BPOV
I could slowly feel Victoria leaching out my life source, she was slowly draining at a very fast pace. After a couple more seconds my vision clouded over and I began to see star, and then I saw nothing. A veil of blackness was pulled over my eyes, and I was being dragged down into a deep dark oblivion. I knew I could not lose because if I did so did Edward so I reached down deep in myself until I felt the strength to fend of the crushing oblivion.
EPOV
I watch as my Bella fell unconscious as her life was being drained away by Victoria. I felt my last vertebrate in my back reposition itself, and like that I was up and I was going after her. She saw me coming after her and let Bella fall down into the frigid cold snow. Victoria turned toward the woods and spirited to the edge. She stopped dead in her track as the sand color wolf emerged into the clearing. Her thoughts we a jumbled mess of escaped, I saw them all and my move just before she did , I lunged and grabbed onto her neck with my razor sharp teeth. With just one bit she was silenced forever, I made quick work of ripping her to shreds. After she was nothing but I pile of twitching limbs, I took a liter and set fire to the pile of stone. A chocking violet smoke filled the air as it billowed up to the heavens above. I quickly turned my attention to my Bella, I dashed to her side. Bella's heart sounded very weak until finally the monsters venom hit her heart.
"Edward, is she is is she gonna be" I heard Seth ask me through his thoughts
"One of us" I finished for him and gestured towards myself.
An eerie silence filled the small clearing, I was then I realized that I had forgotten about the other Vampire had here.
I looked over to Seth with a worried look in my eye, he seemed to interpret my mannerisms and he point with his nose toward a small smoke stacks. With that I realized Victoria was gone forever, after my realization was when the first of many screams escaped my loves lips. I turned my full attention to her as I realized what she was goning to have to go through. With that knowledge I scoped her up into my stone arms, and began to run down the mountain with a wolf on my left flank
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