Enjoy this prologue to my re-write. Please R&R and tell me what you think. I would love any advice and/or constructive criticism. I can use all the help I can get.
TickTick Tick
Slim pale hands gently smoothed over heavy pink fabric that draped to the floor in frilly waves. The itchy fabric fluttering silently around bright pink slipper clad feet.
Tick Tick Tick
Clean nails raised to brush a golden hair from a pale face, only to let it fall back into its out of place position a moment later. Brown eyes hardening at the irony.
Tick Tick Tick
An irritated sigh escaped colored lips as the young woman's eyes closed tightly. Her mind racing to think of anything but the impending evening in an itchy dress with a man she despised.
Tick Tick Tick
Sun brown eyes snapped open with an intensity that rivaled anger burning in their depths. The blonde grabbed a heavily decorated and largely impractical brush from the elaborate vanity she stood in front of. She held her hand on the hair tool for a moment. It lay polished and pristine on the shiny marble surface of her vanity table. Silver and decorated with twirling vines and fairies that dances across the handle.
Tick Tick Tick
Lovely and sweet and polished. Just like her existence in this dreaded house. Facial features hardened and her grip on the brush tightened. She lifted the instrument from the table and hurled it across the room at full force.
Tick Tick Tick
The clock lay shattered on her plush rug. The brush a few inches away. The glass surface of the face had been utterly shattered and the hour hand no longer was attached to the white roman numeral dotted base. The second hand persisted still.
Tick Tick-
The clock finally droned into silence after the heel of a fancily clad foot ground into the mechanism. Silence pervaded the room in a heavy shroud. The broken mess lay at her feet. Under her heel. Breaking through the barrier of noise and bringing the supposed to be blessed silence. Deafening and heavy and quiet. The golden haired girl backed away from the carnage she had caused. Listless eyes stared blankly at the mess that had been made. She smirked slightly. Breaking through the terrible noise was easy. BUt the silence that her actions brought was not welcomed. Easy. It was easy to break things. She could break out of the existence she was forced into by powers out of her control. It would be easy. She turned from the sight and stepped to the grand oak wood door that separated her from the evening dinner she would be forced to attend. She smoothed her uncomfortable dress once more and straightened up. One last look at the shattered glass riddling the carpet. She left the silent room with a sorrowful parting.
"If only it were that simple."
And with that she left the destruction behind her. The dreaded silence lapsing throughout the room.
So? What do you guys think? As previous stated on my other story. The first chapter will be up by Aug 8th or 9th depending on edit time. R&R and have a beautiful day.
Love and Smiles -Mystery