Okay finally have some time to write the next chapter of this story. For all the people who wrote a review thanks a whole lot, and especially for saying this story has potential which is awesome since this is my first fanfic, but last chapter wasn't my best I write way better stuff in my sleep but my only problem are commas and periods. Zombiecidal-maniac yeah you're right and I never mind a little constructive criticism so don't worry. Autumn rainfall- geez, that's embarrassing who knew one word made such a difference. Vipergirl02- hey, looky we both have an oc from each other! And timberstar- wow I didn't really even think about shinys, I'm not sure if I should allow it though sorry. Okay enough stalling on with the story!
"Dragonite, flame thrower!" green yelled. Suddenly, a large orange creature with short wings and a horn on his head shot out a huge torrent of fire, aimed straight at a short floating creature with a star shaped head and streamer like things coming out of his back. "Quick, jirachi dodge it!" I yelled. The creature now known as, jirachi barely dashed out of harms way before getting hit with a stone edge. "Jirachi!" I exclaimed "quick use wish!" suddenly, lights that appeared to look like a stars started to fly above. Jirachi closed his eyes and began to whisper to himself. "Ha, Do you really think that'll work black?" green yelled from across the battle field "it'll never take effect before I take him down" "just you wait" I yell back "quick, doom desire!" I commanded soon white light began to envelop dragonite then disappeared. "Ha ha you suck, now dragonite, slash!" green commanded. "come on, jirachi dodge as much as you can then use Draco meteor!" I told jirachi as he began to dodge blows. "What? Jirachi can't learn Draco meteor!" green exclaimed but, was quickly silenced when the sky began to turn dark and multicolored rocks began to fall from the sky and started to pummel dragonite. "No!" green yelled again and again whenever a meteor would hit dragonite. Once the dust cleared there was dragonite barely standing "yes!" green cheered "quickly dragonite slash!" dragonite slowly charged his claw with a white light and hit jirachi who fell to the floor in a heap before I had a chance to say another attack. "YES! I WIN" green cheered and began to go into a victory dance until he saw the grin on my face. "Or did he?" I slowly said "watch" I said as green looked on in horror a white light began to envelop dragonite again but with so much more intensity they had to look away but when the light died down there was dragonite, lying on the floor knocked out. Green stood there with his mouth wide open as jirachi slowly got up with a smug grin on his face similar to mines. "But, but, but how?" was all he managed to say. "You don't even know what doom desire does, don't you" I asked. Green nodded his head no "well doom desire is a move that takes a turn to take affect, while dragonites slash should've knocked out jirachi wish took affect during the draco meteor attack so, when slash hit jirachi he survived just long enough for doom desire to take effect" I explained with a bow. "jirachi, you were amazing!" I cheered as I rushed forward to hug my jirachi. When all of a sudden "JORGE! PAY ATTENTION!"
I was quickly thrown out of my fantasies by the booming voice of my teacher, . "wha- wha- wha- what happened?" I quickly said disoriented from my previous thoughts. "What's the answer to the question?" said losing her patience. "Errrrr what was the question" was the only thing I could manage to say as the teacher hung her head in pity. "Anybody else?" she asked the class. The whole class raised their hands except for me. I sighed "fuck, I zoned out again" I thought to myself. "Why, the hell am I keep on zoning ou- Jorge?" my thoughts were interrupted again by asking for another answer. "son of a bitch! Again?" was all I managed to think as everyone else started to stare at me "Jorge, it's the first day of school and you can't work out these questions, how do you think you'll do the rest of the year?" said angrily.
"It's the freaking first day of school, and we're doing work already!" I yelled to no one in particular as I exited the classroom. "Lazy farmer, you need to start paying attention" said a voice behind me. I turned around and saw a girl around 5feet tall with black hair that comes down to her neck she has brown eyes with glasses and is wearing a dinosaur t-shirt and jeans with white tennis shoes. "You've just barely passed last year and, you're already off to a bad start" she scolded. (this was Michelle a friend of mine that I met last year but she treated me like her child even though I was a year older and always liked to taunt me by calling me lazy farmer since Jorge means farmer and I'm sure we established I'm lazy right) I rolled my eyes"I'll be fine, question mark just like every other year" I said calling her by her own name meaning. "Fine!" she pouted. "But don't make me take away your dsi again" she warned. Last time she took it away for a month. "Whatever" was my only reply. "Let me guess what you were thinking of back there, Pokémon, right?" Michelle guessed. "Crap!" I thought in my head "how does she read me so well?" it's a good thing she likes Pokémon too or else I would never hear the end of it. "Yeah" I said "me and my neighbor had a bet, that one of us can find a good online Pokémon game and beat the other at it in time." "And if I lose, I lose jirachi" I quickly added. I saw Michelle of wide eyed in surprise for a second then it quickly faded away. "Well" she said "you better start looking huh?" Michelle said with a smile as we split ways to our next class
As the final bell rang I went to get my backpack from my locker, but when I opened the door I saw a not fall out. Puzzled I picked it up and looked at it "strange" I thought "it has a wax seal" I noted as found a design on it. It was a circle with a line going through it with a smaller circle in the middle "a pokeball?" I guessed. Hesitantly I broke the seal and began to read what it said and I noticed it wasn't a note it was acceptance letter…..
Woo! I actually reached my goal this time! And I wrote all this yesterday but didn't post it because I'm writing it on my school provided rental laptop because for some strange reason my other laptop doesn't have Microsoft word and I refuse to use notepad. I might post another chapter today though so double woo! And a triple woo cause this is the first time I've written action and it didn't come out too bad if I do say so myself
Moonlight: so now you're adding people from school?
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Moonlight: and I still don't get an appearance?
Blackshadow94: for the last time nooo….
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Blackshadow94: some other story all right? Get off my back!
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