Hey everyone! This is my first fanfic so i hope u like it! We talk about me later. Here it is!
Chapter 1
Max's POV
Our day starts when some "New And Improved" Erasers fly in above us and start kicking our butts without anyone knowing. Where were we you ask? A "vacation" stay at Ella's grandma's house in Hawaii. You would think "Oh wow Hawaii! kow-a-bunga!" right? Not us. Ever since we got off that plane (you know how twitchy I get in planes) we have been paranoid. Checking around every corner for Erasers. Checking every tight crack. Checking every coconut smoothie. (No I am not joking) So finally after we began relaxing, BAM! Erasers start dropping from everywhere. So of course we weren't ready for this because we were just relaxing drinking smoothies so here we are in the present, in the butt kicking stage.
"WHERE THE HECK DID THEY COME FROM!?" I thought so that only Angel could hear me. "Max, calm down. It is only Erasers. We take them on pretty much every day." Angel said in my thoughts. I punched an Eraser in the jaw and heard a satisfying crack. "Yes Max, calm down". I gridded my teeth. " Shut up, Voice." I was defently not in the mood to talk to him. "Max watch out!" It was Fang. I ducked just as a hairy fist sailed over my head. I grabbed it and through it over me along with the body as well. "Thanks" I called back to him, but he was too deep in a fight that he didn't hear. After most of the Erasers were gone, I was walking over to him to thank him again when i felt a sharp pain in the back of my neck. I touched it but i didn't feel anything so I went on moving toward Fang but as i was moving, my vision became blurry and I felt weird. I decided to thank Fang in the morning so I turned around and walked toward my room.
Fang POV
When I woke up this morning, it was quiet. I mean beside the sounds of the kids getting on Iggy's nerves and Ig chasing them around the house then Ig crashes into a poll outside. Besides that. I walk out of my room and down the hall to where I think is Max's room. I'm still getting used to this Hawaiian beach house. I knock on the door. No answer. I knock again. Again, no answer. I gently push open the door to see Max still sleeping on her bed. Hum. Thats odd. Max is usually up At the most, 6 a.m. and it's almost 10. I shook her. She groaned and flipped over. I whispered "Max. Wake up you sleepy nut brain." She turned over and opened one eye. "whaisit" she slurred. "Nothing" I said " It's just that it is almost 10" She looked up and frowned like she wanted to say something but didn't know the right way to put it."Max" I said " Are you alright?" She nodded then turned and went back to sleep. I ws really worried but let her sleep
Max POV
When I woke up after Fang left, I felt worse than yesterday, and that's saying something. I turned over and noticed something. I sat upright and ran for my bathroom. When I got there, my dinner raced through my mouth. I tried not to look but every time I caught a glimpse, a new wave of puke came up. When I was done, I was shivering. I got up and rinsed my mouth out. I got dressed and went downstairs. Suprisenly, no one was down there so I could just say I had breakfast.
After looking around awhile, I finally found the flock on the roof waiting for me. I flew up and plastered a fake smile on my lips. "Ok every one, we will start today will formation drills." I heard a large collection of "Awwww"s " You will get in your pairs and practice." Pairs being: me + Fang, Iggy + Gazzy, and Nudge + Angel. Each pair practices on a different side of the house. When me and Fang were up in the air, we flew above some trees for a while before Fang broke the silence. " Are you sure you feel ok?" At that same moment I felt off. I couldn't see right. I couldn't hear right. I couldn't talk right. All i could manage was "nnnuuuooo" before I started falling... fast.
Did you like so far? Don't forget to R&R! By the way what does R&R mean? Also, what do you think should happen to Max. Should she die, should she break something, comment your opinion!
-Byronsar
Hello again! Thank you to those of you who commented. I read some comments and I would like to share the answers:
Dear, Shelbyride- Thank you for your comment. I like your idea. I think I could put it in the story. I am an author now, but I need help. To you and every one else, submit ideas and I will put them in the story!
Dear, triplechoclatte- Don't worry, I would never do that to poor Max. She is probably already half-way to the hospital already but I would never kill her. I mean what kind of cruel person would do that? Not me that's for sure!
Dear, BlackStarGodliness- Thank you for following me! My first story and I already have a follower. Yipey!
Thank you to all of those who commented. It was my mom's e-mail account so she read them first. When I heard I got comments already, I screamed and ran down stairs like it was christmas day! You guys make me so happy!
Chapter 2
Max POV
"Beep...Beep...Beep"
Pain. Searing Pain. That's all I felt. Cramps. Painful cramps. That's also what I felt. Broken. Very Broken. That's, again, also how I felt. There was an awkward poking sensation to my left. I could very well make it out. It was very annoying."Do you mind?" I said raspily still with my eyes closed "Your ruining my misery poem" "Sorry." said a voice that sounded framiler somehow. Then I got it. Fang! Wait. Have to check first. "Fang?" "Yes Max?" Yes! It is Fang! "What happened?" I asked. "Well, let me explain it to you." He explained about every thing that had happened the day before and I lisented very closely. Aparently, I passed out when I was falling then landed in some treetops. Then I fell some more and the way he put it, I landed in a pool of paranahas, he smacked every last one of them, and saved me. (I have a feeling he just said that to make him sound more manly)
After Fang had made his point about all the paranhas, the doctor came in. I was about to say "Whats up doc?" and chew on a carrot or something but I didn't have a carrot. The doctor started going on about how"This is a very odd case." and "I have never seen anything like it" and Blah blah blah like we haven't heard this before. So I just ended up tuning him out. I tuned back in when I saw the look on Fang's face. It was a mixer of horror, descused, and I-am-so-glad-you-did-not-hear-that-because-you-would-have-freaked. But I had to ask. " What did you say, Doctor?" I asked. When he was about to answer, Fang shook his head vilantly like this was something he really didn't want me to know about. But, luckly, the doc put his hand up to him and answered my question. "We couldn't find the desease that was harming you, accualy, you seem particuly healthy. To find the desease, we will be doing multiple tests on you." From the look on Fang's face, this wasn't the bad part. The bad part was next. "You will be staying here for 3 weeks." SAY WHAT?
So, this was my second chapter. R&R! Please comment on what you think should happen next!
-Byronsar