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Review comment time i'll do this every 5 or so chapter
Akira Stridder
2010-06-14 . chapter 2
yea! i hate sakura too!
I dont hate Sakura, it just at this time in the manga she's a bit of bitch its only when sasuke says she annoying that she starts to chance, whilst that hasnt happen in my story she will be less of bitch in time
Riku Uzumaki
2010-06-12 . chapter 5
Hmmm... so you chose to stick with the canon team for Naruto, and Hinata is getting over her shyness (which is good). I also have a bad feeling about the real Genin Test that Kakashi is going to give, in fact, I am now going to predict the outcome of it all. It will be the bell test, Naruto will figure out the true meaning due to him being smarter than his canon self. While Sakura and Sasuke remain clueless, but somehow, in the end, they all manage to pass through means that are completely up to you.
Good point about the genin test too many people do that, so iv change it to something else. for a first time non-one-off i though stick with canon, the next i do will have an oc and non canon teams
FairoNeko
2010-06-12 . chapter 5
You have a little grammar error:
"My first impression of you guys, I don't like you" he said, " meet me on the room in 5" He then shunshin away.
=you should had wrote meet me on the roof in 5 minute instead of like the text above
"Why do I always get the prankers. Though he did pass the first test, keeping his justu secrete. Did they ever find out how he keeps making Iruka's desk randomly disappear. Might have to keep an eye on him"
=it's prankster, not prankers... you mean prankster right?
sorry if I offended you!
Nope i know my grammar sucks, doesnt bother me when people tell me
zmanjz
2010-06-05 . chapter 4
Interesting storyline, I haven't seen one exactly like this so good job on plot choice.
Psychology is a different manner.
By making Naruto a student of sealing, by the time that Mizuki "spills the beans" this Naruto would be well aware both from the letter where his father says that he "Sealed the Kyuubi into Naruto" and his own knowledge of sealing, it is extremely unlikely that Naruto wouldn't have realized on his own that he is as much the Kyuubi as his gloves are the Kunai sealed within them.
Thats one of reason i decide on this plot choice. i get bored when everyone does the same thing.
whilst the logical part told naruto that he wasnt the kyuubi, the another part him did believe that he was the kyuubi, its like when a 10 year old believes that its his/her fault that their parent leaves, 99% of the times its not, but they still believe it
2010-06-05 . chapter 4
It's a decent story thus far, though it could change for the worse if you decide to bash characters out of hand.
I dont like it when people bash for the sake of bashing, if the plot works well then yes i might bash a bit but never for the sake of bashing
cjcold2
2010-06-05 . chapter 4
Nice story.
Nice work with the downside to learning all those advance skills not helping him with the exam at all. It makes sense given the Yondaime expected his son to be a jounin before he accessed the house.
I liked the advice from Hinata and too her. The idea of Hinata out in the woods screaming at a tree is rather amusing.
Can't wait to see what the teams will be. Hopefully he will be able to trust his team and open up to them, there is a limit to how far he can advance on his own afterall.
More soon please.
thnks, one of the reasons i gave him those extra skill was that at that time they were useless to him. and if he every uses some of them infront of other people then trouble will brew. Hinata screaming at a tree would be funny.
T00STr00nG
2010-06-05 . chapter 4
Awesome chapter. But I thought Naruto would be able to use the rasegan with 1 hand since hes been practicing for a while. Also does this have to be NarutoxHinata? Its getting really old. Try someone else like Temari...I think they can have a better connection. I like the steps you made for the Hiraishin that was smart. Besides theirs no true love at the age of 10-12..Thats just bullshit they have no experience. Overall I hope its not NarutoxHinata for romance but instead frendship instead.
i chose hinata this time. this wont be a romance might add a tad near the end that after sasuke leaving, if he does. if will be friendship, bit of fluff and i agree no 10-13 year knows their true love Naruto and hinata mainly. Hinata brought up in a cold house hold, were love isnt thought of, and Naruto has never seen real love. so one-sided crush yes, true love no
HiNAPRiNCESS22
2010-06-03 . chapter 1
Good start! =) Hope Naruto isn't as dense as he is in the animation. Can't wait for the next chapter.
