Thanks to everyone who has reviewed or has put this story on your alert list or favourites list. I've written commentary up to chapter 16, and I'll try to put up a new chapter each day I'm on the computer (if I remember to, uni work is neverending!)
AN: wel ok u guyz im only writting dis cuz I got 5 god reviuws. n BTW I wont rite da nxt chapter til I git TIN god vons! STO FLAMING OR ILL REPORT U! Evony isn't a Marie Sue ok she isn't perfect SHES A SATANITS! n she has problemz shes depressed 4 godz sake! (You're making me depressed)
Draco and I held our pale white hands with black nail polish as we went upstairs. I was wearing red Satanist sings on my nails in red nail polish (AN: c doez dat sound lik a Maru Sue 2 u?) (It sounds retarded, that's what it sounds like). I waved to Vampire. Dark misery was in his depressed eyes. I guess he was jealous of me that I was going out with Draco. (Don't think too much of yourself then!) Anyway, I went upstairs excitedly with Draco (You're both Slytherins, their common room and dormitories are in the dungeons, underneath the Black Lake). We went into his room and locked the door. Then…
We started frenching passively (Frenching passively?) and we took off each others clothes enthusiastically. He felt me up before I took of my top. Then I took off my black leather bra (Eww, sweaty boobies) and he took off his pants. We went on the bed (Bed? Does he not have a coffin?) and started making out naked and then he put his boy's thingy in mine (In your boys thingy? So I was wrong last chapter, you DO have a penis!) and we HAD SEX. (c is dat stupid?) (YES IT IS!)
"Oh Draco, Draco!" I screamed while getting an orgasm (She went back to the orgasm shop to "get one". Is it a buy-one-get-one-free offer?) when all of a sudden I saw a tattoo I had never seen before on Draco's arm. It was a black heart with an arrow through it. On it in bloody gothic writing were the words… Vampire! (That's one word)
I was so angry. (So am I!)
"You bastard!" I shouted angrily, jumping out of the bed.
"No! No! But you don't understand!" Draco pleaded. But I knew too much.
"No, you fucking idiot!" I shouted. "You probably have AIDs anyway!" (Ooh! That's uncalled for! And maybe you should use a condom)
I put on my clothes all huffily and then stomped out. Draco ran out even though he was naked. He had a really big you-know-what (swaying to-and-fro as he followed her) but I was too mad to care (You obviously do). I stomped out and did so until I was in Vampire's classroom where he was having a lesson with Professor Snape and some other people. (Students?)
"VAMPIRE POTTER, YOU MOTHERFUCKER!" I yelled. (Using Albus language are we?)