Without Luffy
To COU0003- I'm sorry you found so many problems in my story. I guess I rush too much to get a chapter out that I don't realize grammar mistakes, and half the time it's how my computer corrects it. I understand about not enjoying ANs. Thanks for reviewing and pointing out my mistakes.
Please note however that the one sentence per line is my writing style. I find it easier for me to go back and search for things this way.
Chopper clung to my leg, searching for the sound.
I look too, but don't see the face of an ugly giant.
The crashing sound was getting worse, though.
Luffy sat me down gently.
"Oi, you wanna fight?" He challenged the mysterious enemy.
I know necromancers were powerful creatures and all, but I don't think Zion could summon something that could shake the world to its very core.
I heard a loud menacing roar, coming from above us.
My head shot up.
No…we wouldn't be fighting a giant of any kind.
The white bloody scales gleamed in the new sunlight1, the chains dangling from it making some kind of sad song.
Its huge wings were expanded fully, blocking the sun from reaching us.
It roared again, practically telling us to leave, before unleashing fire from its heavily spiked mouth.
A dragon.
The Mugiwara captain was quick to grab Chopper and me, pulling us away from the intense flames.
Once he moved us to a safe place- "Hey! Don't you dare hurt my nakama!"
His left arm shot back behind him, "Gomu Gomu No Pistol!" His arm retracted, aiming for the dragon.
It took a direct blow to the chest, but it kept air born.
The dragon swooped down, and I half expected it to breathe fire again.
It flew back to a safe distance, but not without knocking Luffy clear off his feet and into the air with its tail.
"Luffy!" I cried as the dragon reached for him, claws extended.
The captain swiftly stretched his arms to grab onto the horns on its head.
He pulled himself forward, slamming his feet into its face.
The dragon let out a wail, practically trying to bite Luffy.
He held on tight, being shaken widely around.
"Chopper!" He shouted, "Keep Soul safe!" He then proceeded to grab onto each end of the dragons wings.
The reindeer changed into strong point, lifting me up and headed for the trees.
"Chopper we can't leave him! It's a dragon!"
I saw the deep determination in his eyes, and knew we would not return to help battle the dragon.
I heard it roar again, much louder and more aggressive.
I could barely make out the voice that had to be Luffy's, "And stop Zoro!"
It was just the doctor and I verses a necromancer and a former pirate hunter.
Had Luffy gone mad!
We would have to fight them without the power house.
This would get interesting.
1= New sunlight is referred to as dawn.
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-Soul Spirit-