First Off, Im afraid that if i put Author's notes, you wont read it so i wont call it that. The reason I made this page (no, not to bug the heck out of you and make you think that I made an update((and dont pretend you didnt think so, i do this all the time)) when it didnt)
I couldnt help but notice the reviewers had a few questions and comments. A lot of it is corrections and explanations on my behalf so I think I should let all the readers know about it so they're not wondering later. So, Instead of just replying to each person and save people the trouble, im kind of reviewing the reviews of sorts.
(sorry i dont mean to be annoying i really dont. I just need to setthings and ramble. Bare with me?)
Reviews:
thank you so much for the reviews! I've never had this many before . it makes my story feel loved *u* So thank you!
KnowledgeandImagination: yay! an update! I was jumping up and down when I saw it. hehe, Hyourinmaru seems slightly more humorous than Toushirou is and Tobiume reacts more than momo. I find that hilarious.
One thing I noticed. Wasn't Hyourinmaru supposed to have also forgotten himself, like his name and all? ah well, who cares. It wouldn't help the story if all everyone called him was 'that guy' I think it's really sweet of Tobiume to want to help, and I really want to see their reactions when they realize that their masters are so closely connected. I can't wait! hope you can update soon!
Tomoshibi: Im glad your excited about the update lol I am too. I myself was "jumping up and down" when i saw your review. :] (like really. My sister thought something was wrong with me)
As for your meantion on Hyourinmaru's memory, He still does not remember. However, Tobiume does. Since the two of them are alone, surely Hyourinmaru can guess that Tobuime is talking to him when she calls him "Hyourinmaru". Originally I was going to make her give him a nickname but I discided that they didnt know eachother enough for that. Maybe later. He doesnt know but he assumes because of what she calls him. Thats all. :]
While were on the subject of names, Having everyone call Hyourinmaru "that guy" A(though it would be hilarious) would probably anger him (and we have seen the ice in anger before, have we not?) and turn everyone into popsicles. (he has no mercy T.T) Though that would make a great side story Oneshot (maybe for April Fools?) O.o I have a few oneshot ideas that i may create soon. :] (christmas, thanksgiving specials anyone?)
Im not quite sure of Hyourinmaru's character so i totally had to guess (plus base what i knew from the manga and the zanpactou arc)Your right, It seems he is indeed more humorous then Toshiro. At least the Toshiro in captain mode.(makes it sound like he's some sort of robot) He's looser around people he knows better. I dunno, i just think that behind his icy demeanor, he is lukewarm, you know. He teases her like Toshiro teases Hinamori. xD ha, so i guess that makes Hinamori a bed wetter and Tobuime a drooler. (wow, what a combo)
I am extremely happy with Tobuime's character and how its shaping. The way both of the zanpactous resemble their masters (well mostly) was totally unintentional, i guess they just turned out that way. (now i know how a parent feels O.o)
Yuletide: Aw...this is so adorable! I like this pairing a lot too, as cliched as some people may see it as
I do see some spelling errors though and some capitalization errors
I'm not trying to be mean, but I'm a total spelling freak :D
So those type of super small errors bug me ^.^
By the way, your spelling errors are ones that spellcheck usually wouldn't see. As in the last chapter, you used 'star' instead of 'stare'
Getting a beta is really useful too, since you can bounce ideas off them, and they're basically the human equivalent of a spell checker :D
Anyways, please update soon! I can't wait!
-Kelly-
Koneko144, Mei-tan, LovelyXPeach also said similar things. I want to thank each of you personally for your reviews. You three have no idea how you guys helped. And yes, I need to fix my grammer. lol
Tomoshibi: Thanks for your rewiew! Just reading it got me syched! *u*
I try and handcheck as many mistakes as i can (i have wordpad which has no spellcheck O.o) but im sure theres a bunch of mistakes. I double checked this chapter because i was being nitpicky. (i have my moments). Haha i acually wasnt sure at the time (no I do know how to spell I just had one of those moments where you forget how to spell things) how to spell stare. lol its one of those words I always spell wrong O.o I feel dumb now .
as for Beta, i really need it bad. Like an editor for fanfictioners (or as i call them FanFi's xD). Im not really sure how the beta works though (im used to the old ). Im hopeless.
Buddy System?
all right, so I made a referance in chapter 2 about the buddy system. Its where you cant go places alone so you have to take a bathroom buddy or partner with you. This gives you an alibi at all times and a partner so you dont do anything stupid. We did this for camp once O.o yeah it was emmbarrasing.. "hey i have to go to the bathroom. Come with me?" *shudder*
I originally had them, in the first draft of the chapter, on a mission together so they were partners but this changed later. However, this line never changed. It sounds almost out of place and suddenly hard to follow however i found that changing it would be pointless. Muramasa is smarter then to let a zanpactou run around alone. Who knows what could happen then, huh?
Well, thats it... lol No really, thats it.
Congrats! If you made it this far without going insane. You survived my rambling. Good job you get a cookie! *gives out virtual cookies*
If you can help me with Beta that would be epic. You'd get a brownie badge and another cookie :]
