Oh, you're new to Naruto? No wonder. I was just wondering about the plot because in canon there are about four if not five known female jinchuuriki.
I'm not a fan of FemNaruto stories, but the plot made me curious.
You wrote it well, though you should still develop your pacing and prose. There were a few grammar booboos here and there, but those are forgivable. Look over your work next time and iron out the wrinkles, yeah?
Good work. ^.^b
So cute. Sorry if I didn't review the first chap but it was gud.
Lollipop-chan 2011-10-31 . chapter 2That's really good! One question though: how was Naruto able to keep her identity as a girl secret for so long? Surely Sakura wouldve guessed it, healing her many times over.
Just a thought. You don't have to answer.
Streema, Raiko, KwlYaoiPankakes, Tenshi Yami- Angle of Darkness -Thank you!
Lollipop-chan - Yeah I know that someone would have realized but for the story line, I'm just going to pretend like they didnt ;) Plus if Naruto wanted to keep it a secret, I'm sure he(she) could.
Emotive Gothika-Thank you for the well thought Review. Yes, I knew that girls had been them before and were. But I felt like doing this anyways ;) !SPOILER FROM MANGA! ►►►►(lol even his mom was so ya...)
Keep the reviews coming guys! I figured I would at least put up one more chapter but if you like this one too...I'll think about cointinuing/finishing this story.
Sasuke didn't know that Naruto was a Jinjuriki. No one had ever informed him the truth behind the girl's powers. All he knew was Naruto had great power; its source was unknown to him. He didn't have parents to tell him to stay away from that boy when they met at the academy; he's a monster in disguise. No, Sasuke had no false stories of horror shoved down his throat.
Today, she decided, today I will tell him everything.
"Sasuke?" she whispered as she neared the cliff. It was the unsaid meeting place. Was he there?
Sasuke looked up. Blondie walked through the trees slowly, searching for him. He sat up from the grass and stared at her.
"Oh, there you are," she smiled at him.
Sasuke remained silent. He just watched her walk closer and sit on the ground next to him. Her closeness made him want to begin to back away, or shuffle closer. A strange feeling indeed.
"Let's talk about you," Sasuke said unemotionally. "You sure know a lot about me. Too much for my liking. So what about you? You said we could talk about you. And I have some questions."
"Yes," she said sadly. "I did promise that, didn't I?"
"Hn," Sasuke replied turning back to the ocean.
"Do you really want to know?" she asked noticing how tense he was with her sitting so close.
"I don't think it matters either way," Sasuke said with a sigh. He narrowed his eyes. She knew he wanted to know. "You are annoying though. Why haven't you run away? I killed my own brother!" He did want her to run away, to confirm he was a monster, to take every last ounce of emotion he had left with her.
"Because, my past was hard too, Sasuke Uchiha."
This was not a reply Sasuke had expected. But how bad could this smiling girl know? She smiled and even a gloomy day would appear bright.
"I doubt it," Sasuke snorted shaking his head at the naïve girl. "You are so carefree. You wouldn't know pain if it stared you in the face."
"Well, I suppose I should begin with my parents huh?" she was talking more to herself. "Well they're both dead. Died a few hours after I was born actually."
Sasuke's head whipped around to look at her, but no tears stung her eyes as she went on.
"I'm not like other girls," she shrugged, smiling at him sadly. "I never have been."
Her heart rate was picking up, Sasuke could hear from where he sat. Curiosity got the better of him and stared at her, waiting for her to continue. "And everyone hated me because of it. They were afraid of me because of something I didn't do, angry with me for the deaths of people I didn't kill, disgusted with me for acts I never committed."
"Why?" Sasuke prompted. "Who could possibly hold a grudge on such a stupid girl? You are vulnerable and weak. You aren't worth anyone's time. They hated you. Why?"
She looked him in the eye, and her blue eyes began to darken. "And I hated them for it. How dare they leave me on my own? How dare they look at me like that? I didn't even know the truth, they all kept it from me. But then I learned who, no what, I really was. Why did they hate me Sasuke Uchiha? Because I am a Jinjuriki."
Sasuke flew to his feet and took steps back, staring at the seemingly innocent girl. He eyed her suspiciously. A jinjuriki. A tailed beast host? His hands pulled on his sword and he stood there, planning an attack.
"Don't you dare," she said each syllable hotter than the last. Sasuke just stared at her, backing up farther. "Don't you dare look at me like that!"Her eyes became slits in pools of orange, the beautiful blue was somewhere lost inside. "I am not a monster!" she screamed at him.
She sank to the ground and pulled her knees up to her chin. She was shaking with anger and sadness. Sasuke had gave her the look. She had seen it so many times but it was one he had never given her. He had given her a look of hatred, a look of annoyance but he had never looked at her as if she was a cursed born.
Sasuke watched as the girl began to wipe away tears from her face. Slowly, her eyes returned to blue and he still couldn't comprehend what he had just seen.
Slowly, she stood up from the ground. Her blonde hair danced in front of her streaked face. She took a deep breath and looked back up at him.
"I was alone from the start. No family. No friends. No one. It was stripped from me by the same monster I carry inside of me," she didn't look at him, It was as if she were telling the ocean her story rather than him. "This is why, I don't tell people about me."
"You hold a tailed beast?" Sasuke finally muttered.
"Yes," she said. "I was a fool to think I could tell you Sasuke Uchiha. I thought you could understand. I was wrong."
She got up and ran through the trees. She hadn't even gotten to the full truth and he had pulled a weapon on her. She was wrong to think she could trust him.
Sasuke sheathed his sword and stared after her in wonder. Those eyes. Those orange eyes. They were like Naruto's.
Did that mean that Naruto was a tailed beast too? That had to be it. It made sense. He needed to learn more about this girl. Maybe, she could join his team.
Naruto pulled her sleeping bag tight around her as she drowned herself in tears. She was weak. She couldn't even tell him, worse, she had nearly lost control. But he must have figured it out by now, she had the same eyes as she had when she attacked him so many years ago.
She was angry with herself, for the way she had acted. She should have expected this reaction, it was the only one she ever got. But still, she believed deep down that even a cold hearted Sasuke…would understand.
She was a fool to think he could change just because she wanted him too. Sasuke was lost in the world of revenge, there was no hope for him now. Not even she could save him.
I know. I know. This makes Naurto sound like such a wuss. Well tough! lol PLEASE REVIEW IF YOU HAVE THE CHANCE!