Authors note

I thought I would leave an author's note – yes, I am English.

I just write all my chapters quickly because sometimes I forget them :/

To all the beta's out there that comment badly without constructive feedback, here's an example my friend got,

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 No, this should not be a twoshot. In fact, you should delete this from FFnet.
 It's been featured for "Bad Fanfic Friday" on the Cheezeburger Network.

 My personal thoughts: I weep that the art form of the written word has been
 reduced to this.

As you can see, she got no word of advice on how to improve, just that her story was bad. That was her first ever story and the only person that can be bothered to review doesn't give her feedback to help improve her story.

So, this is a note to all beta's out there, leave constructive feedback don't just tell them how bad there story is. I'm not sure if it's just me who thinks this.

Ps. For my story I'm getting my friend to edit it for me, so there should be less mistakes, I also will re-edit the chapters before this but there will be no major changes.

Thank you for reading, and if you would like to leave constructive feedback for my friend's story here are there links:

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and as you can see, at the bottom of the page, it says "No flames please".

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So anyways, thanks for reviewing so far ;)

Here's the next chapter

This is a bit of a longer chapter, so I hope it's okay, ScorpiusxLily forever.

Disclaimer: I don't own Harry Potter.

It's been weird, dating Scorpius I mean, I like him a lot and everything, it's just the stares I've gotten through the corridors these past few days that haunt me. Now Roxanne isn't even looking in my direction, or Rose. It's sad to know I've lost them – in the time being of course, they can't stay mad at me forever right?

Last time James spoke to me a few days was very harsh, considering what he's done in the past

Flashback

"Why? Are you trying to break up our family over a stupid boy?" He yells at me, his brown eyes stare glaring with rage, and once again – his face is Weasly red. "I'm NOT! Look, James, I'm not giving up Scorpius, no matter how hard things get. It's Roxanne who's being silly – it's obvious Scorpius doesn't like her, don't you think she would have figured it out by now?" I tell him.

He looks at me like he doesn't even know me, and answers "Think about this Lily, The way you love Scorpius, when you first had your 'crush', but then you're best friend steals the boy you like, then kisses him, and the boy won't even say hi to you."

End Flashback

That's the last thing James has said to me in these past few days, and I'm telling the truth – not one word from him, Uncle Fred, Hugo, Grandma, Rose, or Mum. Dad and Albus and Scorpius are the only ones' being reasonable, yeah – Victorie was, until she heard I kissed Scorpius, now she won't even talk to me either, it's so frustrating. Can't everyone get over the fact that Scorpius like's me and not Roxanne? It's so obvious.

"Are you still sitting there?" I hear Scorpius say as he pokes his head around my shared room.

"Yeah, Don't feel like more people staring at me." I reply, I'm a bit confused by his gesture, doesn't he know our whole family's falling apart? "I was wondering – could you do a favor for me and my family?" I ask him, watching his face turn into confusion.

"Alright – but what am I going to do?" He asks me, I can't help staring into his grey eyes. "To tell Roxanne your not into her, and you are dating me now." I ask. Now I wish I had never said it – the shock on Scorpius face is to much.

"It's just our family – it's breaking apart, please – James, Hugo, Rose, Uncle Fred, Grandma or even my own mother aren't talking to me. Just cause you choose me over Roxanne." I try to explain in better detail, this information just shocks him more – how he didn't notice all the Weasly cousins glaring at me in the hallways is really odd.

"Let me make this clear Lily, I'm not doing this on your behalf, I'm doing it on my own. If I knew this was going on – I would have stopped it ages ago, I can't believe this has happened over me, I'll gently brake it to Roxanne, but you can't ever tell her you asked me, cause I'm making this on my own behalf, I don't want another quarrel to start." As soon as he finishes he walks out of the room – without saying goodbye. I hope he will look at me the same way after he's done with Roxanne, cause I sure know James won't, he will know too well that I asked Scorp.

Scorpius Point of view

It's impossible this is all happening cause of me, I don't know how to break it to Roxanne smoothly, is there a nicer way of saying I'm not into you? I seriously don't think so. It's hard – being the boy I mean, there's so many different types of girls that gets crush's on you, and there's only one that matters. How do you break it to them easily? I might have an answer – if this works well.

"Hey – Lucas?" I ask him, you probably don't know him, he's the first wizard in his family, he has blonde hair and green eyes.

"Yeah?" He answers, I can't believe how I forgot – "So, remember you had a crush on Roxanne?" I ask him, he never said it ended, and I don't think it has either, his face is turning bright red.

"Yes, why?" He asks me, this is really weird – normally it's the girl who does the match making.

"Do you still like her?" I avoid answering his question, this could get me out of this whole situation.

"Yes, if you must know. I wouldn't mind asking her out – if she wasn't so into you." He replies, his eyes sort of go all stormy, it's hard to explain. "Yeah –well that's the thing, you should ask her out soon dude." I reply, just before I turn the corner to go find Roxanne – at least this way she won't be that sad.

"Hey, Roxanne?" I ask her, it's pretty lucky I found her so quickly, her face brightens up as she sees me, this is so awkward.

"Yes Scorp?" She answers, she bats her eyelashes at me, which is an attempt to flirt – I think. "Hey, look- I'm flattered you like me and all, but I'm not so – so sure about you, but I hear a rumor Lucas is pretty into you." I reply, at this her eyes darken, but suddenly lighten at the sound of Lucas' name.

"So, sorry – I hope you can find another." I reply, trying to sound apologetic.

"Hey, Thanks Scorpius, means a lot – most guys aren't that nice in breaking their feelings." She replies, I breathe a sigh of relief – for a minute I thought she was going to throw hex's in my direction. She walks away, I notice that her shoulders drop, I guess she's sad – but at least she will have someone else to look forward to chasing her around all day.

I make one more stop before I go back to talk to Lily,

"Hey Lucas, just saying – she's free." I tell him on my way past, he's suddenly very happy and actually running out the room – poor kid. Even if he's the same year as me.

Just as I turn the corner I find Lily standing there – she looks at me oddly, as if she expected me to actually have been hexed.

"Lils, I can actually be kind you know! Besides – She's going to have Lucas running after her all day." I tell her, just as I do tell her – she seems to know something I don't. "What?" I ask her.

"You said Lucas right?" She asks again,

"Yeah, why?" I answer her.

"He was Roxanne's crush just before you – and it was a much stronger crush than yours." She replies giggling, a stronger crush than me? Is she serious?

So- hope you enjoyed the chapter! I made it a bit longer, since I couldn't find a suitable place to stop the chapter, feedback welcome, please don't flame

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Ps. New chapter will be up next week.