He is and he isnt. basicly in the manga naruto has a goal but no path. this idea give him a goal and a path to follow. so whilst in sealing he knows more than most people, in other aspects he wont.
FairoNeko
2010-06-06 . chapter 4
Could you make Naruto using Rasengan without clone to help on future chapters?
I wonder what would Naruto tell Sandaime where he learn Rasengan..
Yes i will make him learn rasengan with clones, but for now its with clones. lol until i read this review i forgot to add in the Sandaime asking naruto were he learnt the rasengan, so thnks
And to everyone that comment on grammar, spelling, how hard its is to read, and stuttering, thanks for the ideas to improve my story
Naruto was at the training ground five minutes early. Sasuke was already there. Sakura got there just on time. Half an hour later, Naruto sat down and started to mediated, he focused his thoughts on what he knew about his new sensei. Upon hearing that there was a second test before they really passed, he immediately tried to find out two things. First, he went to find out any information about this test. He searched in the library and his father's house and had no luck at all. The second was the find out anything he could about Kakashi. He found out that he was always late, read porn, had a care-free attitude, somehow gained the Sharingan and was an elite jonin. He was taught by the Yondaime and was considered to be one of the deadliest leaf shinobi in active duty. The worst thing he found out was the fact that he had applied to be jonin teacher for around 10 years, however he hadn't passed a single team. Whatever this test was it was gonna be hard.
At ten am Kakashi arrived, "Sorry I'm late but I got lost on the road of life" he tried to tell them
"LIER" Sakura screamed.
"Anyway here is the test" Kakashi pulled out an alarm clock "you have till mid-day to get a bell from me, if you don't you fail and get sent back to academy. Also you get tied to a post and have to watch the others eat their lunch. You can use anything you want, if you don't come intending to kill me then you won't get a bell. BEGIN"
At this word, everyone jump back to hid, except Naruto.
"You know the other two had the right idea to run and hid for a bit, so why did you stay here?" Kakashi ask
"Not much point hiding from a jonin, besides isn't the best place to hid is where they lest expect you?" was the reply.
"True, but still a bit strange. So now what"
"THIS" Naruto cried as he threw a dozen shurikens at Kakashi. Both Kakashi, Sakura and Sasuke all had the same though "Stupid, likes that going to work" Instead of dodging Kakashi went to catch them, big mistake as all 12 shurikens, transformed into Naruto with a drawn sword
"What the..." Kakashi muttered as he replaced himself with a log, which was sliced to pieces. However the log had some exploding tags on it, which destroyed all of the clones.
"Wow this guy is pretty good, shadow clones, didn't expect that" Kakashi though, "then again he seems to be an idiot"
Naruto had at this point ran towards a dropped bell and caught himself in a trap.
"Don't fall for such obvious traps, baka, if it seems too good to be true then it's probably is. A Shinobi must be able to see what's underneath the underneath." Kakashi started to lecture
"I KNOW THAT" Naruto cried.
"I'm tell you this because you don't know it"
Naruto laughed " and shouldn't you be able to tell what's underneath the underneath?"
"What, crap kage bunshins?" Kakashi though, however before Naruto's plan could work Kakashi was hit by some shurikens thrown by Sasuke. Kakashi used the kawarimi justu and switched with Naruto, to Sakura and Sasuke shock. Naruto's response was too exploded.
