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Okay I did make a few mistales in the last chapter. Here's the things I messed up BAD!
1: Missing OC-I forgot Nick. Sorry Urimozo. I was in a real hurry because I have a lot of stuff going on and wanted to post this really quick. I will put him in the next one. He'll arrive late because he got there after the boat left.
2: No conversation-There was really no conversation. Just that fight between Natalie and Kayla. But I don't have enough time to write a long chapter. So I seperate different parts into different chapters. Hence, the Arrival was first, second will be when Chris announces the teams, third will be them moving into the cabins, fourth will be the first challenge, fifth will be elimination, sixth will be something on like the days off a challenge or something.
3: It went by too quickly- I was in a rush, I had a basketball scimage, practice, and I didn't get on the computer much. The others will be in detail. I'm a type of person who knows what will happen in the future chapters and has no idea what to do on the first. Only good thing I thought of was someone getting in a fight with Natalie. When I read over that it sounded bad. I promise future chapters WILL be in detail. It may take a week or so to post it though.
4: Descriptions were bad- Yes the descriptions sucked. Like I said, I rushed to get it done, which was a HUGE mistake, because everything was terrible! I was really stressed at the time so I rushed. But I'm not going to put a wordy description, but I could have done a better one.
5: Typos- Yes there were probably typos. I used words I had no ides how to spell.
For example, I didn't know if the word was spelled sarcasticly or sarcastically. Thanks for pointing these out. I'd appreciate it if you told me what word I misspelled and how to spell it so I can spell it right in the future. I mean I misspelled BURRITO in a spelling bee last year! It's a true story I'll tell you when I know you better...
Thanks for the constuctive criticizm (doubt I spelled that right) I put it in my writing to make it better. Again if I displayed your character wrong or something, tell me so I can make more like you want it.