick of the light, or contacts. But red? That just makes me raise an eyebrow.

She applies for the State Alchemist job in hopes of accessing military alchemy books and finding out a way to make herself human again. She passes it (obviously) and is named The Shadow Alchemist (she has a tendency to make and control shadows, like FMAB Pride).

Nope~! Come up with a diffrent power. Like the power to control the tempature. Ooh, or to give women periods :3

Candy, are you ok?

BLOODSTAIN FEVER,LET THE BLOOD POUR!

Oh my god, shut up.

She's told to bunk with Ed and Al in the military dorms (because for some weird reason Ed uses them now).

NONONONON! YOU DONT BUNK WITH TWO GUYS IF YOUR A GIRL

She should have a separate dorm, Hun.

She doesn't like the idea because of her tattoo, but she has to.

What was the purpose of that sentence? Its just randomly there, like "Hey~!"

And, as you guessed it, she ends up in love with Ed (and Ed likewise). I WANTED ED TO HAVE A LOVE LIFE THAT'S NOT ROY FOR ONCE IN MY STORIES! I don't ship Edwin, surprisingly.

Aww~ Thats too bad, I like Edwin

I like Edvy. Edwin's fine too.

Why do you need a romantic plot anyway? What is the plot, actually?

She does contradict your rule that State Alchemists shouldn't be Ed's age, but, for the plot, she had to be.

BOOO!

Shut up, candy.

And I forgot her name. Kuroi something, I think.

Japanese name is a no-no. Ametris is Germany, give her a German name.

OK WE DONE?!

This chapter, yes.

SON OF A-

Next chapter; Personality traits.