"Clever" Though Kakashi "The Naruto that grabs the bell and fell into the trap was a clone with explosive tags on him. Damn it he nearly caught me out. That's what I get for being overconfident, now that's where Sasuke was hiding"
Before he reached Sasuke, he found Sakura, to which he snuck up behind her and placed a genjustu on her, making her think that Sasuke was dying before her eyes. Upon hearing her scream and then fainting, Kakashi wondered "was that a bit too much, no she needs to leave the fan-girl stage if she wants to be of some use. Look it's my next victim... I mean student"
(im being lazy, this fight happens the same way in the manga)
Naruto was running, his clones had found Sakura and Sasuke. He went to sakura first as she was closer. Deciding not to wake her, he carried her to Sasuke location. When he arrived there he got some clones to start to dig Sasuke out of the hole Kakashi pulled him into. When he finished Sakura woke up.
"Damn it, this test is impossible, i think we are missing something, anyone got any ideas?" naruto Politely asked
"Shut up baka, nothing is impossible for Sasuke-kun" was Sakura response.
"Why the hell did Iruka put me this is team, I wish he was here, that way I would at least get some respect" Naruto screamed back. Thus started the shouting wars. It was however at this point some gears in Sasuke head started to turn.
"Shut it" he said with enough force to shut them up. "Sakura when people insult naruto in class what does Iruka say?"
"He says one day that baka might have to watch our backs so treat him with some respect"
"That's it, that's what we're missing from this test" Naruto cried.
"What?" Sakura responded not getting were this was going
"Sakura, we were put in a team of three so we can watch each other's back and to work together as a team. Now I don't really want to work with you two weaklings, but it looks like I have to. Just don't expect me to be friends" Sasuke explained.
"That's fine with me teme" Naruto agreed. A large smile appeared on his face "Now I have a pretty good idea"
Kakashi was bored, there wasn't much time left and no one was doing anything.
"KAKASHI-SENSEI COME HERE" he heard Sakura scream.
When he reached Sakura, he was angry. Sakura and Sasuke had Naruto tied up, they both at kunais pointed at his neck. He created a clone to head round the back of them, and then he walked in.
"Put the kunais down now or you both fail." He commanded.
"Like the council will let me fail, now give me a bell" Sasuke said.
Kakashi walked towards them
"IF anything happens to him, I will kill you and then make up a story about it, and trust me it will not look good on your part, now LET HIM GO"
Something about this screamed wrong, Sasuke talking whilst Sakura said nothing, how did they knock Naruto out without him hearing. When he took his next step forward, all hell broke loose.
Three small rocks turned into his team, Naruto grabbed him from behind holding his arms, and Sakura grabbed the bells and ran. Sasuke went to punch him. The fake team holding Naruto hostage disappeared in smoke. Kakashi however switched with his own clone, and chased down Sakura.
When Sasuke punched Kakashi and it disappeared both him and Naruto looked towards Sakura in despair. They saw Sakura on the ground with a smiling Kakashi holding the bells. Before they had a chance to counter, the alarm went off.
"POSTS NOW" an angry sensei commanded.
"EXPLAIN" Kakashi knew the answer, but just wanted them to hear them say it.
"Sensei we figured that we have to work together, so we tried to trick you into lowing you guard so we could ambush you?" Naruto tried to explain
"So if the plan had of worked who would have gone back to the academy?"
Naruto grinned, it looked evil
"Sensei we decide that Sasuke would go back" The other two nodded in agreement
"Why him?" Kakashi was shock, from what he had heard this was completely the opposite of what the last Uchiha clan would do.
"Simple, the council" Sasuke started to explain, " Out of us three I'm the only one they care about, it's unlikely they would let me fail, and besides Sakura told us there hasn't been a three man genin team ever, so we figured that you were bluffing as well."
"Clever,You guys pass. All my other teams, they didn't work together, and so they failed. Those that break the rules and codes of the ninja world are called trash, but those who don't take care of their comrades are lower than trash. That ends the test, Starting tomorrow team 7 will begin its duties."
As Kakashi walked to tell the Hokage the good new, all he hear was Naruto and Sakura screaming in joy, Sasuke just smiled.
Thanks for reading, will be naming Naruto sword soon, still need a name in both english and japanese, had some good ones just none that really pop out
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