Thank you for the tips. I will try my best to fix those few things i need to work on. Though i do need help. Should I keep writing in script form?
review and get back to me so i can continue with this story.
i may or may not continue depending on if y'all like it.
thanks for the reviews and keep them coming. i only want to get better. and if you have suggestions for this story or another please feel free to let me know.
thanks, delkolvr33